Comment from Wayne Fowler

Excellent

Good narrative. You have real material to begin with.
It does not require belief per say, - period, not comma
- (per se): as such, or as a matter of law
.....until it doesn't - an ellipsis consists of three dots, four if at the end of a sentence.
large claw foot bathtub. - (large, clawfoot bathtub)
and my mothers - (mother's)
I looked around guiltily shaking in the water - comma after 'guiltily'
"I think i'm gonna try this, mommy does all the time" - Capitalize I'm and Mommy (when used as a name) Also needs a period after 'time' (before the quotes mark) And capitalize the next word (So)
Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 10-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2023

Thank you so much for your review and for taking the time to go over it and pass me on these very valuable tips and information thank you so much. I appreciate it and I hope you have a great evening!

Comment from JT traveller

Excellent

Powerful. I am glad you had the strength to make a start. Congratulations. A massive achievement.

Your writing, as always, is faultless. You tell it like it is. A story that must be told. Believe me, you will feel better when it is all out. It took me over two years to express my anger on paper and work through the various stages of grief.

Here I am, stronger and more resilient. Sure, I have bad days. It is my mother's birthday today...

Well done. Jacqueline

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 Comment Written 10-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2023

Thank you so much for kind word and your inspiration means a lot to me and the fact that we have similar circumstance makes us easier to understand each other I think
Thank you for taking the time to read this off for your comments and for the great Review I thank you again have a great night!

PS If you're feeling a little off today remember you're doing what's right for you and it is your life after all. If your mother's birthday is the lonely one perhaps it's the way she likes it, or perhaps, it's the way she deserves it to be. All the best! get a ta for me if you would will you? We're just getting rid of our snow! Lol

reply by JT traveller on 10-Mar-2023

Haha. Thx. Tanned enough, I love in Queensland, Australia. Just taking a long holiday at present.

reply by the author on 10-Mar-2023

Have a great time!