One Smiling Word
a poem45 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Loved your unique voice, Jesse! And did you create a new poetic form? I loved how each line of each tercet rhymed across the stanzas. I liked the "tasting a sound" and "reading a face."
Yes, all our sense become jumbled up in the "herd" but we can be our own unique selves perceiving in our own ways.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2019
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Loved your unique voice, Jesse! And did you create a new poetic form? I loved how each line of each tercet rhymed across the stanzas. I liked the "tasting a sound" and "reading a face."
Yes, all our sense become jumbled up in the "herd" but we can be our own unique selves perceiving in our own ways.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2019
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Thank you so much for your enthused review. Your kind comments mean a lot to me. I am happy you loved the rhyme scheme and poetic form of this poem. I appreciate you choosing the phrases you liked best. It is always helpful to know what strikes a chord with people who read this. Thank you for the encouragement to be "our unique selves" no matter what the herd has to say about it. This is a wonderful review, and thank you for the excellent rating.
Have a great new year.
Take care, Jesse
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Have a wonderful 2020!
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You, too!
Comment from June Sargent
Normalcy can be overrated. Uniqueness, on the other hand, should be cherished. A delicate and difficult balance to maintain. But rise above the crowded noise and continue searching for smiling words. They're out there.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2019
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Normalcy can be overrated. Uniqueness, on the other hand, should be cherished. A delicate and difficult balance to maintain. But rise above the crowded noise and continue searching for smiling words. They're out there.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2019
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This is a lovely response, to the complexities involved, in holding on to one's otherness, while avoiding the noise of those, who would have you think there's something wrong with you. Thank you very much for this encouraging review. I will indeed keep searching for smiling words, such as yours. I appreciate your kindness and thoughtfulness. Have a wonderful new year.
Take care, Jesse
Comment from MissMerri
This is further evidence of your unique creativity and your ability to go beyond the "usual" in your writing. I loved the theme of this poem, and the form as well, with its unusual but remarkable rhyme scheme. You should be proud of this. I hope you are. It is special. ~MM
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2019
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This is further evidence of your unique creativity and your ability to go beyond the "usual" in your writing. I loved the theme of this poem, and the form as well, with its unusual but remarkable rhyme scheme. You should be proud of this. I hope you are. It is special. ~MM
Comment Written 29-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2019
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Wow, MM! You love the theme, the form, and the rhyme scheme. I am indeed, proud to accept, your expertise view of my unusual poem. I so admire your work, that to hear you call this 'special' is thrilling to read! I will place this exemplary review, along with the exceptional rating, on my virtual mantel piece! Thank you so much, and you have a peaceful and prosperous new year.
Take care, Jesse
Comment from Susan Larson
I love the triple rhyme scheme through the first three verses, how conforming they are to each other, keeping in perfect rotating rhythm, yet your last line, your desire to maintain normalcy in a way doesn't fit in, yet describes the normalcy of the regimented rhyme of the preceding verses. At least that's how I see it.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2019
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I love the triple rhyme scheme through the first three verses, how conforming they are to each other, keeping in perfect rotating rhythm, yet your last line, your desire to maintain normalcy in a way doesn't fit in, yet describes the normalcy of the regimented rhyme of the preceding verses. At least that's how I see it.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2019
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Thank you, Susan, for your interesting perspective on my poem. I am glad you love the rhyme scheme. The last line without a rhyme is intentional. The normalcy does not relate to the "regimented rhyme" of the preceding rhyme sequence. It is referring to its meaning.
Every one has a different perspective on this piece. That is one thing I like when I write; that it can be taken many different ways and still be true. I appreciate your views and thank you for the excellent rating.
Take care, Jesse
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I guess I saw that last line not being ?normal? but marching to the beat of a different drummer.
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Yes, Susan. That is a very good way of seeing the last line. Thank you for clarifying that for me. Have a peaceful and prosperous new year.
Jesse
Comment from Diana L Crawford
You captured the sentiment of how difficult it is to maintain uniqueness among the crowd excellently. I liked how you kept a rhyming pattern but deviated for last line! It really made the idea of normalcy stand apart! xoxo
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2019
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You captured the sentiment of how difficult it is to maintain uniqueness among the crowd excellently. I liked how you kept a rhyming pattern but deviated for last line! It really made the idea of normalcy stand apart! xoxo
Comment Written 29-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2019
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Thank you, Diana. You are the only one who saw the benefit of the deviated last line that didn't rhyme. I am glad you liked how that worked. I appreciate your 'take' on the poem and your kind words. Thank you for your insightful review and the excellent rating.
