Comment from Alex Rosel

Excellent

This captures quite a bit with just six words. If this was mine, perhaps I'd think about adding an exclamation mark after kerplunk and/or bam. Just a thought...

Best of luck with the voting when the booth opens {smiles}.

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019

Alex, excellent input! Smiling back...

Comment from Susan X Smith

Excellent

This poem captures a nice thought, but the way I interpret the contest guidelines, the whole story can't be more than six words. For example "The human vessel can be mended." Please check this out. (I could be wrong.)

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019

Hi Susan The six word story reads
Kerplunk, bam, broken bones, surgical repairs.

The author notes are the human vessel mending... :)

reply by Susan X Smith on 03-Oct-2019

So sorry. I missed that. Glad you corrected me. Well done, especially the first word.

Comment from Sallyo

Excellent

Only too close to home. My sister went kerplunk and broke her arm. The repairs needed repairing. This one certainly stirs up the emotions and makes one think so I think it works... even though there's a rhyme in there.

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 Comment Written 03-Oct-2019

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019

Hopefully I caught in time.