CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from rhymer1
The enjambment you achieve here is outstanding (and I love enjambment), your word choies exemplary and your rymes perfect. The only deficiencies are bordering on revese syntax in three spots to place your rhymes where they belong, and the addition of the boring word {do} once to achieve the meter/flow of the line. You should edit to eliminate the latter.
All in all so close in my assessment to outstanding I would rate it 6*, but I lack one to award. Slainte, rhymer1
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The enjambment you achieve here is outstanding (and I love enjambment), your word choies exemplary and your rymes perfect. The only deficiencies are bordering on revese syntax in three spots to place your rhymes where they belong, and the addition of the boring word {do} once to achieve the meter/flow of the line. You should edit to eliminate the latter.
All in all so close in my assessment to outstanding I would rate it 6*, but I lack one to award. Slainte, rhymer1
Comment Written 22-Mar-2009
Comment from jclark
Once again, your excellent writing has captured the true "artist" and their amazing contributions. I am often taken aback by how much talent exists right here at FS.
Adding the 3D artwork was a brilliant decision and speaks nicely to your work. Best of luck in the contest. I think you are very talented!!
Judy
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Once again, your excellent writing has captured the true "artist" and their amazing contributions. I am often taken aback by how much talent exists right here at FS.
Adding the 3D artwork was a brilliant decision and speaks nicely to your work. Best of luck in the contest. I think you are very talented!!
Judy
Comment Written 22-Mar-2009
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Sue....there are so many kinds of artists but I usually think of my son when I hear the word. He is a good artist who has stopped painting for lack of time. Working and raising a family does not always lend itself to creativity. He always use to tell me I could paint if I wanted to. He believed since I was musically inclined I could also paint. He forced me to paint a picture....don't even ask me how that turned out! I like this poem...you did an excellent job of meeting the challenge. Good luck in the contest....blessings....chey
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Hi Sue....there are so many kinds of artists but I usually think of my son when I hear the word. He is a good artist who has stopped painting for lack of time. Working and raising a family does not always lend itself to creativity. He always use to tell me I could paint if I wanted to. He believed since I was musically inclined I could also paint. He forced me to paint a picture....don't even ask me how that turned out! I like this poem...you did an excellent job of meeting the challenge. Good luck in the contest....blessings....chey
Comment Written 22-Mar-2009
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Sixteezkid ...
It is with pleasure that I award the 6th star for this well-written poem which it has been a pleasure to read.
There is nothing to suggest changing and the lines which I like most are ...
The passion artists do possess
Compels and drives them to express
I believe this is true of art in any form, including writing.
Thank you for sharing this with us. As it is a Contest entry, I wish you well.
With love from .... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2009
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Hullo Sixteezkid ...
It is with pleasure that I award the 6th star for this well-written poem which it has been a pleasure to read.
There is nothing to suggest changing and the lines which I like most are ...
The passion artists do possess
Compels and drives them to express
I believe this is true of art in any form, including writing.
Thank you for sharing this with us. As it is a Contest entry, I wish you well.
With love from .... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2009
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Nanette Mary,
So sorry for the belated response. Have not been on for over a day.
Your 6 stars for my poem means so much. As with all arts, we do strive to express and I am so glad you deemed this one to receive your highest regard.
Thank you so much for your most generous review.
From my heart,
Sue
Comment from jaeladarling
What a great poem - and with such a wonderful picture to go with it. That type of art intrigues me! You have beautifully expressed an artist's role. I can't imagine life without art! Thanks so much for sharing, and congrats on the "All Time Best" status!
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What a great poem - and with such a wonderful picture to go with it. That type of art intrigues me! You have beautifully expressed an artist's role. I can't imagine life without art! Thanks so much for sharing, and congrats on the "All Time Best" status!
Comment Written 22-Mar-2009
Comment from raimie
Wonderful piece! And that photo, is the ground painted that three dimensional painintg? Awesome to look at and awesome to read.
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Wonderful piece! And that photo, is the ground painted that three dimensional painintg? Awesome to look at and awesome to read.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2009
Comment from allborn66
This is a great poem - I like the sonnet feel even if it isn't really one. (I'm really bad when it comes to the rules.) It has a wonderful flow. I like the rhyme. The picture is great.
Barbara
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This is a great poem - I like the sonnet feel even if it isn't really one. (I'm really bad when it comes to the rules.) It has a wonderful flow. I like the rhyme. The picture is great.
Barbara
Comment Written 22-Mar-2009
Comment from Rottie
Your poem was most expertly penned. But, then again they always are. Have you seen other art work like this in city sidewalks and parks? Just awesome! Great job on both my friend, your rhyme was superb!
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Your poem was most expertly penned. But, then again they always are. Have you seen other art work like this in city sidewalks and parks? Just awesome! Great job on both my friend, your rhyme was superb!
Comment Written 22-Mar-2009
Comment from jkhudson
A very good entry into this contes. The flowis reallygreat. Most often when a poem that has throughout been 4 lines to a verse and ends in two, it really bothers me, but not here, here it demands to be ended this way. Great job and good luck in the contest!
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A very good entry into this contes. The flowis reallygreat. Most often when a poem that has throughout been 4 lines to a verse and ends in two, it really bothers me, but not here, here it demands to be ended this way. Great job and good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 22-Mar-2009
Comment from joan marie
Excellent descpription of art and how it is incorporated into our lives even if we are not aware of it. We interpret things with our own perspective all the time, from the smallest leaf to the largest statue. joan marie
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Excellent descpription of art and how it is incorporated into our lives even if we are not aware of it. We interpret things with our own perspective all the time, from the smallest leaf to the largest statue. joan marie
Comment Written 22-Mar-2009