As Daylight Fades
Rhyming poetry ~ Rondeau41 total reviews
Comment from June Sargent
I love this rondeau! It can be a complicated form that ends up sounding stilted and unnatural. But you did a superb job in painting a beautiful picture of sunset in the countryside with perfect rhythm and rhyme. Should do well in the contest. I don't think I will even enter this one!
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2021
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I love this rondeau! It can be a complicated form that ends up sounding stilted and unnatural. But you did a superb job in painting a beautiful picture of sunset in the countryside with perfect rhythm and rhyme. Should do well in the contest. I don't think I will even enter this one!
Comment Written 06-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2021
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Hello June. Thank you for your lovely review. It really is an encouragement to me!! I am so happy you enjoyed this Rondeau. :)
Melissa
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
A beautifully written poem. The rhyming is so skillfully done. You have created a magicalimagery. Whether you're sitting on the beach, hiking in the mountains, or even relaxing in a rocking chair on your own front porch, watching a breathtaking sunset never gets old. Thanks for sharing.Good luck!
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2021
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A beautifully written poem. The rhyming is so skillfully done. You have created a magicalimagery. Whether you're sitting on the beach, hiking in the mountains, or even relaxing in a rocking chair on your own front porch, watching a breathtaking sunset never gets old. Thanks for sharing.Good luck!
Comment Written 06-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2021
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Hello Seshadri. Thank you for your lovely review. I am so happy you enjoyed this Rondeau. :)
Melissa
Comment from Dawn Munro
I love this format when it is so masterfully used! This is beautiful, my friend...*sigh*... Just what I needed to read before trying (yet again) to retire for the night. The ambiance evoked is pure serenity!
Best of luck in the contest. (Gorgeous artwork you chose too.)
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2021
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I love this format when it is so masterfully used! This is beautiful, my friend...*sigh*... Just what I needed to read before trying (yet again) to retire for the night. The ambiance evoked is pure serenity!
Best of luck in the contest. (Gorgeous artwork you chose too.)
Comment Written 06-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2021
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Hello Barbara. Thank you for your lovely review. It really is an encouragement to me!! I am so happy you enjoyed this Rondeau. :)
Melissa
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Umm... It's Dawn, but you're most welcome. :) Lol.
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So sorry Dawn! I had reviewed LoveNPeace .. Barbara and had her on my mind.
Melissa
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:)) No worries at all. It happens to me too. :))
Comment from amahra
Below, the first two lines really pulled me into the poem. The poem is excellently worded and beautifully rhymed. The image of twilight is stunning. Great job!
As daylight fades to twilight's hush,
encroaching shadows ~ lilac flush,
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2021
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Below, the first two lines really pulled me into the poem. The poem is excellently worded and beautifully rhymed. The image of twilight is stunning. Great job!
As daylight fades to twilight's hush,
encroaching shadows ~ lilac flush,
Comment Written 06-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2021
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Hello amahra. Thank you for your lovely review. I am so happy you enjoyed this Rondeau. :)
Melissa
Comment from karenina
The Rondeau is a challenging form! So often that refrain can weigh like an anchor. Not so with this ebullient, serene, and elegant poem
In celebration of nature!
Perfect image selected to enhance already brilliant rhyme and verse!
Shall I put the champagne on ice?
Reads like a winner to me!
Karenina
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2021
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The Rondeau is a challenging form! So often that refrain can weigh like an anchor. Not so with this ebullient, serene, and elegant poem
In celebration of nature!
Perfect image selected to enhance already brilliant rhyme and verse!
Shall I put the champagne on ice?
Reads like a winner to me!
Karenina
Comment Written 06-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2021
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Hello Karenina. Thank you for your lovely review. I am so happy you enjoyed this Rondeau. :)
Melissa
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So joyful!
Poetry like a song...
Karenina
Comment from Senyai
Hi Sugarray,
This is absolutely beautiful! A Rondeau? It seems complicated. I am learning all the different poetry forms here on FanStory and this one seems difficult. You did a superb job on this and your lovely words flow smoothly and I can feel what we speak. The emotion conveyed was to slow down and admire the coming twilight as the earth prepares for night.
I felt as though I was there :-). Good luck!
Senyai
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2021
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Hi Sugarray,
This is absolutely beautiful! A Rondeau? It seems complicated. I am learning all the different poetry forms here on FanStory and this one seems difficult. You did a superb job on this and your lovely words flow smoothly and I can feel what we speak. The emotion conveyed was to slow down and admire the coming twilight as the earth prepares for night.
I felt as though I was there :-). Good luck!
Senyai
Comment Written 06-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2021
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Hello Senyai. Thank you for your lovely review. I am so happy you enjoyed this Rondeau. :)
Melissa
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You brought the scene to life and the (hush) sounds gave this Rondeau an easy breeze to ride upon here, a joy to read Melissa, well metered and rhymed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2021
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You brought the scene to life and the (hush) sounds gave this Rondeau an easy breeze to ride upon here, a joy to read Melissa, well metered and rhymed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 06-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2021
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Hello Dolly. Thank you very much. I am happy you enjoyed it. :)
Melissa
Comment from lyenochka
This is such a gorgeous poem. I love all your nature poems and you took on a challenging form like the rondeau to express these subtle changes from daylight to twilight. Hope you do well in the contest!!
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reply by the author on 06-Jul-2021
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This is such a gorgeous poem. I love all your nature poems and you took on a challenging form like the rondeau to express these subtle changes from daylight to twilight. Hope you do well in the contest!!
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Comment Written 05-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2021
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Hello Helen. Thank you so much! I really appreciate your encouraging words!!
Melissa
Comment from l.raven
Hi Melissa, what a beautiful poem my sweet friend...
this is just breath taking girl...
I mean from every word written...to this stunning picture...
this is truly a winner you...I went back and read it twice...amazing...I love your poem sweet girl...and love this breathtaking picture...very well written you...love you...Linda xxoo
so good to see you...xxoo
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2021
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Hi Melissa, what a beautiful poem my sweet friend...
this is just breath taking girl...
I mean from every word written...to this stunning picture...
this is truly a winner you...I went back and read it twice...amazing...I love your poem sweet girl...and love this breathtaking picture...very well written you...love you...Linda xxoo
so good to see you...xxoo
Comment Written 05-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2021
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Hello Linda. Your lovely review takes my breath away. Thank you so very much, my friend!!
Melissa
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your sooo very welcome my sweet friend...
always...love xxoo
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your sooo very welcome my sweet friend...
always...love xxoo
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Gorgeous! The elegant imagery is vividly evocative--lovely rhyme and graceful flow--fine work in this challenging form--I hope to be back with congrats.
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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2021
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Gorgeous! The elegant imagery is vividly evocative--lovely rhyme and graceful flow--fine work in this challenging form--I hope to be back with congrats.
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Comment Written 05-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2021
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Hello Liz. Thank you very much. I am so happy that you liked it. This Rondeau was difficult for me? took me two weeks to get it right. Ugh! Thanks and many hugs!
Melissa