Remembering...
A nostalgic glimpse into the past.34 total reviews
Comment from Douglas Goff
What a nice Cinquain poem. This is very warm and fuzzy. Guess that happens while you are talking about sweet love.
Thank you for sharing, Beth, and good luck in the competition.
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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2023
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What a nice Cinquain poem. This is very warm and fuzzy. Guess that happens while you are talking about sweet love.
Thank you for sharing, Beth, and good luck in the competition.
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Comment Written 09-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2023
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Thank you Douglas. I'm not a fan of short poetry but I'll try it for the challenge.
Beth
Comment from lyenochka
This is so lovely, Beth! It makes me think that you are remembering Evan and the love you nurtured over the years. I love that you invoked the sense of smell, sound (song) and the soft warmth of the candle.
Hope this does well in the contest!!
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2023
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This is so lovely, Beth! It makes me think that you are remembering Evan and the love you nurtured over the years. I love that you invoked the sense of smell, sound (song) and the soft warmth of the candle.
Hope this does well in the contest!!
Comment Written 09-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2023
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Thank you Helen. After finally winning a first place again, I'm happy if I don't win anything else for a while.
Beth
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Well deserved! I'm glad you won!!
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Comment from Tom Horonzy
What? No bear rug? Al Martino music? A violin concerto? The smell of roses in the air? A reading from William Wordsworth or Rod McCuen? These are a few of my favorite things when it comes to wooing.
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reply by the author on 09-Nov-2023
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What? No bear rug? Al Martino music? A violin concerto? The smell of roses in the air? A reading from William Wordsworth or Rod McCuen? These are a few of my favorite things when it comes to wooing.
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Comment Written 09-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2023
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Yeah, I'd like all that. Unfortunately a cinquain only allows so much. There a violin in the picture and book of William Wordsworth poems. Ya gotta leave something to the imagination.
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Understood. I sorta figured it was a shortie challenge.
Comment from jim vecchio
I've read a few romantic pieces tonight and this one fits the cinquain requirement and certainly your words and image are prizeworthy. My words are not YOUR words, so don't take this as a criticism, but I am just wondering: what if line four began "their song" instead of "our song"? That way, the entire poem would have the candles as the object, and the candles' fragrant burning would echo the love.
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reply by the author on 09-Nov-2023
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I've read a few romantic pieces tonight and this one fits the cinquain requirement and certainly your words and image are prizeworthy. My words are not YOUR words, so don't take this as a criticism, but I am just wondering: what if line four began "their song" instead of "our song"? That way, the entire poem would have the candles as the object, and the candles' fragrant burning would echo the love.
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Comment Written 09-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2023
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I need to think about it. It was about me and that is why I said my love. Remembering indicates the love is no longer around. I was a nostargic look into the past. You may be right.
