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Viewing comments for Chapter 34 "The Tribute"...musings on us
46 total reviews
Comment from Kashif Ali Abbas
Your writing was a powerful biographical note, the style is such that it keeps the interest of the reader in the story. Your method of narration is quite classy and enjoyable
well done
K
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2010
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Your writing was a powerful biographical note, the style is such that it keeps the interest of the reader in the story. Your method of narration is quite classy and enjoyable
well done
K
Comment Written 20-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2010
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Thank you for reading and your generous review. I appreciate your comments.
Comment from humpwhistle
Writing one's own eulogy seems to me to be an exercise fraught with pitfalls---pride, modesty, self-deprecation---tricky things to balance. I find it interesting that you put the words in your daughter's mouth. I would have tackled this from the "I" perspective rather than "he." It will be interesting to see how others handled it. Best of luck with the voting. Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2010
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Writing one's own eulogy seems to me to be an exercise fraught with pitfalls---pride, modesty, self-deprecation---tricky things to balance. I find it interesting that you put the words in your daughter's mouth. I would have tackled this from the "I" perspective rather than "he." It will be interesting to see how others handled it. Best of luck with the voting. Peace, Lee
Comment Written 20-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2010
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You are absolutely right; this was daunting - using my daughter to speak just made sense to me - I won't be at my own funeral! ;)
Comment from Juliette Chamberlain
So, she wont read it, even after you went to so much trouble? I suppose that is understandable, and no doubt she will garner a few ideas from what you have written.
I must be a very odd thing to write one's own eulogy, but you seem to have done it very well.
Hope it won't have to be considered for a good number of years.
Juliette
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So, she wont read it, even after you went to so much trouble? I suppose that is understandable, and no doubt she will garner a few ideas from what you have written.
I must be a very odd thing to write one's own eulogy, but you seem to have done it very well.
Hope it won't have to be considered for a good number of years.
Juliette
Comment Written 20-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2010
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Thank you for reading and the generous review - well, if she doesn't read what I wrote - at least she knows what I expect; but funerals and memorials are not for the dead - they are for those that are left behind! Thank you for your kind comments.
Comment from adewpearl
would be complimented by the most delicious wine - complemented
I like how you place this eulogy in a framing story of the funeral, and I particularly like the story about getting to drink wine again, which is warmly funny and so unique to this woman's mother, not the "normal" stuff you expect a child to say about how her mother was always there for her children, etc. Good luck in the contest :-) Brooke
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would be complimented by the most delicious wine - complemented
I like how you place this eulogy in a framing story of the funeral, and I particularly like the story about getting to drink wine again, which is warmly funny and so unique to this woman's mother, not the "normal" stuff you expect a child to say about how her mother was always there for her children, etc. Good luck in the contest :-) Brooke
Comment Written 20-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2010
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Thank you for reading and the generous review - I will go and fix the spelling on "complemented."
Comment from c_lucas
This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. There are very good thoughts in this Eulogy. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2010
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This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. There are very good thoughts in this Eulogy. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2010
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Thank you for reading and the generous review - I appreciate your well wishes.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Rama Rao
An excellent and well written euology about your mother. It made fine reading.
However, a few suggestions:
eyes, stepped up up to- delete the comma.
Looking down, or watching- comma may be deleted.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2010
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An excellent and well written euology about your mother. It made fine reading.
However, a few suggestions:
eyes, stepped up up to- delete the comma.
Looking down, or watching- comma may be deleted.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2010
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Thank you for reading and the generous review - appreciate the feedback and suggestions - I will see what I can do.
Comment from Kentucky Jim
I think this is extremely well written. And it is a moving story. There were no errors in grammar that would divert me from following along, as the story, all too familiar to me, wound through the feelings and events that life presents to us; and so, you anticipate the reader's emotions very nicely. All in all, an excellent work.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2010
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I think this is extremely well written. And it is a moving story. There were no errors in grammar that would divert me from following along, as the story, all too familiar to me, wound through the feelings and events that life presents to us; and so, you anticipate the reader's emotions very nicely. All in all, an excellent work.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2010
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Thank you for reading, and for your generous review. I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Author,
What a wonderful idea for a eulogy. I hope my children remember me the same. You wrote this very well and I enjoyed it from beginning to end. Well done and good luck in the contest...blessings, chey
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2010
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Hi Author,
What a wonderful idea for a eulogy. I hope my children remember me the same. You wrote this very well and I enjoyed it from beginning to end. Well done and good luck in the contest...blessings, chey
Comment Written 20-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2010
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Thank you for reading and your generous review.
Comment from Shirley B
This is beautiful. I was touched by your story. I am so glad ofcourse that you are not dead. I am sure this took much soul searching to find the things you wanted to say about yourself. This is well written. I understand why your daughter would want to share loving stories of you, But I also see why you would want to share this heart warming story, Shirley
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This is beautiful. I was touched by your story. I am so glad ofcourse that you are not dead. I am sure this took much soul searching to find the things you wanted to say about yourself. This is well written. I understand why your daughter would want to share loving stories of you, But I also see why you would want to share this heart warming story, Shirley
Comment Written 19-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2010
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THANK YOU for the generous review. I appreciate it greatly.
Comment from Lois Delaney
This is a lovely Eulogy. I wondered at the idea whether a child or family member would read a prepared Eulogy from the one who lay in the casket. You really put a lot of thought into this. I wanted to write for this contest, but I'm now glad I didn't. This is very competitive and I would have been let down one more time. Great job, and best wishes. This is really good.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2010
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This is a lovely Eulogy. I wondered at the idea whether a child or family member would read a prepared Eulogy from the one who lay in the casket. You really put a lot of thought into this. I wanted to write for this contest, but I'm now glad I didn't. This is very competitive and I would have been let down one more time. Great job, and best wishes. This is really good.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2010
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Thank you for reading and the generous review. Thank you for your kind words.