Chip's Poetry
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Comment from Gail Denham
And some are truly wrong. True love is love that lasts awhile. Not a fleeting one-night stand - or even a few years and then "chuck it". Romance is only part of it. Commitment is the other part.
Nice poem.
reply by the author on 31-May-2019
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And some are truly wrong. True love is love that lasts awhile. Not a fleeting one-night stand - or even a few years and then "chuck it". Romance is only part of it. Commitment is the other part.
Nice poem.
Comment Written 30-May-2019
reply by the author on 31-May-2019
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Thanks, Gail!
Comment from Richard J
Dang!
This is simply gorgeously presented, and one cannot help but agree that it seems romance has become but a temporary pipe dream.
I cannot imagine this failing to do good in the contest.
Thanks bunches for sharing! ~ Richard : )
reply by the author on 31-May-2019
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Dang!
This is simply gorgeously presented, and one cannot help but agree that it seems romance has become but a temporary pipe dream.
I cannot imagine this failing to do good in the contest.
Thanks bunches for sharing! ~ Richard : )
Comment Written 30-May-2019
reply by the author on 31-May-2019
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And thanks a bunch for reading, Richard!
Comment from victor 66
I think any love poem is worth reading. The reason yours's stands out for me, is the "novel" play on words. I liked that very much. I wish you well in the contest.
reply by the author on 31-May-2019
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I think any love poem is worth reading. The reason yours's stands out for me, is the "novel" play on words. I liked that very much. I wish you well in the contest.
Comment Written 30-May-2019
reply by the author on 31-May-2019
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Thanks, Victor!
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You're welcome.
Comment from Patty Palmer
I like your poem! The picture ou chose reminds me of Gone With the Wind of Scarlet and Rhett Butler. And I thought the play on words was cute, It's a novel idea!
reply by the author on 31-May-2019
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I like your poem! The picture ou chose reminds me of Gone With the Wind of Scarlet and Rhett Butler. And I thought the play on words was cute, It's a novel idea!
Comment Written 30-May-2019
reply by the author on 31-May-2019
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Thank you, Patricia!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about the romance in true love that many see as only a novel idea and that true love cannot exist in rea life where there is too much drama that prevent true love.
reply by the author on 30-May-2019
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A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about the romance in true love that many see as only a novel idea and that true love cannot exist in rea life where there is too much drama that prevent true love.
Comment Written 30-May-2019
reply by the author on 30-May-2019
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Thanks.
Comment from fm wright
A truly wonderful love poem, but I would check the syllable count on you last line, as I count "novel idea" as four, not five syllables. I do wish you all the best with this entry!
reply by the author on 30-May-2019
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A truly wonderful love poem, but I would check the syllable count on you last line, as I count "novel idea" as four, not five syllables. I do wish you all the best with this entry!
Comment Written 30-May-2019
reply by the author on 30-May-2019
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Thanks, fm, it's already been changed!
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Good! I am going to re-read it!
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My bad, I thought you were pointing out that "a novel idea" (the original version) was too many syllables, which it was. "Novel idea" is 5 syllables.
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You're right!
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, Lovelorn, has the right set up and makes a jest of those too-good-to-be-true men with their integrity, passion, and good looks. Most men have a six-pack, but they drink them for lunch.
reply by the author on 30-May-2019
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This 5-7-5, Lovelorn, has the right set up and makes a jest of those too-good-to-be-true men with their integrity, passion, and good looks. Most men have a six-pack, but they drink them for lunch.
Comment Written 30-May-2019
reply by the author on 30-May-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, definitely a clever write with its imagery and succinctly astute pun - a striking presentation in both verse and well chosen picture - however, not compliant with the prompt. The last line has 6 syllables, versus the required 5 - "idea" has 3 syllables - how about the word "thought, " which is 1...
reply by the author on 30-May-2019
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In my opinion, definitely a clever write with its imagery and succinctly astute pun - a striking presentation in both verse and well chosen picture - however, not compliant with the prompt. The last line has 6 syllables, versus the required 5 - "idea" has 3 syllables - how about the word "thought, " which is 1...
Comment Written 30-May-2019
reply by the author on 30-May-2019
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Thanks for the catch, Eve, I have changed it!
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You are very welcome - glad to be of some assistance - best wishes in the contest...Eve
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You actually improved the write - it's perfect...Eve
Comment from oorwull
That's a great way to put it. Very true, as I see my wife engrossed in one book after another. It is truly a novel idea. Hope it comes through of you.
Oorwull
reply by the author on 30-May-2019
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That's a great way to put it. Very true, as I see my wife engrossed in one book after another. It is truly a novel idea. Hope it comes through of you.
Oorwull
Comment Written 30-May-2019
reply by the author on 30-May-2019
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Thanks, Oorwull.
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Welcome
Comment from kiwigirl2821
I love the last line which turns the whole piece upside down for me. I also love the humor of it and the thoughtfulness in which it is written. Well done and good luck. xoxo Kiwi
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reply by the author on 30-May-2019
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I love the last line which turns the whole piece upside down for me. I also love the humor of it and the thoughtfulness in which it is written. Well done and good luck. xoxo Kiwi
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Comment Written 30-May-2019
reply by the author on 30-May-2019
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Thanks, Kiwi!