Football - A Novel
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Football Chapter 2 part 2"A mother faces life's struggles.
33 total reviews
Comment from robyn corum
Barbara,
OoooOOOoooo... I liked this chapter soooo much. I love the fiery spirit in our MC AND the gentle, easy ways of the male lead.
Things will not be easy for Mrs. Riley, looks like. She won't just float in to a perfect job - I like that, too. Generally, books with a general plot and several smaller subplots running concurrently keep things more interesting. I think you are establishing that direction of things beautifully.
Not a single nit - darn it. haha
Thanks so much!
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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Barbara,
OoooOOOoooo... I liked this chapter soooo much. I love the fiery spirit in our MC AND the gentle, easy ways of the male lead.
Things will not be easy for Mrs. Riley, looks like. She won't just float in to a perfect job - I like that, too. Generally, books with a general plot and several smaller subplots running concurrently keep things more interesting. I think you are establishing that direction of things beautifully.
Not a single nit - darn it. haha
Thanks so much!
Comment Written 13-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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Coming from you, my heart is swelling. Thank you.
Comment from Sankey
Glad you are in time for a SIX! You had me worried when you had not posted at your usual time. I can see this is gonna be a very interesting tale especially where her place of employment is concerned. No spags.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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Glad you are in time for a SIX! You had me worried when you had not posted at your usual time. I can see this is gonna be a very interesting tale especially where her place of employment is concerned. No spags.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Nope, don't like the title is too cliches, but I like the chapter. She knows how to fight her battles and it's not ashamed to slap the offender. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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Nope, don't like the title is too cliches, but I like the chapter. She knows how to fight her battles and it's not ashamed to slap the offender. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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Thank you for the kind review. Still working on the title.
Comment from Ben Colder
Glad you had a great time. I was admiring the way you fir this story into your teaching knowledge and classrooms. Not sure about the title as yet but I bet you will think of a good one.
Well done Barb.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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Glad you had a great time. I was admiring the way you fir this story into your teaching knowledge and classrooms. Not sure about the title as yet but I bet you will think of a good one.
Well done Barb.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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Thank you for the kind review. Still working on the title.
Comment from lancellot
"I'll introduce you to the department head. He should ask you some questions because later he'll introduce you to the rest of the staff."
- Shouldn't the Principle have already introduced her to the department head? That seems logical, right? Unless you held off to set up this scene.
Very good. I'm not sure what year this is, but if it is today, then Mr. Frost, and the school board would be fired or facing a sexual discrimination lawsuit the next day, and Katherine would win thousands. I would be careful of troupes.
Also, we haven't seen it yet, but Gabriel seems too confident and forward of a man not to have a woman. No way, such a man sleeps alone. FYI
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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"I'll introduce you to the department head. He should ask you some questions because later he'll introduce you to the rest of the staff."
- Shouldn't the Principle have already introduced her to the department head? That seems logical, right? Unless you held off to set up this scene.
Very good. I'm not sure what year this is, but if it is today, then Mr. Frost, and the school board would be fired or facing a sexual discrimination lawsuit the next day, and Katherine would win thousands. I would be careful of troupes.
Also, we haven't seen it yet, but Gabriel seems too confident and forward of a man not to have a woman. No way, such a man sleeps alone. FYI
Comment Written 12-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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Thank you for the kind review. Not always does the principal do that. I have been in districts it didn't happen and ones it did. It's not that easy to get rid of a teacher who has been there a long while. It's been attempted.
Comment from BethShelby
This Mr. Frost sounds like bad news. He was extremely rude for a department head. I know the coach will be the romantic interest but so far Kathrine isn't giving him much of a chance. This is one of those romances where she grows to like him slowly. I like the way your story is going and I don't know why you are concerned about it. The title you mention sound good.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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This Mr. Frost sounds like bad news. He was extremely rude for a department head. I know the coach will be the romantic interest but so far Kathrine isn't giving him much of a chance. This is one of those romances where she grows to like him slowly. I like the way your story is going and I don't know why you are concerned about it. The title you mention sound good.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
Revealing only a minimum is a good tactic that works well. In itself this provokes story and dialogue that keeps the pace up. I very much enjoyed this read, especially the way my namesake defended herself.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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Revealing only a minimum is a good tactic that works well. In itself this provokes story and dialogue that keeps the pace up. I very much enjoyed this read, especially the way my namesake defended herself.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
I have been waiting for you to return and post. This is a great story and you are a good writer. I look forward to each post and read yours first!
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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I have been waiting for you to return and post. This is a great story and you are a good writer. I look forward to each post and read yours first!
Comment Written 12-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Barb ( barbara.wilkey) I had a good time reading chapter 2 part 2 in your book. Why you did so well with the dialogue between Katherine and Mr. Frost.
No way was the chapter too long. I liked how you at the end smiles about Mr. Frost Math department.
Gert
Math department head, at least for now.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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Barb ( barbara.wilkey) I had a good time reading chapter 2 part 2 in your book. Why you did so well with the dialogue between Katherine and Mr. Frost.
No way was the chapter too long. I liked how you at the end smiles about Mr. Frost Math department.
Gert
Math department head, at least for now.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Alaskastory
"Football Chapter 2 part 2" is interesting progress within the school administration and relationships between teachers, the principal and coach. I look forward to the next chapter.
delete 'it': "I promise it'll be handled it."
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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"Football Chapter 2 part 2" is interesting progress within the school administration and relationships between teachers, the principal and coach. I look forward to the next chapter.
delete 'it': "I promise it'll be handled it."
Comment Written 12-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.