The Orange
A Fictional tale by Eric C Goose63 total reviews
Comment from VJWild
OMG this was hilarious and sounds a bit like.....well...real life? I laughed out loud reading this, so so clever! I found a typo in the second stanza, a phrase is repeated twice...but not really noticeable. Great piece!
reply by the author on 30-May-2021
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OMG this was hilarious and sounds a bit like.....well...real life? I laughed out loud reading this, so so clever! I found a typo in the second stanza, a phrase is repeated twice...but not really noticeable. Great piece!
Comment Written 30-May-2021
reply by the author on 30-May-2021
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??? I appreciate the edits although I still don?t know what you?re talking about could you be more specific second stanza there is no repetition
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second stanza second line says "when I when I" just looks like a typo
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Holy shit you?re tight thanks? 😬😀
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I do it alllllll the time with my own work! I think our eyes go bonkers after reading our pieces so many times...
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Absolutely 😆
Comment from Aiste Radvilaviciute
This is a great poem. I love the rhymes and the story. I was so into this story that I read it a couple of times and I enjoyed it so much. You are very creative.
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This is a great poem. I love the rhymes and the story. I was so into this story that I read it a couple of times and I enjoyed it so much. You are very creative.
Comment Written 30-May-2021
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Thanks for the excellent review
Comment from jake cosmos aller
one of the best poems I have read on this site. let me know if i can feature it on my blog or my fb pages. if so, send me a message either here or on my email to authorjakecosmosaller@gmail.com and once I post it i will put a link to your site on my site so be sure to include that in your response. the site is Https://theworldaccordingtocosmos.com and the podcast is on spotify
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one of the best poems I have read on this site. let me know if i can feature it on my blog or my fb pages. if so, send me a message either here or on my email to authorjakecosmosaller@gmail.com and once I post it i will put a link to your site on my site so be sure to include that in your response. the site is Https://theworldaccordingtocosmos.com and the podcast is on spotify
Comment Written 30-May-2021
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You have mail😀
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Please mention that I?m working on the illustrations for the book and will be available in Aug wherever fine books are sold
Comment from Lobber
interesting,,, check out Cyborg artist Neil Harbisson on Wiki or Youtube. )In 2009, Harbisson published the Human Colour Wheel based on the hue and light detected on hundreds of human skins from 2004 to 2009. The aim of the study was to state that humans are not black or white, but are different shades of orange - from very dark orange to very light orange.(
- Lobber
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interesting,,, check out Cyborg artist Neil Harbisson on Wiki or Youtube. )In 2009, Harbisson published the Human Colour Wheel based on the hue and light detected on hundreds of human skins from 2004 to 2009. The aim of the study was to state that humans are not black or white, but are different shades of orange - from very dark orange to very light orange.(
- Lobber
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Jolly good
Comment from Ulla
Hi Eric, what a great poem with a story within. It's also a story with with a great morale and a lesson for adults and children alike. I really liked the wonderful imagery a d its many metaphors. Well written and we'll thought out. Ulla:)))
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Hi Eric, what a great poem with a story within. It's also a story with with a great morale and a lesson for adults and children alike. I really liked the wonderful imagery a d its many metaphors. Well written and we'll thought out. Ulla:)))
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Thanks ulla
Comment from Raul1
This is an interesting story. I have enjoyed reading it. It's beautifully written. The sentences flow with clarity. I like your poetry. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 29-May-2021
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This is an interesting story. I have enjoyed reading it. It's beautifully written. The sentences flow with clarity. I like your poetry. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 29-May-2021
reply by the author on 29-May-2021
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Thanks for your excellent review
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You're welcome!
Comment from ESOSTINE
Hi dear Eric, I loved the metaphor and all the imagery in the poem. It reminded me of the former Soviet Union, and could also serve as prophecy for a country I know of in Africa where leadership terror and nepotism is holding sway. Well done!
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Hi dear Eric, I loved the metaphor and all the imagery in the poem. It reminded me of the former Soviet Union, and could also serve as prophecy for a country I know of in Africa where leadership terror and nepotism is holding sway. Well done!
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Thanks 😊
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I thought this was a wonderful poem that has a great moral for kids and grown-ups alike. I don't know if you really have illustrated it all the way through, but if you haven't, you should and turn it into a kid's book. Well done, I really enjoyed it, the rhyme and the wording was wonderful, and funny. (And educational) Sandra xx
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I thought this was a wonderful poem that has a great moral for kids and grown-ups alike. I don't know if you really have illustrated it all the way through, but if you haven't, you should and turn it into a kid's book. Well done, I really enjoyed it, the rhyme and the wording was wonderful, and funny. (And educational) Sandra xx
Comment Written 29-May-2021
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Thank you for your excellent review
Comment from Dr. Nad
The Orange is a nice whimsical poem that uses fruit as a metaphor for life and societal roles. It is easy to see that there are divergent opinions even in the orchard. Thanks for encouraging something we can all agree on. Unity, freedom and inclusion, a lessonbest learned by every Tom, Dick, Don, Joe, and Harry. Thanks. Embrace the Love from Above.
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The Orange is a nice whimsical poem that uses fruit as a metaphor for life and societal roles. It is easy to see that there are divergent opinions even in the orchard. Thanks for encouraging something we can all agree on. Unity, freedom and inclusion, a lessonbest learned by every Tom, Dick, Don, Joe, and Harry. Thanks. Embrace the Love from Above.
Comment Written 29-May-2021
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Thank you for your excellent review
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You are most welcome. It was a pleasure to read and a privilege to review. Blessings
Comment from Eternal Muse
What a fun story in a poem about an orange Don and a human names Puti. I loved the fun, humor, whimsy and the great imagination that went into this.
A fitting artwork to accompany.
That put a smile on my face, thank you for sharing.
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What a fun story in a poem about an orange Don and a human names Puti. I loved the fun, humor, whimsy and the great imagination that went into this.
A fitting artwork to accompany.
That put a smile on my face, thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 29-May-2021
reply by the author on 29-May-2021
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Thank you for your excellent review