Love and Loss
Viewing comments for Chapter 29 "Melancholy Me"NaPoWriMo April Poetry Contest
43 total reviews
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi Jessica . Your words resonated with me as I lost my brother 2 years ago We were so close and had a special connection all our lives and I feel part of me is now missing
So i can feel your pain
Beautifully written
A heart hug to you
Cheers Chris
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
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Hi Jessica . Your words resonated with me as I lost my brother 2 years ago We were so close and had a special connection all our lives and I feel part of me is now missing
So i can feel your pain
Beautifully written
A heart hug to you
Cheers Chris
Comment Written 04-May-2023
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
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Chris, I whole heartedly understand what you mean. I was the same with my sister. I'm so very sorry for your loss of your brother. Sending love and prayers xoxoxo
Jessica
Comment from Julie Lau
You have turned your grief into a beautiful poem, Jessica. The first line is particularly effective in leading the reader in. The repetition of 'melancholy' works well to slow the poem down and keep its serious tone. BTW you've let an extra 'r' sneak into 'buried', about halfway through. Sorry for your loss. Keep writing, you're a talented girl.
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
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You have turned your grief into a beautiful poem, Jessica. The first line is particularly effective in leading the reader in. The repetition of 'melancholy' works well to slow the poem down and keep its serious tone. BTW you've let an extra 'r' sneak into 'buried', about halfway through. Sorry for your loss. Keep writing, you're a talented girl.
Comment Written 04-May-2023
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
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Julie, thank you so much for your review! And that catch! I appreciate you!
Xo
Jessica
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
My Dearest Jessica, for the sake of my reviewing of this poem, please allow my heart to speak uninterrupted by me. ....How do I tell you how very much I loved this when I felt your heart breaking thru it? Yet I know the mode you have to put yourself in as a writer, to get thru those nostalgic and emotional parts, to let the reader believe what you are saying. That you are doing better much of the time. And I know that for the most part your words are true because life goes on. but when you have the ability that a good writer does; one where you allow yourself to reach so far inside of your heart, almost pull it out of yourself and hand it to tghyet tell about such a deep love (but lock yourself out of the highly emotional feelings) so you can pull together this brilliant masterpiece. Then I say Bravo, and you accomplished a truly amazing and electrifying non-fictional poetic ballet. Genius
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My Dearest Jessica, for the sake of my reviewing of this poem, please allow my heart to speak uninterrupted by me. ....How do I tell you how very much I loved this when I felt your heart breaking thru it? Yet I know the mode you have to put yourself in as a writer, to get thru those nostalgic and emotional parts, to let the reader believe what you are saying. That you are doing better much of the time. And I know that for the most part your words are true because life goes on. but when you have the ability that a good writer does; one where you allow yourself to reach so far inside of your heart, almost pull it out of yourself and hand it to tghyet tell about such a deep love (but lock yourself out of the highly emotional feelings) so you can pull together this brilliant masterpiece. Then I say Bravo, and you accomplished a truly amazing and electrifying non-fictional poetic ballet. Genius
Comment Written 04-May-2023
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
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Thank you for getting me the way you do... xoxoxoxoxo
Your words mean the world to me!!
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It was 3AM and I was using only the floating screen keyboard and my heart was having a hard time expressing at that time. I did love it and it was beautiful.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Firstly, I am so sorry for your loss Jessica, how very tragic to lose your sister and these experiences leave deep scars on our hearts. Your poem is gentle and loving, subtle and very sad. When we lose our loved one's we grieve forever and never forget them. A fine write, good rhymes and melancholy sentiments, love Dolly x
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Firstly, I am so sorry for your loss Jessica, how very tragic to lose your sister and these experiences leave deep scars on our hearts. Your poem is gentle and loving, subtle and very sad. When we lose our loved one's we grieve forever and never forget them. A fine write, good rhymes and melancholy sentiments, love Dolly x
Comment Written 04-May-2023
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Thank you so much, Dolly
Xo
Jessica
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job, Jessica, with your tribute to your
beloved friend, Kelly. The picture was perfect to show
both you and her together. Yes, your memories of her
will always be in your heart. At times, a thought of her
will appear out of the blue and cause you sadness. You
expressed your thoughts and feelings well. The rhymes
worked well and the flow was smooth. Readers could
easily understand the depth of your sadness but joy you
had knowing her.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
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You did a great job, Jessica, with your tribute to your
beloved friend, Kelly. The picture was perfect to show
both you and her together. Yes, your memories of her
will always be in your heart. At times, a thought of her
will appear out of the blue and cause you sadness. You
expressed your thoughts and feelings well. The rhymes
worked well and the flow was smooth. Readers could
easily understand the depth of your sadness but joy you
had knowing her.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 03-May-2023
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
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Thank you, Jan!! Your insightful reviews are always appreciated!
