CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 108 "Special Edition"A collection of poetry
45 total reviews
Comment from Brian S. Pratt
The First Edition ~ that's your pedigree
Untouched, pristine; no story does it tell.
Successor to this print, you are so free
To be fulfilled; in loving hands to dwell.
--liked this part. good word usage.
good poem and enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2009
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The First Edition ~ that's your pedigree
Untouched, pristine; no story does it tell.
Successor to this print, you are so free
To be fulfilled; in loving hands to dwell.
--liked this part. good word usage.
good poem and enjoyed it.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2009
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Hi Brian, thanks so much for your read and review. So glad you enjoyed it! Very much appreciated. Sue
Comment from allborn66
This is a very nice poem. I like the rhyming sequence. It has a very nice flow. I love the theme. The picture goes great.
Barbara
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2009
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This is a very nice poem. I like the rhyming sequence. It has a very nice flow. I love the theme. The picture goes great.
Barbara
Comment Written 09-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2009
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allborn66, Thank you for your very kind compliments and review. Much appreciated! ... Sue
Comment from AlvinTEthington
A perfect English sonnet. Excellent execution of iambic pentameter and abab cdcd efef gg rhyme scheme. There is a turn at the ninth line, as is correct. The concluding couplet sums up the poem. I like the mystery of the poem--are you personifying a book or are you comparing a person to a book? I like that multivalence (if I am reading correctly the ambiguity as intended!)
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2009
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A perfect English sonnet. Excellent execution of iambic pentameter and abab cdcd efef gg rhyme scheme. There is a turn at the ninth line, as is correct. The concluding couplet sums up the poem. I like the mystery of the poem--are you personifying a book or are you comparing a person to a book? I like that multivalence (if I am reading correctly the ambiguity as intended!)
Comment Written 08-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2009
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This is my 2nd English sonnet and to hear your great review is so gratifying. I do love the rhythm of this form very much. It's personifying the book. Wish I could take credit for an intended multivalence..ha! You "read" and review so well and I appreciate that. Again, thank you for your very kind compliments. Sue
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I thought it probably was personifying a book, but poetry can both reveal and veil reality, and you do that well here.
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Yes, it can...and I DO try! Thank you. Sue
Comment from Oatmeal
SIXTEEZKID,
the theme was good. The flow was nice. everything seemed to go well except that the first stanza did not rhyme-
I see you sitting there amongst your friends.
So handsome, though your jacket shows a tear. beer, fear, near, dear
Though many of your pages have tipped ends,
How could you be so loved without this wear. glare, there, stare, mare
Everything else was clean. Comprehensible and very professionally written.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2009
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SIXTEEZKID,
the theme was good. The flow was nice. everything seemed to go well except that the first stanza did not rhyme-
I see you sitting there amongst your friends.
So handsome, though your jacket shows a tear. beer, fear, near, dear
Though many of your pages have tipped ends,
How could you be so loved without this wear. glare, there, stare, mare
Everything else was clean. Comprehensible and very professionally written.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 08-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2009
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I'm sorry you mis-read, Oatmeal. The word tear is like a "torn" jacket. The jacket has a tear in it. Not a tear (like crying). Thank you for your great review and compliments! :-)) Sue
Comment from NightWriter
"Special Edition" is a beautifully written poem with perfect rhythm and rhyming. Sonnets are the more difficult for me to read, but I read yours very well.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2009
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"Special Edition" is a beautifully written poem with perfect rhythm and rhyming. Sonnets are the more difficult for me to read, but I read yours very well.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2009
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Oh, what a wonderful compliment! Thank you so much for this lovely review. So glad you enjoyed it. :-)) Sue
Comment from Joan E.
I loved the personification of the book. It took me until the third line to catch on (I'm still jet lagged from Viet Nam). I think it's remarkable that you accomplished this so well within the confines of an English sonnet--not any easy task--and your rhymes were so pure.
Books are my friends; so, your poem really resonated for me.
