Steve's Story-Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Poetry in the Blood"A collection of my poems
44 total reviews
Comment from MENNIPLOSS
I like much this poem, I create is a superb writing and it encounter done very well and with pleasing words. many congratulations.
menniploss
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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I like much this poem, I create is a superb writing and it encounter done very well and with pleasing words. many congratulations.
menniploss
Comment Written 09-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Fireshadow
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Steve, this is an excellent entry for the Quatrain Poetry Contest, and I'm sure it will be among the top contenders. As a matter of fact, I predict it will be the winner. Outstanding rhyming pattern and imagery. Wish I had six stars to award, but have none left. My best wishes for a win, my friend.
Ama
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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Steve, this is an excellent entry for the Quatrain Poetry Contest, and I'm sure it will be among the top contenders. As a matter of fact, I predict it will be the winner. Outstanding rhyming pattern and imagery. Wish I had six stars to award, but have none left. My best wishes for a win, my friend.
Ama
Comment Written 09-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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Thanks, Ama. I started out to write a completely different poem about poetic obsession, but the dark side took over!
Comment from adewpearl
I love how you work all the poetic devices
into the rhyme and flow of your quatrains.
fate's final joke, lovely lilt, faint flame - excellent alliteration
Brooke
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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I love how you work all the poetic devices
into the rhyme and flow of your quatrains.
fate's final joke, lovely lilt, faint flame - excellent alliteration
Brooke
Comment Written 09-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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Thanks, Brooke. I started out to write a completely different poem about poetic obsession, but the dark side took over!
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good form and good flow, a great job writing this poem about creating a masterpiece at death and burning it up. there is an excellent picture that would go with this on fanart. just type in diary for the search, it's a table with a mountain view and quill and paper on the table.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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this is very well written with good form and good flow, a great job writing this poem about creating a masterpiece at death and burning it up. there is an excellent picture that would go with this on fanart. just type in diary for the search, it's a table with a mountain view and quill and paper on the table.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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Thanks - I will check out the picture. I'm not very clued up with how to use FanArt and whether art is free etc.
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art is free to use with your poem. just click add picture, type in diary and search. then select the picture
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Thanks!
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Can't find that picture, sadly. Search for diary only brings up 2 items. Have tried a few other searches without success.
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okay, try book, moonwillow for artist, she has one that is a journal, ink and a lantern
Comment from Deejharrington
This is one fabulous Dark poem! It has to be the greatest nightmare of any writer. To pour his life's blood, literally, on to the page. Only to die, and have it all go up in flames. Scary! The words flowed(no pun) wonderfully, with all the different kinds of poetry. With a horrid twist at the end. Very well written!
dj
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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This is one fabulous Dark poem! It has to be the greatest nightmare of any writer. To pour his life's blood, literally, on to the page. Only to die, and have it all go up in flames. Scary! The words flowed(no pun) wonderfully, with all the different kinds of poetry. With a horrid twist at the end. Very well written!
dj
Comment Written 09-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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Thank you. I started out to write a completely different poem about poetic obsession, but the dark side took over!
Comment from the blue pixel
Oh dear Steve. I'm happy to say that I have only scrapped one or two poems in my time and that was before I completed them. I knew they wre stinkers before I got that far. Great rhyme and metre as always. I think I have entered something in this contest and I say I think because it must have been weeks and weeks ago. Best of luck to you. See you in the voting booth. xx Carol
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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Oh dear Steve. I'm happy to say that I have only scrapped one or two poems in my time and that was before I completed them. I knew they wre stinkers before I got that far. Great rhyme and metre as always. I think I have entered something in this contest and I say I think because it must have been weeks and weeks ago. Best of luck to you. See you in the voting booth. xx Carol
Comment Written 09-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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Thanks, Carol. I didn't specifically write this for the contest - just checked out whether or not there was one where it would fit after completing it. I was a little torn between including the last stanza or not... makes it a totally different poem if it is left out!
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That's exactly what I do Steve regarding Contests. They are a bit of 'thing' with me I'm afraid. xx Carol
Comment from KiwiGal
I can only give you Five Stars - apparently - otherwise you would have received Six .... nay, FIFTY!!!!
