The beauty of Spring.
Beauty is all around us.47 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I never fail to notice the beauty of spring, especially the flowers as they bring such delights to the eye. I enjoyed your praise of spring here, well chosen words for the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2024
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I never fail to notice the beauty of spring, especially the flowers as they bring such delights to the eye. I enjoyed your praise of spring here, well chosen words for the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 09-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2024
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Sueswrite
I see this as a perfect representation to the glory of Springtime, and the picturesque sights within this season. Your image and wording combine nicely. Best wishes for you with this 5-7-5 contest.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2024
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I see this as a perfect representation to the glory of Springtime, and the picturesque sights within this season. Your image and wording combine nicely. Best wishes for you with this 5-7-5 contest.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2024
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Begin Again
Beauty surrounds us in love, in life and in Spring. When the cold ground bursts forth and the flower buds bloom. It should tease our senses over and over, bringing joy to one and all. Your words describe it perfectly.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Beauty surrounds us in love, in life and in Spring. When the cold ground bursts forth and the flower buds bloom. It should tease our senses over and over, bringing joy to one and all. Your words describe it perfectly.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 08-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Thank you for your review. Much appreciated.
Comment from Janet Foor
This is a lovely 5/7/5 poem for the contest. Spring is a beautiful time of year and your poem reflects that feeling. I really like the personification of Spring. Nice touch.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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This is a lovely 5/7/5 poem for the contest. Spring is a beautiful time of year and your poem reflects that feeling. I really like the personification of Spring. Nice touch.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 08-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Thank you for your review. Much appreciated.
Comment from victor 66
Beauty may tease us, but I don't mind it a bit. I think a person with will, decides for himself if he or she will be tempted. To look, is a blessing. To touch, maybe is a sin. I'm not going to worry about it, I'm just going to enjoy it. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Beauty may tease us, but I don't mind it a bit. I think a person with will, decides for himself if he or she will be tempted. To look, is a blessing. To touch, maybe is a sin. I'm not going to worry about it, I'm just going to enjoy it. Best wishes.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Thank you for your review. Much appreciated.
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You are most welcome.
Comment from SimianSavant
I noticed someone saying that you needed to include the text of nature/spring in a piece about it. That's nonsense and you already knew that. What you have here works better: text that anthropomorphizes and complements a picture of a woman enjoying spring.
Ok, if you were to make visual upgrades, here's where you might start:
-changing the hyphen to a comma, to make the break softer
-adding some color to the text and/or background
-experimenting with fonts
You can do the latter part in the advanced editor, if you so choose. There is no obligation to do so; most of my first pieces here were very visually simplistic, and some veteran writers here prefer to keep all their work that way.
Thanks for the read,
Harambe (for President)
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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I noticed someone saying that you needed to include the text of nature/spring in a piece about it. That's nonsense and you already knew that. What you have here works better: text that anthropomorphizes and complements a picture of a woman enjoying spring.
Ok, if you were to make visual upgrades, here's where you might start:
-changing the hyphen to a comma, to make the break softer
-adding some color to the text and/or background
-experimenting with fonts
You can do the latter part in the advanced editor, if you so choose. There is no obligation to do so; most of my first pieces here were very visually simplistic, and some veteran writers here prefer to keep all their work that way.
Thanks for the read,
Harambe (for President)
Comment Written 08-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Thank you. I did think about the comma. Thanks again for your review and comments. Much appreciated.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is an extremely artful 5-7-5 poem. I particularly enjoyed the understated use of enjambment. Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest. kay
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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This is an extremely artful 5-7-5 poem. I particularly enjoyed the understated use of enjambment. Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest. kay
Comment Written 08-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Thank you for your review. Much appreciated.
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a nicely written 5 7 5 poem. Beautiful colourful garden photo choice to compliment your words as well. Very well done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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This is a nicely written 5 7 5 poem. Beautiful colourful garden photo choice to compliment your words as well. Very well done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Thank you. Much appreciated.
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Your welcome
Comment from patcelaw
This is very nicely written, and describes some men who is very much in love with a lovely lady. I enjoyed listening to it, and I wish you the best in the contest. Patricia .
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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This is very nicely written, and describes some men who is very much in love with a lovely lady. I enjoyed listening to it, and I wish you the best in the contest. Patricia .
Comment Written 08-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Thank you. Much appreciated.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
I love nature haiku or 5-7-5 poems. Yours is very nice. I like the presentation too. Good syllables count and connection between lines.
Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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I love nature haiku or 5-7-5 poems. Yours is very nice. I like the presentation too. Good syllables count and connection between lines.
Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 08-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2024
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Thank you for your review. Much appreciated.
