Act of Endurance
Viewing comments for Chapter 34 "Down On My Knee"Dawn of Chaos
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Comment from Beri Bee
Must to do I! Your sentence sets a fantastic tone for the deepness of these thoughts. They are not flattened-out sentences that lose their meaning. They gain meaning because they are unusually but precisely constructed. Right neither a side aim claim to protect. The pure fair of righteousness! This is amazing!
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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Must to do I! Your sentence sets a fantastic tone for the deepness of these thoughts. They are not flattened-out sentences that lose their meaning. They gain meaning because they are unusually but precisely constructed. Right neither a side aim claim to protect. The pure fair of righteousness! This is amazing!
Comment Written 10-May-2019
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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Glad my writes continue to capture your interests, thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed comments.
Comment from soulwriterslife
I found no form or understanding to this piece. I felt like verbally assaulted or yelled at. Now if that is what you were aiming for then this piece is amazing
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I found no form or understanding to this piece. I felt like verbally assaulted or yelled at. Now if that is what you were aiming for then this piece is amazing
Comment Written 10-May-2019
reply by the author on 10-May-2019
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I feel your view, trying to convey intensity without directly slamming or expressing true heart, hoping other writes written you find more appealing to your interests. Thanking you for your generous rate and warm sentiments.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
These is certainly a very emotional appeal that bares the author's soul and desire to the reader... beautiful fierceness mixed with prayer. :) ;) I've included one grammatical catch below -- employ as you like. :) Thanx for sharing! ;)
walk, took all --> walk, taken all
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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These is certainly a very emotional appeal that bares the author's soul and desire to the reader... beautiful fierceness mixed with prayer. :) ;) I've included one grammatical catch below -- employ as you like. :) Thanx for sharing! ;)
walk, took all --> walk, taken all
Comment Written 09-May-2019
reply by the author on 14-May-2019
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Appreciate your shout, reader comments like yours help enhance my writes presentation. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed comments.
Comment from Joan E.
You make "mystery and crime poetry" appealing. Your use of "rust" and "fool tax" were very effective, along with your echoing the title in the picture you selected and in the final line.
Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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You make "mystery and crime poetry" appealing. Your use of "rust" and "fool tax" were very effective, along with your echoing the title in the picture you selected and in the final line.
Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 14-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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Glad aspects of this particular write were found comprehensive, thrilling may I say to a point to your interests. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching sentiments.
Comment from Artasylum
I always have to read your work at least fie time and even then I could slant your thoughts in many direction... Still it is a fun puzzle to complete... thanks... yours, diana
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2019
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I always have to read your work at least fie time and even then I could slant your thoughts in many direction... Still it is a fun puzzle to complete... thanks... yours, diana
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2019
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I'm trying to lesser the confusion, desiring a slight bit of open choice of path by reader, defining not the same as my intent stated in work. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching thoughts.
Comment from Jaye Bennett
I have read this several times. I am sorry. All I can see is a bunch of words put together. Probably my problem, but there is no way to review something you cannot even put together. I was set to just not review it, but you need to know how others are seeing it. I'm sorry. Is there any way you can help me understand?
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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2019
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I have read this several times. I am sorry. All I can see is a bunch of words put together. Probably my problem, but there is no way to review something you cannot even put together. I was set to just not review it, but you need to know how others are seeing it. I'm sorry. Is there any way you can help me understand?
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Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2019
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Don't apologize for nothing, appreciating all comments about my writes, finding most of them perplexing to my reader. That's why I'm hear, given response such as your to better ehance my projected views in my writes. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed thoughts.
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I'll check back in later. If I continue reading your work, I may begin to understand it. I'll keep reading you, if you bear with me and my reviewing.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem and liars must once in a while take the responsibility to face the consequences of their lies. It does not only do harm to themselves but also to others.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2019
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A very well-written poem and liars must once in a while take the responsibility to face the consequences of their lies. It does not only do harm to themselves but also to others.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2019
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Indeed give an inch and they take a foot, downing always rather than uplift, needing an end to bring balance of right and wrong. Thanking you for your generous rate and warm sentiments.
Comment from royowen
I think I tend to agree with you, I'd much rather live in justice, and be just in your own dealings with others and in life. I enjoyed your slightly cryptic narrative, integrity when maintained creates endurance, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2019
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I think I tend to agree with you, I'd much rather live in justice, and be just in your own dealings with others and in life. I enjoyed your slightly cryptic narrative, integrity when maintained creates endurance, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 03-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2019
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I'm still trying to untwist my tongue, having fun with the endeavors, served extra bonus by rendered comments. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching views.
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Well done
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
I liked and enjoyed this poem, has free flow of thoughts, nice rhymes, good imagery and word visuals , clear about down on your knee; well said, well done. Write On To Inspire, Change, And Scribe To Influence Man For 1234 Years! --- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019
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I liked and enjoyed this poem, has free flow of thoughts, nice rhymes, good imagery and word visuals , clear about down on your knee; well said, well done. Write On To Inspire, Change, And Scribe To Influence Man For 1234 Years! --- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 03-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019
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I get kick a lot, needed kicks, and as stated become even more inspired bring a more precise feel within my work. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed response.
Comment from meeshu
you can't fight the system, TPAC. but surely we have to try. this world might not be ready for righteous, but there are others that are. great....................meeshu
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019
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you can't fight the system, TPAC. but surely we have to try. this world might not be ready for righteous, but there are others that are. great....................meeshu
Comment Written 02-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019
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Not you can destroy a system time or history proved this, having my own win. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed thoughts.