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I loved the personification of the book. It took me until the third line to catch on (I'm still jet lagged from Viet Nam). I think it's remarkable that you accomplished this so well within the confines of an English sonnet--not any easy task--and your rhymes were so pure.
Books are my friends; so, your poem really resonated for me.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2009
Comment from FredCollingwood
Iambic pentmeter is difficult to write, but it's worth the effort, because it's so beautiful. Thank you for sharing this.
Fred
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2009
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Iambic pentmeter is difficult to write, but it's worth the effort, because it's so beautiful. Thank you for sharing this.
Fred
Comment Written 08-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2009
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Fred, thank you so much for this very fine review. Yes, it is worth it! My 2nd try and I know I'll be writing more. Thank you again for your lovely compliments. With regards, Sue
Comment from jshep
Absolutely lovely, Sue. You have aced the sonnet and given such fantastic descriptions of books and how precious they are. An excellent entry. 'New mates await you'- love that line, but then there are some books we cannot bear to part with. Thanks for entering and good luck. Joyce
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2009
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Absolutely lovely, Sue. You have aced the sonnet and given such fantastic descriptions of books and how precious they are. An excellent entry. 'New mates await you'- love that line, but then there are some books we cannot bear to part with. Thanks for entering and good luck. Joyce
Comment Written 08-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2009
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Oh, yeah. There are some books I won't part with - Ha! No way! Thank you for this wonderful review! This is my 2nd sonnet. Whew! Tough one, but it's easier when you write about something you love! Much appreciated :-)) Sue
Comment from Jazh
A lovely sonnet, Sue. I like the idea of a book having its own soul - as, of course, it does. Your rhythm is nice and my favourite line is: "A gift you are[:] with pearls and gems inside". Good luck with the contest....you're on a roll.:)
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2009
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A lovely sonnet, Sue. I like the idea of a book having its own soul - as, of course, it does. Your rhythm is nice and my favourite line is: "A gift you are[:] with pearls and gems inside". Good luck with the contest....you're on a roll.:)
Comment Written 08-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2009
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I guess I can thank this cold-ass weather up here to keep me tucked in the house and just write and write! HA!! Don't EVEN talk to me about Queensland's weather right now. Well, I believe this is my 2nd sonnet. I do love them. It will take a lot of writing to feel freer and kick butt with them! I look forward to it. So much to learn. Thank goodness there is no such thing as running out of material! I'm going to keep entering contests back to back. Learning so much. I'll give ya the mail! HA! Sue
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Good for you....kick bums! I'm going to torment you with visual images of brilliant sunshine and 35C (102F) warmth.....hehehe I think we might go swimming again today. :)
Don't get frostbite - I hear it's nippy!
Comment from TinyTeena
Very well written. At first it sounds like you're talking about a friend, a person, till you mention pages. But as you progress, I came to realise that books are your friends. This book is not one of those first editions that are not touched, but a well read and loved successor.
"Appreciating how you're so well read." - a pun on the word 'read'. Meaning so knowledgable and been read by so many people.
"Gems" also is a pun - gems of wisdom (knowledge) or jewels.
The poem maintains the set rhyme and rhythm and this style of writing suits the topic. I enjoyed reading your poem very much
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2009
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Very well written. At first it sounds like you're talking about a friend, a person, till you mention pages. But as you progress, I came to realise that books are your friends. This book is not one of those first editions that are not touched, but a well read and loved successor.
"Appreciating how you're so well read." - a pun on the word 'read'. Meaning so knowledgable and been read by so many people.
"Gems" also is a pun - gems of wisdom (knowledge) or jewels.
The poem maintains the set rhyme and rhythm and this style of writing suits the topic. I enjoyed reading your poem very much
Comment Written 08-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2009
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So cool you went into such detail about this work! Loved you mentioning how you felt it was a person in first couple of lines. (as intended). Really wanted to give that book a personality! And glad you liked the double-entendre of "so well read". I really appreciate this great review and so glad you enjoyed it! :-)) Sue