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Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "(wheelchair) "An artful mix of poetic forms.
50 total reviews
Comment from Iza Deleanu
What a emotional and gentle desire, to push the limit of disability and touch the rose of hope. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.ð???
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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What a emotional and gentle desire, to push the limit of disability and touch the rose of hope. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.ð???
Comment Written 05-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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I love your review of this posting! Thank you so much for reading it and sharing your thoughts. You have brought a big uplift to the beginning of today. :-) Janet
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have made excellent use of your few syllables in this touching, thought-provoking poem about the reality that some people face challenges doing the everyday things many take for granted.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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You have made excellent use of your few syllables in this touching, thought-provoking poem about the reality that some people face challenges doing the everyday things many take for granted.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2020
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Your compassion for others is coming through in your supportive comments about this posting. Thank you so much for reviewing it and sharing your thoughts. --Janet :-)
Comment from royowen
There's so much we miss because our little world is where we live, so there's not much we notice, I'm ashamed of my self. This is a very thoughtful post Janet, I commend you for it, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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There's so much we miss because our little world is where we live, so there's not much we notice, I'm ashamed of my self. This is a very thoughtful post Janet, I commend you for it, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 04-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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We're living in a troubled world and part of our purpose here is to gain compassion and understanding. Such knowledge doesn't come easy...sometimes it starts sinking in the most after we've experienced something we would rather not have encountered. I was in full time prison ministry for five years and then I ran a program for the homeless. Much of what I'm now aware of came by working with troubled people and learning what some of them have gone through and its consequences. That influence shows up in a lot of my writing. Now I frequently do nursing home visitations with my church group. Thank you so much for reviewing this and commenting, Roy. Those who share their love for the Lord through their writings have a special place in my heart. They're blessed candle holders bringing light into dark places.
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That?s good Janet, well done,
Comment from Joan E.
I do not yet use a wheelchair, but your poem resonated for me personally due to my physical limitations. I admired your succinct description and intriguing presentation. Cheers and best wishes in the haiku contest- Joan
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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I do not yet use a wheelchair, but your poem resonated for me personally due to my physical limitations. I admired your succinct description and intriguing presentation. Cheers and best wishes in the haiku contest- Joan
Comment Written 04-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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Thank you so much, Joan. Your review is very meaningful. I'm not in a wheelchair, either, but in my social work, I have pushed many in wheelchairs and I'm aware of the difficulties they encounter.
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Thank you for your sensitivity with regard to those who depend on wheelchairs. Warm regards- Joan
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Comment from Y. M. Roger
I was reading through these 'modern' haiku and really like them a lot better than the more restrictive formatting and rules of the Japanese style -- love this one as it certainly evokes not only a distinct image but it stirs emotions in your reader as well. Well done, my lady, and thanx, as always, for sharing your expertise with us! ;) Good luck in the contest! :) Yvette
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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I was reading through these 'modern' haiku and really like them a lot better than the more restrictive formatting and rules of the Japanese style -- love this one as it certainly evokes not only a distinct image but it stirs emotions in your reader as well. Well done, my lady, and thanx, as always, for sharing your expertise with us! ;) Good luck in the contest! :) Yvette
Comment Written 04-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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I've written a lot of traditional 5-7-5 Western style haiku and my main concern is when a writer obviously adds weak and unnecessary words just to make the syllable count. It detracts from the beauty of the lines. Word choices are important in all poems, not just the Japanese forms. (And please believe me, I've written some real stinkers along the way...it's part of the learning curve.) lol Thank you for this wonderful review, Yvette! ♥♥
Comment from Ogden
This is a fine senyru about the limitations of needing to use a wheelchair (with an excellent satori).
I hope the poem was inspired by observations, rather than personal experience.
Ogden (Don)
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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This is a fine senyru about the limitations of needing to use a wheelchair (with an excellent satori).
I hope the poem was inspired by observations, rather than personal experience.
Ogden (Don)
Comment Written 04-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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I'm not in a wheelchair...yet, although I feel there are days it has its appeal. lol I appreciate your review very much!
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I'm glad to hear it!
Don
Comment from Miss Cookie Atkinson
I love the artwork you choose to go with your poem, they are a perfect match.
You captured my attention from the start, in fact this is what
I call a food for thought write.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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I love the artwork you choose to go with your poem, they are a perfect match.
You captured my attention from the start, in fact this is what
I call a food for thought write.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
Comment Written 04-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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Your review is truly uplifting...especially because you've mentioned my artwork. I always like doing it as much as the writing part of my postings. Thank you greatly, Cookie! --Janet
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It was my pleasure.
Cookie
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
A HUGE sentiment is present here in these few words and with your descriptive art. The provocation of thought is always welcome when we read these gentle words.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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A HUGE sentiment is present here in these few words and with your descriptive art. The provocation of thought is always welcome when we read these gentle words.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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I love that you have really understood what this little one is all about. Thank you greatly!!
Comment from Susan Larson
Having spent several months on crutches and going Christmas shopping in a wheelchair, I can identify with the thrill of bending over and touching anything! I really felt this as I read it!
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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Having spent several months on crutches and going Christmas shopping in a wheelchair, I can identify with the thrill of bending over and touching anything! I really felt this as I read it!
Comment Written 04-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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You speak of what most warms a writer's heart, Susan. Having our message internalized is a wonderful thing for any of us. Thank you so very much! ♥♥ Janet
Comment from rspoet
Hello Spangle,
You've written a wonderful 4-4-5 haiku with good connection
and imagery. It has a lot on impact and emotion.
One of the main element of form in haiku is that only two lines
should be grammatically connected, with a third separate satori
reflective line.
With that in mind, I'd suggest a slight change:
leaning over
from her wheelchair--
the touch of a rose
It is always the poets choice.
This could be a winner.
Best wishes to you
Robert
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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Hello Spangle,
You've written a wonderful 4-4-5 haiku with good connection
and imagery. It has a lot on impact and emotion.
One of the main element of form in haiku is that only two lines
should be grammatically connected, with a third separate satori
reflective line.
With that in mind, I'd suggest a slight change:
leaning over
from her wheelchair--
the touch of a rose
It is always the poets choice.
This could be a winner.
Best wishes to you
Robert
Comment Written 04-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2020
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Thank you so much for this terrific review, Robert! I have given much thought to your suggestion and made a change that's a little different. The haiku's emotional feel is still retained but from a different perspective. You have definitely helped me post an improved poem. I'm very grateful. :-)
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Perfect change! Well done.
Best wishes.
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Happy dance!