The Man
Little Mistakes36 total reviews
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Bruce,
I'm in the dark ages when it comes to charges for telephones and whatnot. I've heard that people can get in trouble over them though. This was well written, I could feel the shame of the boy and the anger and frustration of his mom. Well done.
Blessings,
Tom
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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Hello Bruce,
I'm in the dark ages when it comes to charges for telephones and whatnot. I've heard that people can get in trouble over them though. This was well written, I could feel the shame of the boy and the anger and frustration of his mom. Well done.
Blessings,
Tom
Comment Written 18-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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Thank you, TB.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Poor kid and poor thrown against the world and learning on the harsh way that every little mistakes comes back and barriers you alive. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
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Poor kid and poor thrown against the world and learning on the harsh way that every little mistakes comes back and barriers you alive. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2023
Comment from jmdg1954
I wish I had a six star in my back pack to award you for this post.
It starts off in typical fashion, builds up steam and rolls to a stop. Picture perfect.
A story posted as fiction but with a true-styled story line.
Newly written, my friend.
John
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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I wish I had a six star in my back pack to award you for this post.
It starts off in typical fashion, builds up steam and rolls to a stop. Picture perfect.
A story posted as fiction but with a true-styled story line.
Newly written, my friend.
John
Comment Written 17-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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Thank you kindly, John.
Comment from Barry Penfold
Such an excellent write may I say. I rarely give six stars to any writing but you had me seeing the situation so clearly. Very insightful and a scene that is unfortunately played out in too many homes. Take care and all the best. Keep writing.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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Such an excellent write may I say. I rarely give six stars to any writing but you had me seeing the situation so clearly. Very insightful and a scene that is unfortunately played out in too many homes. Take care and all the best. Keep writing.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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Thank you for the time to read, review and an excellent rating, Barry.
Comment from Mintybee
This was a rough story to read, because it was so plausible. I had a little trouble pinning down the son's age. Maybe between 7 and 12? This story really dug into the emotions of the characters: guilt, mom-guilt, anger, fear, regret, desperation to do better. This could have used a language warning, but that's really the only thing I'd suggest changing. The level of detail is great.
Mintybee
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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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This was a rough story to read, because it was so plausible. I had a little trouble pinning down the son's age. Maybe between 7 and 12? This story really dug into the emotions of the characters: guilt, mom-guilt, anger, fear, regret, desperation to do better. This could have used a language warning, but that's really the only thing I'd suggest changing. The level of detail is great.
Mintybee
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Comment Written 17-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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Thanks, Minty. I use so many profanities in my other work that my thresholds are all messed-up. Humbly acknowledged.
Comment from JSD
'It was all his fault, because he had asked his mother to leave. And they did,'. Just don't get that line. Who are they? Surely he asked his father to leave? Otherwise this is stunning writing. Painful. Vivid. Gripping. Just brilliant. Well done.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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'It was all his fault, because he had asked his mother to leave. And they did,'. Just don't get that line. Who are they? Surely he asked his father to leave? Otherwise this is stunning writing. Painful. Vivid. Gripping. Just brilliant. Well done.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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Thank you for taking the time to write and the six stars, JSD.