What a wonderful tale; I was intrigued all the way through - had to look up a couple of words - and when I read the last line, erupted into spontaneous, loud laughter. I'm not sure whether that was appropriate - maybe I should have burst into tears, but I couldn't help myself.
I would give 'fate' a capital F, since it is a name we accord a collective, uncontrollable, probably-imaginary event.
And you could knock out the hyphen between 'candle' and 'light' as it is one word.
You're good, very good. Nice one, mate.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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I can only give you Five Stars - apparently - otherwise you would have received Six .... nay, FIFTY!!!!
What a wonderful tale; I was intrigued all the way through - had to look up a couple of words - and when I read the last line, erupted into spontaneous, loud laughter. I'm not sure whether that was appropriate - maybe I should have burst into tears, but I couldn't help myself.
I would give 'fate' a capital F, since it is a name we accord a collective, uncontrollable, probably-imaginary event.
And you could knock out the hyphen between 'candle' and 'light' as it is one word.
You're good, very good. Nice one, mate.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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Thank you - I started writing a quite different poem about poetic obsession, but the tragic tale just took over! I tossed up over leaving the last stanza off - it actually finishes quite well there, but trialled it on my wife and she hooted with laughter too, so it had to stay.
BTW how can you become my fan if you don't know who I am????
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I don't care who you are - I like your writing, is all - for all I know you pay someone to do this for you..... but besides that, it sounds as though your wife and I have the same sense of humour..
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Not quite what I meant - I am just curious how this anonymity thing works for contests when it seems there might be ways around it.
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Ahhhh, gotcha - I didn't even notice it was a contest entry. No, some contests are 'blind' and others not. It usually says in the prompt if it is.
I suppose there are those who will give top marks to someone just because they like them - or they've got a deal going between them. My Autism one had 24 reviews .. 1 off getting an All Time Best certificate. I asked 4 of my Fans if they could ask someone to read and review it just for the hell of getting the certificate, and I got dead silence, although one told me she was told that "that was not done!". Dunno why - but I guess jealousy is abound here.
If someone had asked me I would have done it for them (if I liked the work).
Luckily I don't care; I realise that you get certificates by paying to put your work out there - and it isn't always the quality that gets ya there... judging by what I've read that's deemed "Exceptional" and has Certificates of Merit!
What's important for you is that your wife and I appreciate your work - the rest is immaterial..hehe
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Yes I know a few people consider the whole voting thing slightly dodgy. I have learned to trust a few reviewers whose opinions I value.
Anyway, my whole point was out of line because I 'thought' this was a 'Blind' contest, but I've checked and it isn't, so my name is displayed anyway.
Thanks again. Au 'voir.
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Er, didn't you ask yourself how I got your name to register as your Fan?
I thought you wanted me to get to know your dog before becoming your fan (or something), which is why I wrote the flippant "don't care who you are". I knew who you were because your name was next to the title - as you've just found out. I'm way ahead of you....
Comment from Chris Tee
Bravo!!
A masterpiece!!
This is a good entry and should go far.
The rhyme and flow is good.
I wish you the best in the contest
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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Bravo!!
A masterpiece!!
This is a good entry and should go far.
The rhyme and flow is good.
I wish you the best in the contest
Comment Written 09-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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Thank you - I started writing a quite different poem about poetic obsession, but the tragic tale just took over!
Comment from Deorre Leonard
Great contest entry Poetry in the blood is a good read. The structure the presentation is great. This is very expressive you did a good job.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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Great contest entry Poetry in the blood is a good read. The structure the presentation is great. This is very expressive you did a good job.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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Thank you - I started writing a quite different poem about poetic obsession, but the tragic tale just took over!
Comment from Kevin C
This is so well written. I like your rhymes which are not forced. The flow is great and you captivate the reader throughout. Great write.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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This is so well written. I like your rhymes which are not forced. The flow is great and you captivate the reader throughout. Great write.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2011
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Thank you - I started writing a quite different poem about poetic obsession, but the tragic tale just took over!