The Culling of the Meek
A mirrored pair of sonnets64 total reviews
Comment from Cooper Watt
Solid poem, brother.
Thought provoking. Real. I liked it. I had to read it twice to find meaning within some of the heaviness, but like it I did.
You have a deft, skilled hand.
Sincerely,
Coop.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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Solid poem, brother.
Thought provoking. Real. I liked it. I had to read it twice to find meaning within some of the heaviness, but like it I did.
You have a deft, skilled hand.
Sincerely,
Coop.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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Cheers, Coop! I think poetry's as much about flow and rhythm as meaning, heaviness is fun :-). I'm so glad you enjoyed it, mate.
Mike
Comment from Sasha
Although I am not sure I completely understand this poem, I must admit I found it fascinating and thought provoking too. Very deep and leans toward the dark side...something you do quite well.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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Although I am not sure I completely understand this poem, I must admit I found it fascinating and thought provoking too. Very deep and leans toward the dark side...something you do quite well.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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I love to tapdance along the edge of the dark precipice :-). This one's all about the meek inheriting the earth, then the rest of the earth realising they're not actually meek any more! Something like that, anyway. Thank you, my friend :-).
Mike
Comment from JW
Before I had an opportunity to read your poem, I noticed it had already reached Recognized and All Time Best status. Thus, it must be well written. Unfortunately though, I don't get it. Oh well. I don't claim to be a poet. JW :-)
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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Before I had an opportunity to read your poem, I noticed it had already reached Recognized and All Time Best status. Thus, it must be well written. Unfortunately though, I don't get it. Oh well. I don't claim to be a poet. JW :-)
Comment Written 24-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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Thank you, Jonathon. This one's admittedly more obscure than most, but I like to write that way occasionally. It started with the though 'if the meek inherited the earth, would they still be meek?'
Mike
Comment from Nomar Chagrin
I had to read this three times to get the gist of it. It's very deep and builds up inspiration as it goes along. Seems to be a poem about overcoming overwhelming adversity (like armageddan)
I never thought of using the word "lawn" as a verb and it worked well here.
Nice poem.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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I had to read this three times to get the gist of it. It's very deep and builds up inspiration as it goes along. Seems to be a poem about overcoming overwhelming adversity (like armageddan)
I never thought of using the word "lawn" as a verb and it worked well here.
Nice poem.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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Thank you - I'm glad you enjoyed the read :-)
Mike
Comment from missy98writer
Mike,
Your mirrored sonnets are excellently written. Mirrored sonnets are unique. Your rhymes and rhythm are great and your descriptive writing is very good. I enjoy the story you mirrored sonnet tells. Your ominous words paint a terrifying picture in the readers head. Your art work is amazing you used and matched the theme of your mirrored sonnets. You effectively used the poetic devices of alliteration and metaphor. I like your "becoming with light" metaphorical phrase. I especially enjoy your lines: "with viewpoints spawned in legacy's lament of life and all its pain as balance nears. We bred to dominate the flock He sent; we shepherds of defilement thrive on fears." And I also like your lines: "and all the varied portions of the soul those debonair world leaders would deny. Without intent, we freed the Earth and stole their power with a whimper and a sigh." I immensely enjoyed reading your mirrored sonnet. Have a wonderful weekend.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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Mike,
Your mirrored sonnets are excellently written. Mirrored sonnets are unique. Your rhymes and rhythm are great and your descriptive writing is very good. I enjoy the story you mirrored sonnet tells. Your ominous words paint a terrifying picture in the readers head. Your art work is amazing you used and matched the theme of your mirrored sonnets. You effectively used the poetic devices of alliteration and metaphor. I like your "becoming with light" metaphorical phrase. I especially enjoy your lines: "with viewpoints spawned in legacy's lament of life and all its pain as balance nears. We bred to dominate the flock He sent; we shepherds of defilement thrive on fears." And I also like your lines: "and all the varied portions of the soul those debonair world leaders would deny. Without intent, we freed the Earth and stole their power with a whimper and a sigh." I immensely enjoyed reading your mirrored sonnet. Have a wonderful weekend.
Melissa.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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Thank you, Melissa :-). What a wonderful review - I'm so glad you enjoyed my piece.
Mike
Comment from MyYiaYia
When I read the title, I almost didn't want to read the poem. I thought it would be too scary. It was! Of course, it was still excellently written in your own indubitable style. Great! Deb :0)
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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When I read the title, I almost didn't want to read the poem. I thought it would be too scary. It was! Of course, it was still excellently written in your own indubitable style. Great! Deb :0)
Comment Written 24-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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Thank you, Deb :-). Yeah, this was a slightly darker piece!
Mike
Comment from volcomfury
Your picture works well with this poem. I enjoyed the flow and the rhyming scheme very much. Also, your use of powerful words really keep the reader interested.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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Your picture works well with this poem. I enjoyed the flow and the rhyming scheme very much. Also, your use of powerful words really keep the reader interested.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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I do love to use those big words, though some criticise me for it :-)
Mike
Comment from adewpearl
a mirrored sonnet - a fascinating form.
strong rhymes
steady iambic pentameter
good use of enjambment
us shepherds thrive - we shepherds
strong verb choices
love the flow of words like pariah
A powerful piece, Mike. Brooke
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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a mirrored sonnet - a fascinating form.
strong rhymes
steady iambic pentameter
good use of enjambment
us shepherds thrive - we shepherds
strong verb choices
love the flow of words like pariah
A powerful piece, Mike. Brooke
Comment Written 24-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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Thank you, Brooke - for the review, for enjoying, and for catching me on that point of grammar!
Mike :-)
Comment from laren
A deep poem, beautifully written, read aloud to hear better. The deep content, lets think for a while.
But it felt like a call to unity, mutual help. Am I right?
Congratulations!
Laren
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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A deep poem, beautifully written, read aloud to hear better. The deep content, lets think for a while.
But it felt like a call to unity, mutual help. Am I right?
Congratulations!
Laren
Comment Written 24-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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Thank you, Laren. This has a variety of meanings, centering - for me - mostly around the thought 'if the meek inherited the earth, would they still be meek?'
Mike
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Thank you for sharing and for your feedback,
Laren
Comment from chita
Your author notes are superb-you have good imagery and a good flow with your poem-it is definetly very haunting to read-you rhyme well and you are descriptive and write a compelling story within your poem-I love all of your poem and especially where you write(and yet the end of days would come) I agree with this statement--a thought provoking write--great job.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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Your author notes are superb-you have good imagery and a good flow with your poem-it is definetly very haunting to read-you rhyme well and you are descriptive and write a compelling story within your poem-I love all of your poem and especially where you write(and yet the end of days would come) I agree with this statement--a thought provoking write--great job.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2011
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Thank you, Chita - I'm so glad you enjoyed the read :-)
Mike