Xoxo
Jessica
Comment from royowen
Kelly is either a sister or a friend Jessica, that fabulous photo is her on my left, and you on the right. You are both beautiful, and as the poem says, "They will not grow old, as we who are left grow old, age shall not weary them...". This is a beautiful poem my friend, I have lost so many now...well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
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Kelly is either a sister or a friend Jessica, that fabulous photo is her on my left, and you on the right. You are both beautiful, and as the poem says, "They will not grow old, as we who are left grow old, age shall not weary them...". This is a beautiful poem my friend, I have lost so many now...well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 03-May-2023
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Roy, thank you so much. Your words are so moving and much appreciated. Kelly was my little sister. Her addiction took her life. God bless you for your kind words. Xoxo
Jessica
Comment from Cherish Adams
This is a perfect description of losing a first love. The rhyme with rhythm show the care you took in this pen. Not every first love is the "crush" love but instead our siblings. I know my sisters are my first loves. Beautifully written. Jessica and Kelly forever. Much love, Cherish.
reply by the author on 03-May-2023
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This is a perfect description of losing a first love. The rhyme with rhythm show the care you took in this pen. Not every first love is the "crush" love but instead our siblings. I know my sisters are my first loves. Beautifully written. Jessica and Kelly forever. Much love, Cherish.
Comment Written 03-May-2023
reply by the author on 03-May-2023
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Thank you, Cherish. Your words are so true, thank you for saying them. Xoxo
Jessica
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Your poem gives me goosebumps... it's so so beautiful. You describe grief so well. I suffered losses in my life and it is the same for me. I believe the ones we love live within us.
reply by the author on 03-May-2023
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Your poem gives me goosebumps... it's so so beautiful. You describe grief so well. I suffered losses in my life and it is the same for me. I believe the ones we love live within us.
Comment Written 03-May-2023
reply by the author on 03-May-2023
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Thank you so much, that means the world to me. I'm so sorry for your losses- and I appreciate you expressing that you can relate xoxoxo
Jessica
Comment from Sally Law
As, this is so heartbreaking, Jess! Again, I am so sorry for the loss of Kelly. How could it not affect your life? I comfort myself with those the Lord has given me to love at present. It makes my personal losses more bearable. A beautiful poem dedicated to her memory for your book. Sending you my best, with prayers of loving comfort for you and your family.
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
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As, this is so heartbreaking, Jess! Again, I am so sorry for the loss of Kelly. How could it not affect your life? I comfort myself with those the Lord has given me to love at present. It makes my personal losses more bearable. A beautiful poem dedicated to her memory for your book. Sending you my best, with prayers of loving comfort for you and your family.
Sal XOs
Comment Written 03-May-2023
reply by the author on 04-May-2023
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Thank you, my friend! Painful to write, but she's worth it. I had to save her for last. Your words bring so much comfort, Sally. Thank you.
Xoxo
Jess
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Most welcome, Jess! Blessings back to you all.
Sal XOs
I left you a message with my vote. Congratulations on a beautiful book of poetry for the April contest. Brava!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this tribute to Kelly with us. Yes, a loss of a loved one is hard and leaves us devastated. I am hoping writing this poem helps with the healing. Please know you're in my prayers.
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Thank you for sharing this tribute to Kelly with us. Yes, a loss of a loved one is hard and leaves us devastated. I am hoping writing this poem helps with the healing. Please know you're in my prayers.
Comment Written 03-May-2023
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Thank you so much!
Xo
Jessica