Joy Ride for One
Unfamiliar Wedding Traditions41 total reviews
Comment from JDRBAR
I'm with your husband...No way would I be comfortable with that tradition LOL Other than that, the poem is very well done. I wish you luck with this in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2019
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I'm with your husband...No way would I be comfortable with that tradition LOL Other than that, the poem is very well done. I wish you luck with this in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2019
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He really was SUCH a very good sport!! (and he's finally forgiven me for making his life flash before his eyes on our wedding day...) Thanks for the fun review, JDRBAR.
Comment from giovannimariatommaso
I give 5*s because I like the poem. I like the experience that I can see in my mind's eye as well as relate to, & without getting too "teacher-like", read the poem out loud & from afar & see that it can be enhanced more.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2019
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I give 5*s because I like the poem. I like the experience that I can see in my mind's eye as well as relate to, & without getting too "teacher-like", read the poem out loud & from afar & see that it can be enhanced more.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2019
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Thank you for your review. I'd love it if you'd like to share the enhancements you feel it could use. I always welcome reviewers' suggestions.
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Thanks, no, I just did that for someone & they think that they are writing for themselves instead of their readers. & I was just chastized for what I thought would & could help. I know that I appreciate an opinion on writing for everyone has a preference. giovanni
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Well, Giovanni; I became a member on this site to learn and improve my writing skills, so I would gladly consider any words you had to offer. If not this time, though, please always feel welcome to do so in the future.
Comment from TPAC
Nicely spoken, compelling statements about commitment, feeling exchanged amounting years of togetherness. Well said, in my opinion of this work presented skills. Well, done by you.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2019
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Nicely spoken, compelling statements about commitment, feeling exchanged amounting years of togetherness. Well said, in my opinion of this work presented skills. Well, done by you.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2019
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Thank you, TPC; I appreciate your feedback on this.
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are creative, interesting and thought provoking.
The reader pondered on the words of this poem and how tradition
leaves a beautiful memory. The artwork is perfect and compliments
this poem well.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2019
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The author's words are creative, interesting and thought provoking.
The reader pondered on the words of this poem and how tradition
leaves a beautiful memory. The artwork is perfect and compliments
this poem well.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2019
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Thanks, Harmony13 for this nice review!
Comment from Gail Denham
Wonderful - what a happy day and fun that must have been. And singing - and dancing. Great. Nice memory. I have not figured out how to put my own photos on with my post. One of these days.
Really liked your poem and the picture.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2019
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Wonderful - what a happy day and fun that must have been. And singing - and dancing. Great. Nice memory. I have not figured out how to put my own photos on with my post. One of these days.
Really liked your poem and the picture.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2019
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Haha. Gail, if you know any children, they can help you. They never knew anything BUT how to work magic with computers!
Thanks for the very nice review. I appreciate it.
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Ha! Ha! - Finally, a few years into 21st Century my husband got me a half-way intelligent phone. Not smart yet cuz it hasn't taught me all I need to know. Ha
Last night we took two older teen g.kids out for burgers. They taught me more about the phone than even my husband knows. oi vey - these kids are born with computer in their hands I believe. And I'm told there's more intelligence stored in this little "smart" phone than they even had in the first space ships. What? and it's in my pocket?
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I wanted to say to the two teens last night - "could you come home with us and be our teens for awhile?"
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Hahaha. If you offered to feed them, I bet they'd have done it.
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Yeah, that's kind of too much power for a mere mortal to have, right?!
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This poem is very well-written and informative--a bit amusing too, as I can imagine the facial expressions he wore as the "ride" progressed.
You've made excellent use of specific details.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2019
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This poem is very well-written and informative--a bit amusing too, as I can imagine the facial expressions he wore as the "ride" progressed.
You've made excellent use of specific details.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2019
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Hahaha. He's the stoic variety, so what you see there is as bad as it got, but that expression pretty much sums it up. Thanks for the very nice review, Janice.
Comment from Mark D. R.
Yes, these are good memories.
Your verse ably describes the fear of being lifted into the air in an uncomfortable seat by likely some strangers.
Your rhyme scheme is spot on.
Glad the tide has been good to you these last 15 plus years.
Mark
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2019
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Yes, these are good memories.
Your verse ably describes the fear of being lifted into the air in an uncomfortable seat by likely some strangers.
Your rhyme scheme is spot on.
Glad the tide has been good to you these last 15 plus years.
Mark
Comment Written 27-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2019
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Thank you, Mark. This is a lovely review. I appreciate it.
Comment from LisaMay
Yeeha, ride 'em cowboy! We would say in Australia that glazed-eyed Bobby looks like a 'stunned mullet'. Funny poem, very descriptive. Interesting to learn more about Jewish wedding customs.
Have a nice time on Saturday night at that other wedding. Grin and bear it (best not to bare it, your lovely dress will be showing you off enough.)
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2019
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Yeeha, ride 'em cowboy! We would say in Australia that glazed-eyed Bobby looks like a 'stunned mullet'. Funny poem, very descriptive. Interesting to learn more about Jewish wedding customs.
Have a nice time on Saturday night at that other wedding. Grin and bear it (best not to bare it, your lovely dress will be showing you off enough.)
Comment Written 27-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2019
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Hahaha. Thanks, LisaMay.
Comment from Blue Hendrix
Great flow with this piece. The rhymes were good as well. this was a very well written piece with wonderful imagery and I thought you did an amazing job.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2019
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Great flow with this piece. The rhymes were good as well. this was a very well written piece with wonderful imagery and I thought you did an amazing job.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2019
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Wow! Thank you very much for this encouraging, thoughtful review!!
Comment from Sanku
What a lovely tradition..To be lifted up on chairs and carted around the room ..! Sure that would stay in mind for rest of the life as a precious pearl in the oyster of your memory. All the best for the contest.This looks like a winner.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2019
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What a lovely tradition..To be lifted up on chairs and carted around the room ..! Sure that would stay in mind for rest of the life as a precious pearl in the oyster of your memory. All the best for the contest.This looks like a winner.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2019
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I'm not exactly sure my HUSBAND likens that memory to a gem of the earth, but the rest of us in attendance certainly did. Thanks for this warm and gracious review, Sanku.
