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Comment from Pantygynt
I thought this had a kind of rap feel about it and a beat that is not metrical but somewhat syncopated. Like the music you wish it to represent. You are right that there are a few forced rhymes here, words that are invented or produced for no logical reason other than to fit the rhyme scheme, which in this case is rhyming couplets. But really not too many.
While you are learning your art I would advise you to keep it as short as possible. Length for length's sake proves nothing. This is not too long. As I remember them discos used to go on forever. I hated the damn things.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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I thought this had a kind of rap feel about it and a beat that is not metrical but somewhat syncopated. Like the music you wish it to represent. You are right that there are a few forced rhymes here, words that are invented or produced for no logical reason other than to fit the rhyme scheme, which in this case is rhyming couplets. But really not too many.
While you are learning your art I would advise you to keep it as short as possible. Length for length's sake proves nothing. This is not too long. As I remember them discos used to go on forever. I hated the damn things.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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Thank you for reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from Dean Kuch
You have certainly managed to include some of the Diso era's latest and greatest in this delightfully funny contest entry, Anonymous Poet.
Although I grew up in the 70s I was never a fan of disco.
I have always been more of a Black Sabbath, Pink Floyd, and Creedence Clearwater Revival kinda guy.
I wore elephant bell bottom jeans just once in my life to my Senior Homecoming dance.
That's only because my girlfriend begged me to.
Sadly, my mom has a picture of me and my date in matching baby blue polyester pants in her possession. I hope to find and destroy the evidence before it's too late!
Heh-heh-heh...
Best of luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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You have certainly managed to include some of the Diso era's latest and greatest in this delightfully funny contest entry, Anonymous Poet.
Although I grew up in the 70s I was never a fan of disco.
I have always been more of a Black Sabbath, Pink Floyd, and Creedence Clearwater Revival kinda guy.
I wore elephant bell bottom jeans just once in my life to my Senior Homecoming dance.
That's only because my girlfriend begged me to.
Sadly, my mom has a picture of me and my date in matching baby blue polyester pants in her possession. I hope to find and destroy the evidence before it's too late!
Heh-heh-heh...
Best of luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
Comment Written 17-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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Never had elephant bells, thank God. It' be fun to write a poem or story using 70s rock songs. I wasnt a disco guy either CCR, Eagles, Bob Seger , and Steve Miller. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
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You're more than welcome.
Comment from Kelly Hanna
I loved this and would most likely vote your way! I really enjoyed the entire thing! I could gear each song as you highlighted and listed them. You should be proud of the creativity that this took to create! You've done a great job at keeping the reader entertained. From the photo to the songs. Just spectacular to stand out in a contest. I loved this one! Very well written!
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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I loved this and would most likely vote your way! I really enjoyed the entire thing! I could gear each song as you highlighted and listed them. You should be proud of the creativity that this took to create! You've done a great job at keeping the reader entertained. From the photo to the songs. Just spectacular to stand out in a contest. I loved this one! Very well written!
Comment Written 17-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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Thank you very much for the 6 star rating, i know how hard those are to earn. Im glad you enjoyed tis, it was fun to write. I appreciate you taking the time to read my work.
Comment from lyenochka
I recognized some of the titles. I think you did a good job and it is totally fine to have a free verse as you weave in all these song titles to make a poem.
"Whats' that sound" (What's)
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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I recognized some of the titles. I think you did a good job and it is totally fine to have a free verse as you weave in all these song titles to make a poem.
"Whats' that sound" (What's)
Comment Written 17-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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Thank you for reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from jenintorre
This is a very cute poem written in song titles. I love 80's disco music. When I here it I just have to dance. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Besst wishes. Jen.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2018
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This is a very cute poem written in song titles. I love 80's disco music. When I here it I just have to dance. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Besst wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2018
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Thank you for reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from Kerry Foley
lol, OMG! This is hilarious, my friend. You did a fabulous job on this. I love how you added the titles of songs throughout. I have no doubt this will do well in the contest.
Good luck! ~Kerry
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2018
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lol, OMG! This is hilarious, my friend. You did a fabulous job on this. I love how you added the titles of songs throughout. I have no doubt this will do well in the contest.
Good luck! ~Kerry
Comment Written 16-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2018
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Thank you, it was fun to write. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from LIJ Red
The rhymes and (this is an assumption, I missed the disco era altogether) titles worked into the poem seem to work well. (ask me about old country, spirituals and folk/rock)
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2018
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The rhymes and (this is an assumption, I missed the disco era altogether) titles worked into the poem seem to work well. (ask me about old country, spirituals and folk/rock)
Comment Written 16-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2018
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Thank you, it was fun to write. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from rjuselius
Hahahaha. lol. this is än entertaining piece of poetry dear anonymous! I think you have conveyed the title very well. it is just too funny. should do well.
thanks for sharing!
good luck!
blessings and a larger than life hug!
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2018
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Hahahaha. lol. this is än entertaining piece of poetry dear anonymous! I think you have conveyed the title very well. it is just too funny. should do well.
thanks for sharing!
good luck!
blessings and a larger than life hug!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 16-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2018
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Thank you very much for the six star rating. I'm glad you enjoyed the piece that much.
Comment from June Sargent
Who cares about meter and forced rhyme??? This is a fun poem that brings out the inner Disco Duck in all of us. And if you say you were never into disco - that's a lie...Loved the different references to the songs of the era. The secret to Stayin' Alive is to to Love the Nightlife and get some of that Hot Stuff! Well done.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2018
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Who cares about meter and forced rhyme??? This is a fun poem that brings out the inner Disco Duck in all of us. And if you say you were never into disco - that's a lie...Loved the different references to the songs of the era. The secret to Stayin' Alive is to to Love the Nightlife and get some of that Hot Stuff! Well done.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2018
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Thank you for taking the time to read it. I appreciate the five star rating.
Comment from RGstar
Great stuff. I knew all the songs and who sang them. I like these kind of poems when written well. This was entertaining. Brought back some memories.
Nicely done.
Good luck in the competition.
My very best wishes.
RGstar
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2018
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Great stuff. I knew all the songs and who sang them. I like these kind of poems when written well. This was entertaining. Brought back some memories.
Nicely done.
Good luck in the competition.
My very best wishes.
RGstar
Comment Written 16-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2018
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It was fun writing it. Thank you for reading and reviewing my work.