Between You, Me and the Gatepost
A common saying many years ago.34 total reviews
Comment from Regina Elliott
So very nostalgic to me. I
remember that saying back
in the day. One of my friends
substituted the word, " lamp post," instead of, "gate post,"
because of all the tall black
lamp posts we had in our
neighborhood. Your poem
is lovely, especially with
sharing secrets with friends.
Blessings ~
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2022
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So very nostalgic to me. I
remember that saying back
in the day. One of my friends
substituted the word, " lamp post," instead of, "gate post,"
because of all the tall black
lamp posts we had in our
neighborhood. Your poem
is lovely, especially with
sharing secrets with friends.
Blessings ~
Comment Written 12-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2022
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Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem. I am glad you enjoyed it. Yes "lamp posts" would have the same effect.
Have a good day.
Cheers
Barry
Comment from LisaMay
I remember this old saying - haven't heard it for years. I suppose so many people live in apartments these days, not like when we had time for a neighbourly chat sharing confidences by the gatepost.
I spotted a couple of corrections you could make:
The eyelid closed; to wink.
(a comma would be sufficient rather than a semicolon)
All these gestures~ facial signs
(add a space in front of the squiggly dash)
The common ,binding link
(remove space in front of comma; add a space after comma)
A friendly ear~a kindly tongue
(I think a comma would be better than a squiggly dash)
And the ever silent gatepost.
(the rhythm gets a bit lost in this last line)
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2022
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I remember this old saying - haven't heard it for years. I suppose so many people live in apartments these days, not like when we had time for a neighbourly chat sharing confidences by the gatepost.
I spotted a couple of corrections you could make:
The eyelid closed; to wink.
(a comma would be sufficient rather than a semicolon)
All these gestures~ facial signs
(add a space in front of the squiggly dash)
The common ,binding link
(remove space in front of comma; add a space after comma)
A friendly ear~a kindly tongue
(I think a comma would be better than a squiggly dash)
And the ever silent gatepost.
(the rhythm gets a bit lost in this last line)
Comment Written 12-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2022
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Lisa,
Thanks for reading and reviewing my poem .Also thanks for your suggestions. I think I will implement some. Take care and have a good day.
Barry
Comment from jessizero
I like the thought that the gatepost knows and keeps all of our secrets and conversations. You had an interesting idea and expressed it well. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2022
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I like the thought that the gatepost knows and keeps all of our secrets and conversations. You had an interesting idea and expressed it well. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 12-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2022
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Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem. Yes, I think there are a lot of gateposts out there holding secrets. Have a good day and take care.
Comment from Raul1
This poem meets the requirements for the contest. I have enjoyed reading your poetry. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. I like your poem. It is clear and concise. Thank you for sharing!
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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2022
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This poem meets the requirements for the contest. I have enjoyed reading your poetry. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. I like your poem. It is clear and concise. Thank you for sharing!
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Comment Written 11-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2022
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Thanks for taking the time to review my poem. Glad you enjoyed it and lets see how it goes in the contest. Have a good day and take care.