Comment from RodG

Excellent

I can see why a young girl would fantasize that Neruda was writing about her. You capture the essence of his style and ability to describe the girl. I especially like these images: "A grey beret fenced a curl of your hair but not your soul." "Autumn leaves nested in your heart. The stillness of your pastoral town echoed in your steps."
Rod

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 Comment Written 27-Nov-2020

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reply by the author on 27-Nov-2020

Hi Ron, thank you for reading this poem and liking my description. Someone mentioned to me their importance. I am lucky to have had such positive influences.

reply by RodG on 27-Nov-2020

You are very welcome.

Comment from Elizabeth Emerald

Excellent

Haunting, lyrical--startling imagery: beret fenced curl but not soul--surface still as a lake but ocean roars--a lovely paean to your long-ago muse--who inspires you still!

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 Comment Written 27-Nov-2020

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reply by the author on 27-Nov-2020

Thank you for stopping by and reading this poem.