POEMS, SONGS AND NOTES
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "With Each Day"When I dabble at things.....
50 total reviews
Comment from Summer Falls
Carol, this was lovely, albeit sad. The image you created with the person walking through the garden with two coffee cups then not having the loved one to share it with was enough to bring a tear to my eye.
The poem's flow is perfecto! (how's that for technical?)
Girl, you certainly are a very, very strong contender in this contest. I really wish you the best, because this really deserves a win. It is excellent.
Summer
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2009
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Carol, this was lovely, albeit sad. The image you created with the person walking through the garden with two coffee cups then not having the loved one to share it with was enough to bring a tear to my eye.
The poem's flow is perfecto! (how's that for technical?)
Girl, you certainly are a very, very strong contender in this contest. I really wish you the best, because this really deserves a win. It is excellent.
Summer
Comment Written 06-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2009
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Summer...
Awesome review...Can't tell you how many have been outstanding (makes my head spin from the praise), but I don't ever count on those votes...instead I will be pleased and overwhelmed by my friends comments.
Thanks you ever so much. Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This was absolutely wonderful. You are one of the best when it comes to evoking emotion with your readers. Holy cow. After I wipe the tears, I'll try to continue. You did a great job.
LOL
Barbara
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2009
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This was absolutely wonderful. You are one of the best when it comes to evoking emotion with your readers. Holy cow. After I wipe the tears, I'll try to continue. You did a great job.
LOL
Barbara
Comment Written 06-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2009
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Barbara...
Awesome...you simply made my day. Thanks for the wonderful comment. I certainly try to put my best effort into it...but it doesn't seem to work with contests. But that doesn't matter because I simply appreciate your words.
Thanks again - Carol
Comment from Phil Kitom
Well if I were judging this contest I would make you
the winner. This is such an affective poem that really
gets to the feelings of despair with the death of a loved one. You have carried the bitter tears of sorrow through your work and painted a sad picture of grief. The artwork, though good cannot compare to the emotion that you have described in this poem. Wonderful work...
I am only sorry I don't have a six to award.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2009
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Well if I were judging this contest I would make you
the winner. This is such an affective poem that really
gets to the feelings of despair with the death of a loved one. You have carried the bitter tears of sorrow through your work and painted a sad picture of grief. The artwork, though good cannot compare to the emotion that you have described in this poem. Wonderful work...
I am only sorry I don't have a six to award.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2009
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Phil...
Your virtual six means more to me than you know. As for the contest, well..that's always another story. Thanks for all the kind and generous thoughts. I truly appreciate them.
Your friend, Carol
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It frustrates me that there is a limit for you deserve a six for this. I try to hold on to mine as long as I can, but if something moves me then I have no hesitation in awarding it. There is a lot of humdrum things that to be honest I cannot understand the workings of their mind and I have written a poem about reviewing which I intend to publish. take care dear friend.
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Between you and Barbara Wilkey...my head is about to burst. Can't wipe the smile from my face. Thanks, Phil. Youhave a wonderful day. Carol
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Begin Again,
you have shown us the deep distributing emotions of
heart break which is brewing a storm with you mind and soul (when you said)-
Lightning bolts, spears of pain
Attack my shattered heart.
Sobs of sorrow, thunderous roar
Because of death, we part.
Gert
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2009
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Hello Begin Again,
you have shown us the deep distributing emotions of
heart break which is brewing a storm with you mind and soul (when you said)-
Lightning bolts, spears of pain
Attack my shattered heart.
Sobs of sorrow, thunderous roar
Because of death, we part.
Gert
Comment Written 06-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2009
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Gert...
Thanks for reviewing for your kind comments. I greatly appreciate them. Carol
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Carol you are welcome
Gert
Comment from words
Well done description of grief.
You conveyed the lonliness, heartbreak and anger well.
Especially liked:Next will come the hopelessness,
The inability to care,
The thought of senseless living
Without your love to share.
Lightning bolts, spears of pain
Attack my shattered heart.
