The Return
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Comment from l.raven
Hi Sandra, like I said...The Ghost and Mrs. Muir...I loved the movie...and the series...this is going to make my day...and your other readers too...an awesome chapter...
now when do we move in???...sometimes in life you just have to be spontaneous...
one question cutie pie...where you wrote...
she had a sudden notion she wasn't alone. he...
did you want a period there???...or to capitalize...He...
now I could be wrong...I'm not the brightest star in the sky when it comes to writing stories...but I just thought I would ask...you know...for conversation purposes...
truly my amazing friend...I have high hopes for this story...and can hardly wait...love you sosososososo many...
Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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Hi Sandra, like I said...The Ghost and Mrs. Muir...I loved the movie...and the series...this is going to make my day...and your other readers too...an awesome chapter...
now when do we move in???...sometimes in life you just have to be spontaneous...
one question cutie pie...where you wrote...
she had a sudden notion she wasn't alone. he...
did you want a period there???...or to capitalize...He...
now I could be wrong...I'm not the brightest star in the sky when it comes to writing stories...but I just thought I would ask...you know...for conversation purposes...
truly my amazing friend...I have high hopes for this story...and can hardly wait...love you sosososososo many...
Linda xxoo
Comment Written 02-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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I loved that film, and I'm going to search on Amazon Prime to see if they have it. It's years since I watched it. But my book is nothing like it, I just hope it's as popular!!
I don't know what happened to that sentence but this is what it should be, and is now......
Margot had the sudden notion she wasn?t alone. She wasn't frightened, far from it...
I seemed to have changed her gender in the original paragraph!! LOL!
You are the brightest star in my Galaxy, my friend.
Thank you so very much for this fabulous review, dear Linda, and a humongous hug for the sixth shiny star!! Love you double, my dear friend! More hugs and love! Sandra xxxxxx
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Oh Great...now you have me scratching my head...thinking!!...where is she going with this story???...
I have to go back and read the 1ast chapter
again...see if I missed something...
now I'm running out to drop some things off at GoodWill...and your always welcome...you...triples love back at you...Linda xxoo
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Compelling. Masterfully narrated--rich in imagery and internal monologue.
typos:
found herself opening the estate agent's door COMMA which caused the little bell above to tinkle.
in very good order for it's=>ITS age.
'I've passed your window everyday=>EVERY DAY
she had the sudden notion she wasn't alone. [he was=>SHE WASN'T frightened, far from it, it was rather comforting.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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Compelling. Masterfully narrated--rich in imagery and internal monologue.
typos:
found herself opening the estate agent's door COMMA which caused the little bell above to tinkle.
in very good order for it's=>ITS age.
'I've passed your window everyday=>EVERY DAY
she had the sudden notion she wasn't alone. [he was=>SHE WASN'T frightened, far from it, it was rather comforting.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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I'm going to miss you and your editing, Liz. Thank you so very much for this lovely, really helpful review. I've made all the corrections; thank goodness you picked up where I'd changed her sex! Lol. Love and hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from Mary Shifman
I can tell I'm going to love this story! That strange sense of déjà vu always intrigues me. I seem to immerse myself in a story that I like and I almost felt like Margot as she walked through the house. You know, as if I'd been there before, too. Can't wait for the next chapter.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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I can tell I'm going to love this story! That strange sense of déjà vu always intrigues me. I seem to immerse myself in a story that I like and I almost felt like Margot as she walked through the house. You know, as if I'd been there before, too. Can't wait for the next chapter.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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That is one of the most encouraging reviews I've ever had, thank you so much, Mary! The fact that you felt like Margot is wonderful. I hope I won't disappoint. Thank you!! Warm hugs, my friend, Sandra xxx
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You are so welcome. I'm waiting with bated breath for the next chapter!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Great cover, Sandra. Is that the same relative on "Betrayal"?
-This is a very good chapter and holds the interest well,
and also presents many mysteries and mysterious goings on.
-There is good rapport between Mr. Reid and Margot.
-Good, detailed descriptions of Margot's thoughts
about the house as she told Mr. Reid how she had seen it,
and felt like it was where she should be.
-Mr. Reid is a little concerned about how she already knew about it.
-I hope whoever the "ghost" or presence wrapping
its arms about her is a friendly one.
-The ending is very good and leaves a hint that
we are going back in time!
-Well done, my friend.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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-Great cover, Sandra. Is that the same relative on "Betrayal"?
-This is a very good chapter and holds the interest well,
and also presents many mysteries and mysterious goings on.
-There is good rapport between Mr. Reid and Margot.
-Good, detailed descriptions of Margot's thoughts
about the house as she told Mr. Reid how she had seen it,
and felt like it was where she should be.
-Mr. Reid is a little concerned about how she already knew about it.
-I hope whoever the "ghost" or presence wrapping
its arms about her is a friendly one.
-The ending is very good and leaves a hint that
we are going back in time!
-Well done, my friend.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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Good morning, Pam. Thank you so very much for another wonderful review and the fabulous sixth star!
