Do You Snore?
a bored mind roams59 total reviews
Comment from QC Poet
It only ends in a real life nightmare. If unhappy more thought and to separate first is will save all involved heartburn. God luck with the poem and any real issues driving its makings.Thank you for Sharing your Gifts and insight.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2019
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It only ends in a real life nightmare. If unhappy more thought and to separate first is will save all involved heartburn. God luck with the poem and any real issues driving its makings.Thank you for Sharing your Gifts and insight.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from Ross E Silke
It has a nice rhythm and sound to it. It flows nicely and the ideas come across quite clearly. It's a sentimental piece with a hint of whim. It provokes thought and insightfulness from the reader. Thoughtfully composed and presented. Although the moral outlook seems tainted in this poem as I'm used to reading, my hope is that the lady will accept her husband as he is but encourage him to change and lift him up rather than turning the cheek. But you've used some nice imagery and word choices with a clever composer.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2019
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It has a nice rhythm and sound to it. It flows nicely and the ideas come across quite clearly. It's a sentimental piece with a hint of whim. It provokes thought and insightfulness from the reader. Thoughtfully composed and presented. Although the moral outlook seems tainted in this poem as I'm used to reading, my hope is that the lady will accept her husband as he is but encourage him to change and lift him up rather than turning the cheek. But you've used some nice imagery and word choices with a clever composer.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This well-written poem is an appealing and amusing blend of boredom, longing,
and somewhat naughty daydreaming about what each half of the couple might do if . . . .
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2019
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This well-written poem is an appealing and amusing blend of boredom, longing,
and somewhat naughty daydreaming about what each half of the couple might do if . . . .
Comment Written 28-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2019
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Smile. Yes. Thank you.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
This is a cute verse, well written and intersting.
Your story is clear. The short, simple lines make it easy and interesting to read.
Nice rhythm and flow.
Well done and thank you for sharing this with us.
Sharon
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2019
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This is a cute verse, well written and intersting.
Your story is clear. The short, simple lines make it easy and interesting to read.
Nice rhythm and flow.
Well done and thank you for sharing this with us.
Sharon
Comment Written 28-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2019
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Thank you, Sharon.
Comment from LIJ Red
Hey, that looks like ol' Norma Jean Whassername...gee, you mean all wives think like that, not just the few I have encountered? Yeah, thank the Maker wives can't read minds...sure has got a lotta rhymes for free verse...excellent post.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2019
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Hey, that looks like ol' Norma Jean Whassername...gee, you mean all wives think like that, not just the few I have encountered? Yeah, thank the Maker wives can't read minds...sure has got a lotta rhymes for free verse...excellent post.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from dragonpoet
Seems like this woman is planning a seduction of her neighbor to possibly have an affair because she is bored with her husband. If she tried as hard to seduce her husband maybe he would be more passionate.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Seems like this woman is planning a seduction of her neighbor to possibly have an affair because she is bored with her husband. If she tried as hard to seduce her husband maybe he would be more passionate.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 28-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Thank you, Joan.
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No problem, Victor.
Joan
Comment from Reese Turner
Wow! If I was just 40 years younger, I'd include my phone number here. As it is, I'm low on heart meds. Anyway, in "southern", we say "sultry". Interesting read. Nice picture. Thanks for a bright spot on this dreary winters day.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Wow! If I was just 40 years younger, I'd include my phone number here. As it is, I'm low on heart meds. Anyway, in "southern", we say "sultry". Interesting read. Nice picture. Thanks for a bright spot on this dreary winters day.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Ha ha. Thank you.
Comment from Louise Michelle
Can't hardly blame her for having a roaming mind when laying next to a snoring husband. Or is it lying? Oh, I can never get those straight.
'dreaming, no scheming' She better not! Besides, the fantasy is always better than the reality. Regards, Lou
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Can't hardly blame her for having a roaming mind when laying next to a snoring husband. Or is it lying? Oh, I can never get those straight.
'dreaming, no scheming' She better not! Besides, the fantasy is always better than the reality. Regards, Lou
Comment Written 28-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Most of the time. Ha ha. Thank you.
Comment from SLMorrical
I like this. I can relate to the woman in this poem. My husband snores, and I try to fall asleep before him. I don't think things like she does in the poem, but my mind does help me to focus on something else than his snoring. This flows well. It is an easy read to follow. Very well done. Keep writing.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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I like this. I can relate to the woman in this poem. My husband snores, and I try to fall asleep before him. I don't think things like she does in the poem, but my mind does help me to focus on something else than his snoring. This flows well. It is an easy read to follow. Very well done. Keep writing.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Smiles victortouche
Yes my mind does roam of the man that is home with me next to me in bed and lucky I wake him up when he strays to snore so he will not image someone like Marylin or think of the a veiled woman
with charms and style .
Smiles to you victortouche
Gert
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Smiles victortouche
Yes my mind does roam of the man that is home with me next to me in bed and lucky I wake him up when he strays to snore so he will not image someone like Marylin or think of the a veiled woman
with charms and style .
Smiles to you victortouche
Gert
Comment Written 28-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2019
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Smile. Thank you, Gert.