CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "A Plea"A collection of poetry
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Comment from rmdelta
Sue, you don't even come close to the root of the problem, my friend. Shortly,I'll be posting a story that'll make you want to pull out your hair, take off your clothes and jump in the shower--while you still have water to bathe with. lol
I agree, of course, with everything you wrote here. Well done/
Reggie
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Sue, you don't even come close to the root of the problem, my friend. Shortly,I'll be posting a story that'll make you want to pull out your hair, take off your clothes and jump in the shower--while you still have water to bathe with. lol
I agree, of course, with everything you wrote here. Well done/
Reggie
Comment Written 10-Apr-2009
Comment from Judian James
I have no desire to get into any kind of political debate, so I will just rate your poem as such. Very well rhymed and metered. I hope it was cathartic for you. These are scary times but remember, the pendulum always swings.
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I have no desire to get into any kind of political debate, so I will just rate your poem as such. Very well rhymed and metered. I hope it was cathartic for you. These are scary times but remember, the pendulum always swings.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2009
Comment from rhymelord
Dear Sue,
I won't buy in to the argument you so eloquently present and just stick to the poetic critique, which is no crits at all. Although you say there is no set metre, it nevertheless runs very well.
Regards
Reg
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Dear Sue,
I won't buy in to the argument you so eloquently present and just stick to the poetic critique, which is no crits at all. Although you say there is no set metre, it nevertheless runs very well.
Regards
Reg
Comment Written 10-Apr-2009
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is a very potent message to a nation in distress. The poem is well structured, and the meaning is very clearly spelt out. I like the nice rhymes. kudos
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This is a very potent message to a nation in distress. The poem is well structured, and the meaning is very clearly spelt out. I like the nice rhymes. kudos
Comment Written 10-Apr-2009
Comment from Roisin
Hi Sue,
Well, you certainly seem to write your best poetry when you're on your soapbox! I enjoyed this poem - very informative and your passion about the subject shines through. Your rhymes are great and complex in places and despite you saying there's no set meter, it flows very well. I enjoyed your notes too. A pleasure to read. Happy Easter to you.
Hugs
Roisin
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Hi Sue,
Well, you certainly seem to write your best poetry when you're on your soapbox! I enjoyed this poem - very informative and your passion about the subject shines through. Your rhymes are great and complex in places and despite you saying there's no set meter, it flows very well. I enjoyed your notes too. A pleasure to read. Happy Easter to you.
Hugs
Roisin
Comment Written 10-Apr-2009
Comment from jmyron
Preaching to the choir in my case pretty lady. I would like to recommend a book to you if you like science fiction. It is by L. Neil Smith, and it is called 'The Probability Broach.' Smith is a card carrying Libertarian, and what he does to this alternate history is hilarious.
John
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Preaching to the choir in my case pretty lady. I would like to recommend a book to you if you like science fiction. It is by L. Neil Smith, and it is called 'The Probability Broach.' Smith is a card carrying Libertarian, and what he does to this alternate history is hilarious.
John
Comment Written 10-Apr-2009
Comment from rama devi
A very strong, emphatic plea-poem. Well timed an rhymed and rhymed, and also tactfully presented with apt artwork and bold color scheme.
A potent post! And the author's notes too.
Applause for your message, Sue, so well delivered.
NO spags.
Warm Regards,
rama devi
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A very strong, emphatic plea-poem. Well timed an rhymed and rhymed, and also tactfully presented with apt artwork and bold color scheme.
A potent post! And the author's notes too.
Applause for your message, Sue, so well delivered.
NO spags.
Warm Regards,
rama devi
Comment Written 10-Apr-2009
Comment from NightWriter
"A Plea" won't cause me a stroke, but it sure is a god poem that points to what's going on here. The debt is beyond anything I can grasp. Everyone hopes those in power know what they are doing. Well said.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2009
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"A Plea" won't cause me a stroke, but it sure is a god poem that points to what's going on here. The debt is beyond anything I can grasp. Everyone hopes those in power know what they are doing. Well said.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2009
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NightWriter, I'm glad you did not suffer a stroke! Ha! On my last political poem, I was called "Anti-American" and "racist". Have no idea how that came about! That's why I put that little note down there. :-)) I do love America so much. And don't want corruption to rule our treasury. That's all. Thanks much for your review. Sue :-)
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Thanks Sue! I've read a lot of your good writing here, and one thing that comes in perfectly clear is how much you love your country. It's interesting how we all read different things. The same words, but meaning different things to different people. I guess that's part of the magic of reading and writing because it's such a unique and personal experience for everyone. :)
Best wishes!
Steve
Comment from honeytree
Well being an Aussie,we are in a way are in the same boat over here. I do think some of the stimulous packages will work here. I believe the bank bosses should have their pay packets sliced.
I feel governments should own all banks and they can if they want to.
I don't believe the struggling public should be insecure.
Honeytree.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2009
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Well being an Aussie,we are in a way are in the same boat over here. I do think some of the stimulous packages will work here. I believe the bank bosses should have their pay packets sliced.
I feel governments should own all banks and they can if they want to.
I don't believe the struggling public should be insecure.
Honeytree.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2009
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I agree with you on your points. Except I would like to add that I lived in Australia when Bob Hawke was PM. The only way for a businesses to get loans was to go to the NAB or Westpac or a couple of others. When Paul Keating opened up Australia to foreign banks to lend, it opened up Australia in a huge way. It also caused the always-high interest rates for everyone there to drop dramatically, as there was competition. I'm hoping that Australia doesn't have the real estate crash we've had here. Australia will be OK because it doesn't have the strong booms/busts we have here (due to a stronger fiscal policy). Thanks much for your review and your own comments. Sue
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I really enjoyed what you wrote and I agree with you. We live in very different times today. To have money to by food, milk,pay the bills and kids school fees will be even more difficult in the future. I don't believe myself that althogh it is their money need to have millions of dollars as people within our world are hungry. I don't know the outcome but we as ahuman race need to love others and stop hating others because of religion, race or job, or color of ones skin. Their should be no war now. Honeytree
Comment from ibex
Bravo. The piece reads like a jackhammer banging away at the sludge of ineptitude and greed. When a poet achieves a moral force with her work, then bravo for she has achieved what the ancient Greeks said poetry was intended to be.
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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2009
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Bravo. The piece reads like a jackhammer banging away at the sludge of ineptitude and greed. When a poet achieves a moral force with her work, then bravo for she has achieved what the ancient Greeks said poetry was intended to be.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2009
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ibex, lately it has been difficult for me to write about anything without thinking first of our dire situation. Seems my "happy voice" has been displaced with the need to write about the insidious and incestuous powers that are trying to pull the blinders over our eyes. Thank you so much for your own comments in response. And thank you for your very generous review. With regards, Sue