Heart Crafted Poems -2021
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Traveling Back"Musings of an old man -2021
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Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
Beautiful, wonderful poetry. I'm not often a fan of free verse, and frequently feel that I'm missing the point, but here, you've created a mood and a memory that is unmistakable. You've woven a picture together of the past, and I can almost smell the fresh country air, taste the soda pop, feel the breeze.
I don't make corrections to poetry much, but I think these were unintentional errors:
and pops with start spinning
a long tale
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and pops would start spinning
a long tale
where grandpop used to take to me on
the John Deere
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where grandpop used to take me to on
the John Deere
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I wish I had a six to give you, as this is truly exceptional. Thank you for taking us back there with you.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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Beautiful, wonderful poetry. I'm not often a fan of free verse, and frequently feel that I'm missing the point, but here, you've created a mood and a memory that is unmistakable. You've woven a picture together of the past, and I can almost smell the fresh country air, taste the soda pop, feel the breeze.
I don't make corrections to poetry much, but I think these were unintentional errors:
and pops with start spinning
a long tale
-->
and pops would start spinning
a long tale
where grandpop used to take to me on
the John Deere
-->
where grandpop used to take me to on
the John Deere
***
I wish I had a six to give you, as this is truly exceptional. Thank you for taking us back there with you.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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Mary Kay, thank you, I have polished this up a bit from the comments and reviews, such as yours, for which I am very grateful, 🙏🎶
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You're very welcome! Thank you for your gracious reply. May God bless you. - Mary Kay
Comment from Kit Nongkhlaw
Traveling to your homestead is a really sweet memory. There is no place like home. But, as you said, the memories just fade into the sunset of time. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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Traveling to your homestead is a really sweet memory. There is no place like home. But, as you said, the memories just fade into the sunset of time. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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Kitbok,, thank you!
Comment from Boogienights
I love this poem about reminiscing, it made me start thinking about the summers in Chicago when I was young. Such vivid imagery in your poem keeps the reader interested and really creates a mood. Thank you for sharing this wonderfully written poem. :)
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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I love this poem about reminiscing, it made me start thinking about the summers in Chicago when I was young. Such vivid imagery in your poem keeps the reader interested and really creates a mood. Thank you for sharing this wonderfully written poem. :)
Comment Written 09-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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BoogieNights, thank you,🙏🎶
Comment from dragonpoet
This is alien full of strong imagery and emotions from the past. It doesn'tt seem like any memories mace faded It also seems like over the river and through the woods was the way to Grandma's house.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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This is alien full of strong imagery and emotions from the past. It doesn'tt seem like any memories mace faded It also seems like over the river and through the woods was the way to Grandma's house.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 09-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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Joan, thank you as always, 🙏🎶
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You're welcome, JLR
Joan
Comment from Susan Larson
What beautiful memories. I think you've inspired me to do the same and write of the coal country of southern Pennsylvania where we used to visit relatives, where I accompanied my cousin Annie on her paper route and saw my first snake stretched across the road... that sort of thing. Quoting Bob Hope, "Thanks for the memories!
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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What beautiful memories. I think you've inspired me to do the same and write of the coal country of southern Pennsylvania where we used to visit relatives, where I accompanied my cousin Annie on her paper route and saw my first snake stretched across the road... that sort of thing. Quoting Bob Hope, "Thanks for the memories!
Comment Written 09-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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Susan, thank you for your comments, 🙏🎶
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
My, my. Where have you been? Hope all is well.
The road you travel in this reverie is filled with anticipation and love welling up in your heart at the thought ...
'I knew we were just few hours away
From gram and pops homestead.'
and your anxiousness comes through in this free verse poem.
Ralf
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reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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My, my. Where have you been? Hope all is well.
The road you travel in this reverie is filled with anticipation and love welling up in your heart at the thought ...
'I knew we were just few hours away
From gram and pops homestead.'
and your anxiousness comes through in this free verse poem.
Ralf
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Comment Written 09-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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Hi Ralf, yes I have not had a pen in hand for several months. I am well thanks for thinking good thoughts. be very well 🙏🙏🎶🎶
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image, Jim,
and it is good to see you.
-Hope things are going well.
-You tell a very good story
that creates a vivid word picture
of these memories, "like a well-crafted
scarf used only seasonally" and
the "pancake roadway."
-A very good conclusion, too.
-Thanks for sharing it.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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-Nice image, Jim,
and it is good to see you.
-Hope things are going well.
-You tell a very good story
that creates a vivid word picture
of these memories, "like a well-crafted
scarf used only seasonally" and
the "pancake roadway."
-A very good conclusion, too.
-Thanks for sharing it.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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Hi Pam, as always, I do appreciate your reviews and comments, Thank you! 🙏🙏🎶🎶
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You are very welcome, Jim😊👌
Comment from Senyai
Hi JLR,
This is such a great reminder of the older days, about the age of my own childhood era. Your fine poem is refreshing and I can almost smell those sweet grasses too, as you sit with your remarkable Grandpop after a long day of farming.
This poem is a well written free verse from the heart. Thank you for posting :-)
All the best,
Senyai
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reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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Hi JLR,
This is such a great reminder of the older days, about the age of my own childhood era. Your fine poem is refreshing and I can almost smell those sweet grasses too, as you sit with your remarkable Grandpop after a long day of farming.
This poem is a well written free verse from the heart. Thank you for posting :-)
All the best,
Senyai
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Comment Written 09-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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Sendai, thank you very much for your review. 🙏🎶