Take care, Jesse
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So welcome! I thought it quite creative and isn?t that what poetry is supposed to be about? :). Hope you have a very Happy New Year!
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Creativity is the epitome of what poetry is about. Thank you, again, and best wishes for a joyful new year.
Take care, Jesse
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"One Smiling Word", is a well-written and thought-provoking piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2019
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"One Smiling Word", is a well-written and thought-provoking piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2019
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Thank you for your positive review. I am glad you found it a pleasure to read and review. I appreciate your kind comments and your excellent rating very much.
Take care, Jesse
Jesse,
As always, you're very welcome. You certainly deserved the positive review.
God bless and take care,
the Duchess :)))
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Thanks.
You're welcome.
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a provocative write, a rambling soliloquy in personal, free verse declaration, though fleeting in message, earnest in its reaching out to be heard and accepted...
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2019
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In my opinion, a provocative write, a rambling soliloquy in personal, free verse declaration, though fleeting in message, earnest in its reaching out to be heard and accepted...
Comment Written 29-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2019
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Thank you for your interesting review. I appreciate your honest appraisal of what you think of this piece. Thank you for the excellent rating.
Take care, Jesse
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You are very welcome, Jesse - my pleasure...Eve
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your thought-provoking poem, Jesse. Your words flow smoothly with great imagery. I believe you are saying that most people have two faces--a private one and a public one. At times, it is hard to tell the difference on some. On an individual such as yourself, many try to change them into what THEY want that person to be rather than accepting him/her for their true self. It is ok to be unique. But at times it does isolate one. Don't change for anyone but yourself. Take care. Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2019
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I enjoyed your thought-provoking poem, Jesse. Your words flow smoothly with great imagery. I believe you are saying that most people have two faces--a private one and a public one. At times, it is hard to tell the difference on some. On an individual such as yourself, many try to change them into what THEY want that person to be rather than accepting him/her for their true self. It is ok to be unique. But at times it does isolate one. Don't change for anyone but yourself. Take care. Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 29-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2019
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Thank you very much, Jan, for this ultimately unique perspective on my poem. Private and public faces, is another of several interpretations I have read, from people here at Fan Story. There are so many ways to look at this. Some read between the lines. Others relate personally to choice phrases in this poem. Your advice at the end of your review is very wise. I am changing. But only for myself. If I do it for others, it is fake, and not somewhere I want to go in my life. I appreciate this insightful and kind review, as well as, the excellent rating received.
Take care, Jesse
Comment from Janet Foor
amazing picture to accompany this through provoking piece Jesse.
I hear you and I too can relate. I'm not welcome in some circles of my family and it's heartbreaking.
One smiling word is an excellent phrase.
Well done and Happy New Year.
Janet
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2019
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amazing picture to accompany this through provoking piece Jesse.
I hear you and I too can relate. I'm not welcome in some circles of my family and it's heartbreaking.
One smiling word is an excellent phrase.
Well done and Happy New Year.
Janet
Comment Written 29-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2019
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Thank you, Janet. It is comforting to know that you and others can relate to what I am experiencing. I am glad you like the picture and chose your favorite phrase. I appreciate your kind words and thank you for an excellent rating. Best wishes for the new year.
Take care, Jesse
Comment from Therese Caron
This poem really resonates with me right now. How do I combine my love of people, my good feelings of helping others, with my ever present need for solitude?I can't believe you came up with that phrase of scripted face. That is phenomenal. How often do we see the scripted faces, and at the same time, how often do we wear them? I don't even know if this is what you were getting at, but this is what I got out of your wonderful poem. So even if I missed your point, it was very thought-provoking for me. Thanks for this wonderful piece of work.
Terry C.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2019
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This poem really resonates with me right now. How do I combine my love of people, my good feelings of helping others, with my ever present need for solitude?I can't believe you came up with that phrase of scripted face. That is phenomenal. How often do we see the scripted faces, and at the same time, how often do we wear them? I don't even know if this is what you were getting at, but this is what I got out of your wonderful poem. So even if I missed your point, it was very thought-provoking for me. Thanks for this wonderful piece of work.
Terry C.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2019
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2019
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Hi Terry. Thank you for sharing your personal experience and interpretation of this poem. "scripted face" is one of my favorite phrases, as well. So many perspectives have come along with this piece, and I love them all. It is my goal to encourage people to think about their lives and how they relate to and with others. Thank you for your kindness, and insightful review. Have a great new year.
Take care, Jesse
