Comment from karenina

Excellent

Love your spacing on "emerges"-- it enhances the presentation of your lune. " beautiful flier" is eloquent in its simplicity...

I hope you fare well in this contest!

Karenina

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2022

thank you karen :-)

reply by karenina on 22-Jan-2022

Shhh. Whoever you are, I just voted for your lune! :)

Comment from Janice Canerdy

Excellent

You have made excellent use of your thirteen syllables in this beautiful, expressive nature piece on the emerging of a butterfly. You chose an appealing topic to write about.

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022

thank you Janice:)

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Your contest lune is in great shape, Mystery Author. Great job with the syllable count per line. Your words are well-chosen and descriptive. I like the last line describing the caterpillar as a beautiful flier. There is strong imagery in those words.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022

thank you jan :-)

Comment from Aussie

Exceptional

Even the chrysalis is beautiful, with eyes painted at the back to fool predators. And then a wet butterfly opens her wings ready to glide on new wings. Well done.

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022

thank you aussie :)

Comment from MissMerri

Excellent

This is so visual, and such a beautiful image it is, too. I love to see a poem like this, so descriptive and lovely, with just the right words to paint the vivid picture you have. Good luck in the Lune contest. I think you'll do well.

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022

thank you merri :)

Comment from Raul1

Excellent

This poem meets the requirements for the contest. It has a good chance of winning the contest. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing! Good luck!

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022

thank you raul :)

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is a very well written Lune poem you have penned for the writing prompt. You used great descriptive words which is challenging with so few words. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022

thank you teri :-)

Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)

Good

This is a very appealing poem, that relies on the description of a beautiful metamorphosis. It is unfortunate that there is no image to complement the words.

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022

thank you katharine :)

Comment from duchessofdrumborg

Excellent

' butterfly lune ' , is short, succinct and delightfully descriptive. Woven through each line are the golden threads of truth. This talented poet's work was a delight to both read and review.

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022

thank you duchess :)

reply by duchessofdrumborg on 20-Jan-2022

You're very welcome, my friend :)))

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

Excellent lune form that creates a picture of nature in action. The butterfly is truly a beautiful flier. Short poems are more challenging to write but you did well here. Best wishes for the contest.

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022

thank you mermaid :)