Paper Dolls and Toy Soldiers
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Comment from Aussie
Nothing wrong with using ye olde English, I do because I love it. Apart from that, enjoyed your toy soldier. Oh, to be a child again in a world of make-believe. Thanks for sharing.
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Nothing wrong with using ye olde English, I do because I love it. Apart from that, enjoyed your toy soldier. Oh, to be a child again in a world of make-believe. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
Comment from Marc Grimaldi
The imagination of boy playing army can fill a thousand dvds. Those days seem to be over, now that everything is iPods and such. The lice line was great and really added a laugh to the whole poem. Great job. Keep up the good writing!
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The imagination of boy playing army can fill a thousand dvds. Those days seem to be over, now that everything is iPods and such. The lice line was great and really added a laugh to the whole poem. Great job. Keep up the good writing!
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
Comment from Dawn Munro
First, your notes: NO! Do not give up. Stand your ground!
Oh. I guess you didn't. (lol) (Derring-do IS correct, after all.)
And now that I have totally charmed you (back, 'cause you have charmed ME with this sweet poem) I will take myself off to Walmart for de-lice shampoo. (Eeeeewwwww) HAHAHAHA!
All kidding aside, Michael, this was wonderful. VERY sweet, and lots of adorable images raced through my mind WITHOUT the picture. Can't think of a single thing I'd change.
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First, your notes: NO! Do not give up. Stand your ground!
Oh. I guess you didn't. (lol) (Derring-do IS correct, after all.)
And now that I have totally charmed you (back, 'cause you have charmed ME with this sweet poem) I will take myself off to Walmart for de-lice shampoo. (Eeeeewwwww) HAHAHAHA!
All kidding aside, Michael, this was wonderful. VERY sweet, and lots of adorable images raced through my mind WITHOUT the picture. Can't think of a single thing I'd change.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
Comment from kiwijenny
Oh my goodness I have never thought of delicing before you come home. I deal with lice as I teach preschool but it's tough. Teatree shampoo repels them just saying. Thank you for your service. Thanks for this poem
God bless
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Oh my goodness I have never thought of delicing before you come home. I deal with lice as I teach preschool but it's tough. Teatree shampoo repels them just saying. Thank you for your service. Thanks for this poem
God bless
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, such a charming write, generous in the definition of a child's imagination, narration in his voice accomplished very well, the photograph complementing the write perfectly. Smooth and lyric free verse moves the poem effortlessly in casual marching tempo. Derring-do or derring-don't, does it matter, really...
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In my opinion, such a charming write, generous in the definition of a child's imagination, narration in his voice accomplished very well, the photograph complementing the write perfectly. Smooth and lyric free verse moves the poem effortlessly in casual marching tempo. Derring-do or derring-don't, does it matter, really...
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A good image, Michael.
-Thanks for the notes.
-This is a good poem about
a young boy's imagination,
and what he 'accomplished'
in his battles with toy soldiers.
-I like the name "General Blithersnipe!"
-Too bad that young boys, and
girls, aren't encouraged to use
imaginations as much today.
-You write this in a fun way with
your own imagination and creativity.
-Have a great 2019!
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-A good image, Michael.
-Thanks for the notes.
-This is a good poem about
a young boy's imagination,
and what he 'accomplished'
in his battles with toy soldiers.
-I like the name "General Blithersnipe!"
-Too bad that young boys, and
girls, aren't encouraged to use
imaginations as much today.
-You write this in a fun way with
your own imagination and creativity.
-Have a great 2019!
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
Comment from rspoet
Hello Michael,
Imagination, ah there's the rub. What have we done to imagination?
With a change of a few words this could be my childhood.
Soldiers, space travelers (Flash Gordon), cowboys (Lone Ranger)
Great "daring-do," how dare you use proper Olde English
Well done
Robert
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Hello Michael,
Imagination, ah there's the rub. What have we done to imagination?
With a change of a few words this could be my childhood.
Soldiers, space travelers (Flash Gordon), cowboys (Lone Ranger)
Great "daring-do," how dare you use proper Olde English
Well done
Robert
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
Comment from catch22
Hi Mikey, I really liked this free verse. I believe your initial impulse to spell it derring-do was the correct one. I've never seen it spelled as you have put it, but hey, reviewers know best. I liked the descriptive phrasing in this verse, as you set up the scene for a small innocent child trying to play hero in a game of make believe. I thought you captured this quality well. Oh, if only we could all stay young forever...
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Hi Mikey, I really liked this free verse. I believe your initial impulse to spell it derring-do was the correct one. I've never seen it spelled as you have put it, but hey, reviewers know best. I liked the descriptive phrasing in this verse, as you set up the scene for a small innocent child trying to play hero in a game of make believe. I thought you captured this quality well. Oh, if only we could all stay young forever...
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
Comment from Treischel
A wonderfully written tale of daring-do formulated in the imagination of a boy playing soldier, I delighted in the imagery as confabulated it his mind. Nice Free Verse. It flows with a deft touch.
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A wonderfully written tale of daring-do formulated in the imagination of a boy playing soldier, I delighted in the imagery as confabulated it his mind. Nice Free Verse. It flows with a deft touch.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
Comment from meeshu
Your writing is smooth and the language is colorful. I enjoyed reading this writing so much. Brings me back to all the battles I fought in the trenches with a stick for a gun. Very well done, Michael........................meeshu
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Your writing is smooth and the language is colorful. I enjoyed reading this writing so much. Brings me back to all the battles I fought in the trenches with a stick for a gun. Very well done, Michael........................meeshu
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019