Ghost Town
For Fabulous Free Verse Club31 total reviews
Comment from tfawcus
I thought this was going to be about a city in lockdown during the Coronavirus pandemic. A relief to find it was a poem of a different sort. You recreate the atmosphere and the ambience beautifully with your words. Very nicely written.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2020
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I thought this was going to be about a city in lockdown during the Coronavirus pandemic. A relief to find it was a poem of a different sort. You recreate the atmosphere and the ambience beautifully with your words. Very nicely written.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much, Tony. No, I'm not writing about the virus. There's been enough of that. 8-)
Comment from lyenochka
Very cool little free verse poem. I like how there is the lack of life and yet the greatest show of life seems to be most evident in the well maintained cemetery. Hmm. Must be the ghosts?
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2020
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Very cool little free verse poem. I like how there is the lack of life and yet the greatest show of life seems to be most evident in the well maintained cemetery. Hmm. Must be the ghosts?
Comment Written 21-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2020
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Could be. It's the Turner Cemetery, my maiden name, a family cemetery. My father's buried there, and I will probably choose the place next to him for myself.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Towns with no people in them have many skeletal ghosts of what once was, these are rare in Britain as every bit of space is used, except for the islands in the far north of Scotland, it is sad to see towns forgotten, your poem is atmospheric, and only the dead keep it alive, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2020
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Towns with no people in them have many skeletal ghosts of what once was, these are rare in Britain as every bit of space is used, except for the islands in the far north of Scotland, it is sad to see towns forgotten, your poem is atmospheric, and only the dead keep it alive, love Dolly x
Comment Written 20-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2020
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Thank you these wonderful comment, Dolly. We have lots of towns like this that got passed by for one reason or another.
Comment from ~Dovey
Hi Yvonne -
Free verse has never been my favorite style, but yours is exceptionally poetic. It just had to have a six today :) You have it all - imagery: saw mills, church bells, laughing children in the schoolhouse, scents of fresh timber, sounds of scraping chalk on slates. And my favorite part:
Forsaken
gardens that once fed families
lie fallow,unseeded and untended.
It all paints wonderful pictures in my head of what has now become a ghost town.
Simply beautiful!
Kim
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2020
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Hi Yvonne -
Free verse has never been my favorite style, but yours is exceptionally poetic. It just had to have a six today :) You have it all - imagery: saw mills, church bells, laughing children in the schoolhouse, scents of fresh timber, sounds of scraping chalk on slates. And my favorite part:
Forsaken
gardens that once fed families
lie fallow,unseeded and untended.
It all paints wonderful pictures in my head of what has now become a ghost town.
Simply beautiful!
Kim
Comment Written 20-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2020
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Oh, my goodness! Thank you so much, Kim. I'm so happy you liked it. You've made my day.
Comment from Gloria ....
There are some places just exactly as you have so eloquently described, Yvonne. It is interesting also as you have noted that the cemeteries are maintained which is testimony to the fact of a once thriving community.
A fine contribution to the free verse club and a most cool prompt for us all too.
Great job and a most enjoyable read. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2020
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There are some places just exactly as you have so eloquently described, Yvonne. It is interesting also as you have noted that the cemeteries are maintained which is testimony to the fact of a once thriving community.
A fine contribution to the free verse club and a most cool prompt for us all too.
Great job and a most enjoyable read. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 20-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2020
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Thank you, Gloria. Looking forward to reading yours.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written free verse poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive words. I could visualize every word you wrote. Thanks for sharing. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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This is a very well written free verse poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive words. I could visualize every word you wrote. Thanks for sharing. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 20-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Some towns are so small that the closing of one essential business can create a Ghost town. It is kind of scary to think that a few thousand people are dependent on one or two businesses.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Some towns are so small that the closing of one essential business can create a Ghost town. It is kind of scary to think that a few thousand people are dependent on one or two businesses.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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That's the way it was in those days. Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from bob cullen
'And roofs met floor in resignation.' What a fantastic line, so descriptive and accurate. I loved everything about this poem. The image attached to the poem was the appetiser to the poem. What made this poem even better for me is the memory of an old house not far from where we lived as kids resembled this image. We played in that house thirty odd years ago. Your poem allowed me to revisit those memories. Thank you
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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'And roofs met floor in resignation.' What a fantastic line, so descriptive and accurate. I loved everything about this poem. The image attached to the poem was the appetiser to the poem. What made this poem even better for me is the memory of an old house not far from where we lived as kids resembled this image. We played in that house thirty odd years ago. Your poem allowed me to revisit those memories. Thank you
Comment Written 20-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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I'm so glad. And I'm glad you like that line, too. It's my favorite. Thank you for this wonderful review!
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is a vivily descriptive poem, the details of which could fit many once-thriving communities. Diverting of railroads and the building of four-lane roads are changes that have created such areas. It's progress, to an extent, I know--but still sad. "Roofs met floors in resignation"--such moving imagery!
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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This is a vivily descriptive poem, the details of which could fit many once-thriving communities. Diverting of railroads and the building of four-lane roads are changes that have created such areas. It's progress, to an extent, I know--but still sad. "Roofs met floors in resignation"--such moving imagery!
Comment Written 20-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Thank you. It's a shame that it happens that way, but it's progress. (Sigh)
Comment from Ben Colder
I hate to see towns die. So many people had dreams of prosperity and to avail. Glad you still have property there. Thanks for sharing your nice poem.
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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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I hate to see towns die. So many people had dreams of prosperity and to avail. Glad you still have property there. Thanks for sharing your nice poem.
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Comment Written 20-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Thank you for reviewing. There are a lot of towns that went that way here.