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Comment from DeboraDyess
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I love this, Debi! It's funny and, even after a night of wrangling kids at Vacation Bible School, it made me smile all the way through and chuckle once. Not bad, considering how tired I am! I loved your take on 'me, myself, and I'. Lovely!
blessings and thanks for the grins,
Deb

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2023


reply by the author on 13-Jun-2023
    Hi Deb, you are so sweet! I appreciate your kind review, comments, as well as your gracious gift of six stars. Thank you again my dear friend!
Comment from Goodadvicechan
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We all have conflict of ideas or interest in our mind. Those ideas sound like taking to your own self.

Using the jokes as examples.
You think it's done but another part of you say it can be better.

I like how you end this one by saying " And when it all is said and done, "they all were done in rhyme."

Thanks for sharing

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2023


reply by the author on 14-Jun-2023
    Hi Chan! You are so sweet and I appreciate all of your very kind comments for this silly poem. Which is my favorite kind to write and read. So Thank you again my dear friend.
Comment from Spitfire
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Superb! So many good plays on words: balance and bank; falling down and asphalt; crushing cans and soda depressing (my favorite); color blind and blue; dusting books and shelf.. and so one. Seems 'myself' gives 'me' a good scolding. Good luck in the contest. I see this as a winner.

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2023


reply by the author on 13-Jun-2023
    Hi Shari, you are so sweet! I appreciate your kind review, comments, as well as your gracious gift of six stars. Thank you again my dear friend!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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First of all, the artwork was awesome. It reminded me of
the mind's eye. Your color scheme worked well, too. The
whole poem was fun to read with the dialogue with me
and myself. I loved the play on words such as with asphalt
and Sue, she (sushi.) Your rhymes worked well, and several
were hilarious (in a great way). I laughed throughout each
verse. Yes, they were all done in rhyme with smooth flow
and great details. I liked the way you used ( ) to indicate
the speaker.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2023


reply by the author on 13-Jun-2023
    Hi Jan, I am very touched by your kind comments and going the extra mile to catch a few errors. Thanks also for the six stars! You are so sweet. Thanks always for everything!
Comment from jmdg1954
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Debi, hi.
Great poem that I enjoyed reading. I couldn't chose a side to side with. Both were compelling!
Really who else but you could rhyme always messing to soda-pressing?

Best of luck in the contest!
John

Question my dear- isn't your eye surgery scheduled this week? If so, I wish you the best and will say a prayer for you...
John

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2023


reply by the author on 14-Jun-2023
    Hi John, You are so sweet and I appreciate all of your very kind comments for this silly poem. And yes my surgery is this morning at 10. It's midnight and finishing my responses for reviews and one more birthday poem for Friday. I have some others written up ahead as they say I should stay away from electronics until my eye is feeling up to . My grandson is going to help me post a few within the next week. So I really needed to do silly this week, which is my favorite kind to write and read. Sunday I will be posting theft by Thank you again my dear friend.
Comment from LJbutterfly
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Bravo! How totally creative and imaginative. Every time "Me" said something, I couldn't wait to see how "Myself" responded. My favorite line, "it can be soda~pressing." You have written phenomenal dialogue with yourself. Best wishes in the contest.

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2023


reply by the author on 13-Jun-2023
    Hi Lorraine, you are so sweet! I appreciate your kind review, comments, as well as your gracious gift of six stars. Thank you again my dear friend!
Comment from Carol Clark2
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This is a cute dialogue with yourself, with great rhymes and some jokes thrown in for good measure. I love the soda-pressing one; it made me laugh. Best wishes in the contest. Carol

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2023


reply by the author on 14-Jun-2023
    Hi Carol! You are so sweet and I appreciate all of your very kind comments for this silly poem. Which is my favorite kind to write and read. So Thank you again my dear friend.
reply by Carol Clark2 on 15-Jun-2023
    This is a fun poem. Thanks for sharing the laughs. Have a blessed weekend, my friend. Carol
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2023
    Thanks Carol, I just wanted to let you know that Sally and I talked and she will be doing your birthday poem, but as much as you are special to me too, I will be wishing you the biggest heartfelt birthday too. You are just that loved!
    Since I had my first eye surgery yesterday and the second will be the 28th, it probably works out ok. Thanks for all of your kind reviews and looking forward to start reviewing more when I get more vision back.
reply by Carol Clark2 on 18-Jun-2023
    So glad your surgery went well. Thanks for being a special FS friend to me. Thanks much for the heartfelt birthday wishes. You make me feel so good!
    I'll be spending my special day at Maranatha Bible Conference for a week, in MI. Looking forward to resting & refreshing physically & spiritually. Have a wonderful week, and prayers for a successful second surgery.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2023
    .bless you sweetheart
Comment from w.j.debi
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It is so fun to play with language and you've written an endearing poem with wordplay that brings a smile. Excellent rhyming adds to the humor.
Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2023


reply by the author on 14-Jun-2023
    Hey Debi! You are so sweet and I appreciate all of your very kind comments for this silly poem. Which is my favorite kind to write and read. So Thank you again my dear friend.
Comment from Sally Law
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I am a silent partner here too. Inevitably, a fight breaks out. Those girls inside me! I wish they'd let up or grow up! A delightful poem of the imward struggle. It made me laugh out loud!

Sending you my best today as always, Debi dear, and my very best wishes for the upcoming contest.
BBB XOs

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2023


reply by the author on 13-Jun-2023
    Hey dear Sally, you are so sweet! I appreciate your kind review, comments, as well as your gracious gift of six stars. Thank you again my dear friend!
Comment from Terry Broxson
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Debi, LOL, pretty clever entry for this contest. Your poem is well-crafted and creative. My laugh-out-loud line was about the asphalt, very good indeed. Terry.

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2023


reply by the author on 13-Jun-2023
    Hi Terry, you are so sweet! I appreciate your kind review, comments, as well as your gracious gift of six stars. Thank you again my dear friend!