No, it's not the Sophie, I found this picture on Pixabay. I'm not sure whether or not I'll use it for the real cover yet, but it looked so good and seemed right for now.
I think I must have a fascination with ghosts, lol. I'm going to have fun with this story, I can't say too much or it will give the game away. I think you'll enjoy it. :)) Thanks again, my dear friend. Love and hugs, Sandra xxx
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You are very welcome and deserving of the stars and review, Sandra. You do love your ghosts.
Comment from BethShelby
This is different and intriguing. It sounds like it may have a bit of a supernatural flavor. I will interesting to find out where this new book you are writing will take us.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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This is different and intriguing. It sounds like it may have a bit of a supernatural flavor. I will interesting to find out where this new book you are writing will take us.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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I decided to do something very differents this time, Beth, so I'd love you to let me know what you think as it goes along. I'm really pleased I've caught your attention! Lol. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from Ulla
Ah, this is enticing stuff, Sandra. You build up the story and we know that something is definitely playing in the background. And then it comes to the fore, bringing us back to that tantalising prologue. What is going on, I wonder. Wonderful writing, my friend. A big hug, Ulla xxx
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Ah, this is enticing stuff, Sandra. You build up the story and we know that something is definitely playing in the background. And then it comes to the fore, bringing us back to that tantalising prologue. What is going on, I wonder. Wonderful writing, my friend. A big hug, Ulla xxx
Comment Written 02-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Thank you, Ulla! I'm waking up in the middle of the night with ideas flooding my mind about this one, and I'm up jotting down notes. I've never been like this before. I hope I can do it justice. I'm so over the moon happy with your review, Ulla. Thank you so much for the golden sixth star. I'm glad you are enjoying it, my friend. Love and hugs, Sandra. xxx
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Oh, I know how it is. I often do the same. I get some idea or a sentence and I write it down, because it will otherwise be forgotten. I so understand it. xxx
Comment from Debra White
Hello Sandra :)
I spy no errors whatsoever!
You've drawn me straight into your story and I'm looking forward to seeing what lies in store for Margot. It's all rather mysterious!
All the best (and Happy New Year to you too!)
Debra x
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Hello Sandra :)
I spy no errors whatsoever!
You've drawn me straight into your story and I'm looking forward to seeing what lies in store for Margot. It's all rather mysterious!
All the best (and Happy New Year to you too!)
Debra x
Comment Written 02-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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This is going to be much different to anything else I've written, and I'm really enjoying it. I'm delighted I've drawn you in, Debra, that is so encouraging. Thank you so very much, my friend. Warm hugs! :)) Sandra xx
Comment from royowen
I know you like to write about the mystery of time, seeing God had no restrictions when it comes to time, since He created it when Adam and Eve disobeyed Him in the garden, after all how can one die in eternity? And I suspect you're fascinated by that Sandra. I'll tell you a secret...me too! Beautifully written Sandra, , blessings Roy
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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I know you like to write about the mystery of time, seeing God had no restrictions when it comes to time, since He created it when Adam and Eve disobeyed Him in the garden, after all how can one die in eternity? And I suspect you're fascinated by that Sandra. I'll tell you a secret...me too! Beautifully written Sandra, , blessings Roy
Comment Written 02-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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I do seem to keep going backwards and forwards in time, don't I. Lol. You're right, Roy, I do have a fascination with it, I'm glad you do, too. Thank you so much for this lovely review, and a humongous hug for the sixth star!! You're a lovely friend, Roy. Love and hugs, Sandra xx
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A pleasure Sandra
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A pleasure Sandra
Comment from Anne Johnston
Your story has captivated me from the start. I can hardly wait to see where this is going to lead. I sense a mystery -the lines: " As she stood there, a sudden rush of strange fragmented memories flooded her mind. Impossible memories, she knew that immediately, but they were so vivid! "
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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Your story has captivated me from the start. I can hardly wait to see where this is going to lead. I sense a mystery -the lines: " As she stood there, a sudden rush of strange fragmented memories flooded her mind. Impossible memories, she knew that immediately, but they were so vivid! "
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Comment Written 02-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Thank you so much, Anne, for your lovely review. I'm so glad you liked the first chapter. I'm really pleased you are going to follow my story, I've a big smile on my face. Warm hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xx
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You are welcome.
Comment from robyn corum
Sandra,
Yup. Sounds like a royal adventure. I like it already and will wait anxiously for the next chapter. I love the way you've set things up. I do not think all the things Margot is feeling are for no good reason - there's definitely something afoot! Thanks so much!
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Sandra,
Yup. Sounds like a royal adventure. I like it already and will wait anxiously for the next chapter. I love the way you've set things up. I do not think all the things Margot is feeling are for no good reason - there's definitely something afoot! Thanks so much!
Comment Written 02-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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No, Margot is in for a surprise but she's already getting part of the message. Thank you so much for your fabulous review, Robyn, and for awarding it a six star! Coming from you, it means a lot. Thank you! Love and hugs, my friend. Sandra xxx