Sobs of sorrow, thunderous roar
Because of death, we part.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2009
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Well done description of grief.
You conveyed the lonliness, heartbreak and anger well.
Especially liked:Next will come the hopelessness,
The inability to care,
The thought of senseless living
Without your love to share.
Lightning bolts, spears of pain
Attack my shattered heart.
Sobs of sorrow, thunderous roar
Because of death, we part.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2009
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Words...
Thanks for reviewing and for all your kind words. I especially liked that stanza two.
Carol
Comment from anabelle
Lovely, lovely poem Begin Again. I love the way you begin with the morning sun and the cheerfulness which accompanies it. And you enter the garden with two coffee cups, to find it empty. The sense of loss solidifies and a 'storm brews' and intensifies and there is lightning. Maybe tomorrow will be better.
Very well done. Regards, anabelle
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2009
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Lovely, lovely poem Begin Again. I love the way you begin with the morning sun and the cheerfulness which accompanies it. And you enter the garden with two coffee cups, to find it empty. The sense of loss solidifies and a 'storm brews' and intensifies and there is lightning. Maybe tomorrow will be better.
Very well done. Regards, anabelle
Comment Written 06-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2009
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Anabelle..
You saw exactly what I was trying to say...Bright new beginning until you remember...
Thanks for reading and for the comments. Carol
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So glad I got it. I don't always you know! :-)
Comment from filmoreodragon
Excellent poem and why resist hope? Sounds like a very good idea to me. It is a good description of the grieving process. Good rhythm and rhyme.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2009
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Excellent poem and why resist hope? Sounds like a very good idea to me. It is a good description of the grieving process. Good rhythm and rhyme.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2009
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filmoredragon...
Thanks for review and for the comments. You are right...with out a glimmer of hope there is no future.
Thanks again - Carol
Comment from frelanz
WOW...great poem. Sad words, but excellent to read. Well written. Great words chosen. Artwork is awesome too!!! I enjoyed this very much. Excellent job on this...it's perfect...
Dawn
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2009
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WOW...great poem. Sad words, but excellent to read. Well written. Great words chosen. Artwork is awesome too!!! I enjoyed this very much. Excellent job on this...it's perfect...
Dawn
Comment Written 06-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2009
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Dawn..
Thank you for starting my morning off with such nice praise. I appreciate your kind review. Thanks again Carol
Comment from Joan E.
Your poem about the emotions surrounding the loss of a loved one is very evocative. I enjoyed your metaphors including "storm, bolts, spears" and your personification of "sun." I also liked your "shattered heart" hyperbole.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2009
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Your poem about the emotions surrounding the loss of a loved one is very evocative. I enjoyed your metaphors including "storm, bolts, spears" and your personification of "sun." I also liked your "shattered heart" hyperbole.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2009
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Joan..
I am glad you enjoyed my poem. Sometimes our sorrow becomes overwhelming but as the poem reads, we just must try again tomorrow. Thanks again - Carol
Comment from second thought
This short script is so well expressed I could barely hold myself down. Gosh,will I ever be able to write like that. "lighting bolts,spears of pain attack my shatter heart..." Wow! Almost every line hold deep meaning. Quote after quote if separated individually only enhances the beauty of poet that has reach for the zenth of expression. Believe me I want to find something to question, something to say it could have been another way. But, the more I read it the more I'm impressed. Summary: LOVE IT.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2009
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This short script is so well expressed I could barely hold myself down. Gosh,will I ever be able to write like that. "lighting bolts,spears of pain attack my shatter heart..." Wow! Almost every line hold deep meaning. Quote after quote if separated individually only enhances the beauty of poet that has reach for the zenth of expression. Believe me I want to find something to question, something to say it could have been another way. But, the more I read it the more I'm impressed. Summary: LOVE IT.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2009
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2009
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Second thought...
Awesome...that's how I feel this morning after your gracious review. Thanks so much for making my day and for review and enjoying the poem. Thanks again - Carol