The Rest of Me
a contest entry35 total reviews
Comment from RodG
You could not have chosen a better artwork to accompany this poem about a lover who's figuratively been ripped hollow and turned to stone by the person who left him. I can hear his pleading so clearly and anyone who has had such a loss will easily relate. That last line is so powerful! I'm competing in this contest, and this poem is so much better than mine. Rod
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You could not have chosen a better artwork to accompany this poem about a lover who's figuratively been ripped hollow and turned to stone by the person who left him. I can hear his pleading so clearly and anyone who has had such a loss will easily relate. That last line is so powerful! I'm competing in this contest, and this poem is so much better than mine. Rod
Comment Written 05-Aug-2024
Comment from Nicki.B
What a powerful image you have to go with your poem on loneliness, it's the perfect fit.
Empty.
Beautifully written I felt the hurt in your words and also anger and sadness along with the bitter loneliness.
Well done, a great entry for the contest, good luck!
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What a powerful image you have to go with your poem on loneliness, it's the perfect fit.
Empty.
Beautifully written I felt the hurt in your words and also anger and sadness along with the bitter loneliness.
Well done, a great entry for the contest, good luck!
Comment Written 05-Aug-2024
Comment from Shirley Ann Bunyan
That's a fascinating image and perfectly fits the anguish of your words.
'You left with so much more than I could spare'.
This is very profound.
'Before you turned the rest of me to stone'.
You have captured the essence and pain of desertion in a skilfully written poem. Well done.
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That's a fascinating image and perfectly fits the anguish of your words.
'You left with so much more than I could spare'.
This is very profound.
'Before you turned the rest of me to stone'.
You have captured the essence and pain of desertion in a skilfully written poem. Well done.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2024
Comment from Pamusart
Hi,
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!
You did a good job of proving that the protagonist in this poem is alone and lonely
It's a good description at the bottom as somebody turning to stone which means they've turned all their feelings off and all their vulnerability is gone. They're not going to let anybody hurt them again which means they can't let anybody get close to them.
thus guaranteeing that he's alone, and lonely.
I don't know whether this is from personal experience, but I suspect it's not. I suspect you decided to write a poem where the protagonist is alone and lonely. But if it's true, I offer my condolences because losing a partner is just as bad as losing somebody in death.with one exception. In death there's no hope of reconciliation ever
I enjoyed reading your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
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Hi,
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!
You did a good job of proving that the protagonist in this poem is alone and lonely
It's a good description at the bottom as somebody turning to stone which means they've turned all their feelings off and all their vulnerability is gone. They're not going to let anybody hurt them again which means they can't let anybody get close to them.
thus guaranteeing that he's alone, and lonely.
I don't know whether this is from personal experience, but I suspect it's not. I suspect you decided to write a poem where the protagonist is alone and lonely. But if it's true, I offer my condolences because losing a partner is just as bad as losing somebody in death.with one exception. In death there's no hope of reconciliation ever
I enjoyed reading your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2024
Comment from jenintorre
This is such a sad poem. Such a common occurrence .It is extremely well written and the artwork matches so perfectly. Thanks for sharing. Take care. Jen.
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This is such a sad poem. Such a common occurrence .It is extremely well written and the artwork matches so perfectly. Thanks for sharing. Take care. Jen.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2024