haiku (speedy hummingbird)
haiku (sixteen syllables)31 total reviews
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
I have been mesmerized while watching the hummingbird and totally relate to your succinct message. They seem to be playing a part as they dash on stage for a quick bow and feast. Very enigmatic creature, wouldn't you say? Your chosen art is apt.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2019
I have been mesmerized while watching the hummingbird and totally relate to your succinct message. They seem to be playing a part as they dash on stage for a quick bow and feast. Very enigmatic creature, wouldn't you say? Your chosen art is apt.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2019
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Thank you for the lovely review
Comment from Gail Denham
Cute - "fast food" - that's for sure - their wings beat so fast, one cannot see them - and seldom do they stay long enough even to burp. I think.
But I love to see them flit by.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2019
Cute - "fast food" - that's for sure - their wings beat so fast, one cannot see them - and seldom do they stay long enough even to burp. I think.
But I love to see them flit by.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2019
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Thank you for the fun review
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hi Val. Wow just wow on this one! I love the presentation and format but the thoughts are both quirky and cool. Fast food indeed. I love to watch the hummingbirds go for it. Good luck in your contest. I think this is a great entry. xoxo deborah
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2019
Hi Val. Wow just wow on this one! I love the presentation and format but the thoughts are both quirky and cool. Fast food indeed. I love to watch the hummingbirds go for it. Good luck in your contest. I think this is a great entry. xoxo deborah
Comment Written 21-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2019
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Thanks, that's is exactly how I wanted it to read. Hugs Old Friend.
Comment from l.raven
Hi Val, so good to see you sweet girl...
I went to see about voting...and I see it is
a FanStory contest...I love your poem my sweet friend...
and when you think about it...it truly is fast food for
birds seeking something to eat...I just threw a hand full of carrot's out for the rabbits...LOL...I love your poem you...and love your picture...very nicely written...Love you...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2019
Hi Val, so good to see you sweet girl...
I went to see about voting...and I see it is
a FanStory contest...I love your poem my sweet friend...
and when you think about it...it truly is fast food for
birds seeking something to eat...I just threw a hand full of carrot's out for the rabbits...LOL...I love your poem you...and love your picture...very nicely written...Love you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 20-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2019
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Thank you, Linda, for your wonderful review You are one of the few left on this site, that can actually write a decent review. I appreciate your support.
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thank you so much for all your kind words...and you are sooooo very welcome...God Bless...love you...xxoo
Comment from robyn corum
Val,
Certainly, they do grab their food on the FLY, don't they? I wonder if they are ever, ever, ever still. I have never seen any other form for these critters than full flight. Crazy. Thanks and good luck!
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
Val,
Certainly, they do grab their food on the FLY, don't they? I wonder if they are ever, ever, ever still. I have never seen any other form for these critters than full flight. Crazy. Thanks and good luck!
Comment Written 20-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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Thank you for the excellent review, Robyn. It means a lot coming form you.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello . Val Crisson
your picture of a humming bird and your haiku written in
5/9/2, which is 16 syllables.
Is good I know about how those little jewels, I have watched six of those hungry jewels need to act fast when they have a chance to feast.
Gert
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
Hello . Val Crisson
your picture of a humming bird and your haiku written in
5/9/2, which is 16 syllables.
Is good I know about how those little jewels, I have watched six of those hungry jewels need to act fast when they have a chance to feast.
Gert
Comment Written 20-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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I am so surprised to hear form you. Thank you for the kind review, and that you thought it was "good" Hope all is well with you.
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Smiles to you --- Val Crisson,
You are welcome.
I better look and see if I have you on my fan list, so I read your writings.
Gert
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I am not on this site as often as I used to be, but still do post from time to time. I would like to be on your fanlist, and would appreciate your input. As I know you know your haiku. Val
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Hello to you Val Crisson
Well you replied my message with speed.
I checked and Yes you are on my fanstory List.
Gert
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Wonderful! For their fast food, the hummingbirds come fast flying and instantly they grab a sip of nectar and fly freely; birds in action; well said, well done.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
Wonderful! For their fast food, the hummingbirds come fast flying and instantly they grab a sip of nectar and fly freely; birds in action; well said, well done.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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Thank you for the lovely review.
Comment from Susan Larson
This really made me laugh. With all our hungry humming birds it seems like I spend just as much time making nectar for them as I do making dinner for my husband and me. Never thought of sugar water being Big Macs for the birds! Love the punchline.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
This really made me laugh. With all our hungry humming birds it seems like I spend just as much time making nectar for them as I do making dinner for my husband and me. Never thought of sugar water being Big Macs for the birds! Love the punchline.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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Your review made me laugh. I am glad you see the humor in this little haiku thankyou
Comment from Susan X Smith
That is a great punch line - it really makes the Haiku and I'm sure it was intended that way. I also love the picture you chose to complement this piece. The whole poem was well written.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
That is a great punch line - it really makes the Haiku and I'm sure it was intended that way. I also love the picture you chose to complement this piece. The whole poem was well written.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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Thank you for the lovely review
Comment from kahpot
This is a wonderful Haiku well within the prompts requirements, I love the photo as the words describe the birds actions, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
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reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
This is a wonderful Haiku well within the prompts requirements, I love the photo as the words describe the birds actions, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
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Comment Written 20-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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Thank you for the review