Flash Fiction
Viewing comments for Chapter 41 "The Thunder Roared"Collection of Flash, Micro, etc.
59 total reviews
Comment from BJean
It is wonderful getting comfort from a husband who tenderly reaches out with understanding, especially when one did not receive that as a child. Very well written micro fiction story, Carol.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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It is wonderful getting comfort from a husband who tenderly reaches out with understanding, especially when one did not receive that as a child. Very well written micro fiction story, Carol.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Jean,
Thank you so much for the kindness. Yes, being comforted is a warm wonderful feeling especially if one wasn't nurtured as a child. Smiles to you, Carol
Comment from highlander104
A good entry into the contest. Your descriptions of the tornado and your childhood fears bring the story to life. A nice ending having someone you love comfort you as you relive that time through a nightmare.
Good luck in the contest.
Jean K.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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A good entry into the contest. Your descriptions of the tornado and your childhood fears bring the story to life. A nice ending having someone you love comfort you as you relive that time through a nightmare.
Good luck in the contest.
Jean K.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Jean,
Thanks so much for understanding and for the generous review. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Belinda
You got me fooled (again). I thought it was her father, whereas years have passed and she has not conquered her fear. Where does the change happen? In the paragraph "Quiet settled" or "Moments later"? In case of the latter, I think it's better if you omit the "Moments later". Just a suggestion.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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You got me fooled (again). I thought it was her father, whereas years have passed and she has not conquered her fear. Where does the change happen? In the paragraph "Quiet settled" or "Moments later"? In case of the latter, I think it's better if you omit the "Moments later". Just a suggestion.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Belinda,
In a tornado, it becomes eerily calm before it strikes and then the sound is like a freight train rushing through your house...so the change comes with the Light flooding through the room. Thanks so much for the review. Smiles, Carol
Comment from --Turtle.
Good job with this short micro fiction, I think. I read this and enjoyed it, got a good image of the fear, and the transition of the past and present reactions to a traumatic event.
(Booming thunder rattled the house(,) and I screamed)
might even be more impacting as two sentences.)
Good job with this though. I liked.
--Turtle.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Good job with this short micro fiction, I think. I read this and enjoyed it, got a good image of the fear, and the transition of the past and present reactions to a traumatic event.
(Booming thunder rattled the house(,) and I screamed)
might even be more impacting as two sentences.)
Good job with this though. I liked.
--Turtle.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Turtle,
Wow! and Double Wow! What can I say but thank you...I'm thrilled you enjoyed it and I did make it into two sentences. Have a great day! Smiles, Carol
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is a good piece. You took care to do a proper editing as i could not detect any flaws. The theme is well developed, even though there is no serious plot. Just good. cheers
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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This is a good piece. You took care to do a proper editing as i could not detect any flaws. The theme is well developed, even though there is no serious plot. Just good. cheers
Comment Written 26-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Perp,
200 words limits the choices but I'm glad that you enjoyed it. Smiles to you, Carol
Comment from jadapenn
So, after all those years the tornado still comes to haunt you. You told this story well. It is frightening what memories we carry around with us.
Well done, my friend. Best wishes for the contest. luv jada
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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So, after all those years the tornado still comes to haunt you. You told this story well. It is frightening what memories we carry around with us.
Well done, my friend. Best wishes for the contest. luv jada
Comment Written 26-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Jada,
Thank you so much for enjoying. I remember for years and years I dreamt I was falling. I'd wake up with a jolt. Terrifying...Smiles to you, Carol
Comment from dmjones
Another good story. I forgot a tornado sounds like a freight train. I saw a small one once in Texas but it was 3 miles so I've never actually heard one. It threw me a bit when I got there, so it made the ending a good surprise.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Another good story. I forgot a tornado sounds like a freight train. I saw a small one once in Texas but it was 3 miles so I've never actually heard one. It threw me a bit when I got there, so it made the ending a good surprise.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Donna,
Yes, it is a terrifying experience. Thanks for the kind review as always. Smiles, Carol
Comment from ms. cardshark
Well done tale of a remembered fright. The ending surprised us when it didn't end with the little girl. Good luck in the contest.
MM
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Well done tale of a remembered fright. The ending surprised us when it didn't end with the little girl. Good luck in the contest.
MM
Comment Written 26-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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MM,
Glad you were surprised by the change in time..Thanks again for the generous review. Smiles, CArol
Comment from Mariea
A good piece of writing. Even us 'big' kids have our terrors to overcome. Character well portrayed and consistent throughout. No glitches apparent.
Have a great day
Regards Mia
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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A good piece of writing. Even us 'big' kids have our terrors to overcome. Character well portrayed and consistent throughout. No glitches apparent.
Have a great day
Regards Mia
Comment Written 26-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Mia,
Thank you so much for the wonderful review. I appreciate it very much. Carol
Comment from patwannabe
Carol, You really do have an ending string of stories and they're all good. What an imagination, how prolific you are. Great Scott, girl, keep 'em coming. pat
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Carol, You really do have an ending string of stories and they're all good. What an imagination, how prolific you are. Great Scott, girl, keep 'em coming. pat
Comment Written 26-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2010
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Pat,
Now if I could just get some publisher to enjoy them as well...Thanks for the wonderful review and fantastic comments. Smiles, Carol
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Heavens, Carol,I meant to say UNending string of stories. Hope you read 'btl' (between the lines). Sooorrrrry! pat
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Pat,
Yes, no worries...I was pretty sure what you meant...or what I wanted it to mean anyways..LOL Smiles, Carol
