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Comment from Zue65
You shine best in writing scripts and that explains why you are ranked number one as a scriptwriter. The exchange of conversation is quite lively and will not bore the readers. Very well done. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2018
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You shine best in writing scripts and that explains why you are ranked number one as a scriptwriter. The exchange of conversation is quite lively and will not bore the readers. Very well done. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2018
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Thanks, nassus
Comment from lyenochka
Imaginative one with rainbow colored parakeets. I would think they should avoid meetings especially with Red and Green. Hmmm. Maybe just avoid anyone who says they are "new."
"Who are these human? I'm new." (humans)
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Imaginative one with rainbow colored parakeets. I would think they should avoid meetings especially with Red and Green. Hmmm. Maybe just avoid anyone who says they are "new."
"Who are these human? I'm new." (humans)
Comment Written 11-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2018
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Just Geen
(Lights go up a few seconds later. From a rustling bush a cat steps out with bright RED feathers in its mouth.)
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Yes, I did read that line. But still, Red was rather violent. Played into Green's plans, I guess.
Comment from damommy
Assassin parakeets. I've heard it all. So much for Green's innocence. This was fun to read. I like how they kept saying the same things over and over.
The cat's the only one to benefit from this. What do Green and Red get out of it.?
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Assassin parakeets. I've heard it all. So much for Green's innocence. This was fun to read. I like how they kept saying the same things over and over.
The cat's the only one to benefit from this. What do Green and Red get out of it.?
Comment Written 11-Apr-2018
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(Lights go up a few seconds later. From a rustling bush a cat steps out with bright RED feathers in its mouth.)
Green takes Red's place as bird wrangler.
Comment from judiverse
Green is funny. He seems clueless about what's going on, always saying he is new and not understanding things. Blue doesn't care about the cat, doesn't think it will bother her. They are willing to sacrifice one of their own if it will rid them of the bird. This is a regular "Animal Farm." Red thinks he's a mastermind, but it is justice in a way that he falls victim to the cat. There's the old standby about "having a conversation." Boy, these birds are too cunning for their own good. judi
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Green is funny. He seems clueless about what's going on, always saying he is new and not understanding things. Blue doesn't care about the cat, doesn't think it will bother her. They are willing to sacrifice one of their own if it will rid them of the bird. This is a regular "Animal Farm." Red thinks he's a mastermind, but it is justice in a way that he falls victim to the cat. There's the old standby about "having a conversation." Boy, these birds are too cunning for their own good. judi
Comment Written 11-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2018
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Maybe I?ll bring Green back for a sequel.
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It's a bird eat bird world, after all. judi
Comment from Artasylum
A little more action from red and the other and a little less yapping... i'm very upset. this is so fun. fast read. enjoyable read. loved it. yours, diana
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A little more action from red and the other and a little less yapping... i'm very upset. this is so fun. fast read. enjoyable read. loved it. yours, diana
Comment Written 11-Apr-2018
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Thanks, Diana
Comment from Swampfox1
Weird, to say the least. Hmm, who's out to get who. Wow. Its an amusing sort of thing that may never become a million seller but it does have its own perspectives. Thanks for sharing.
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Weird, to say the least. Hmm, who's out to get who. Wow. Its an amusing sort of thing that may never become a million seller but it does have its own perspectives. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2018
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Thanks?
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you're welcome
Comment from royowen
What a great little script Bill, hilarious from beginning to end, well plotted, I'd love to see how this could be played out on stage, it was funny to have Green's role, playing dumb while all the time being an ace plotter of doom, excellent job, Bill, great plot, funny dialogue. Well written, blessings, Roy
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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2018
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What a great little script Bill, hilarious from beginning to end, well plotted, I'd love to see how this could be played out on stage, it was funny to have Green's role, playing dumb while all the time being an ace plotter of doom, excellent job, Bill, great plot, funny dialogue. Well written, blessings, Roy
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Comment Written 11-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2018
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Thanks very much, Roy, for the kind review. Bill
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Welcome Bill.
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello Bill, I'm still laughing, this is so funny, and they get everything mixed up, I just loved it. And the ending, with that cat and Red, who go way back. What a great idea and all it is is parakeets on a branch, but their dialogue is priceless. I'm going to let the stars do the talking for this one. Ana.
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Hello Bill, I'm still laughing, this is so funny, and they get everything mixed up, I just loved it. And the ending, with that cat and Red, who go way back. What a great idea and all it is is parakeets on a branch, but their dialogue is priceless. I'm going to let the stars do the talking for this one. Ana.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2018
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Thank you, Ana, for the terrific review. So happy you got into it. Bill
Comment from Ulla
Oh dear, this is a very thought provoking piece of writing. On the surface, it's all good fun, but lurking behind it all is what is happening in this uncertain world. I liked it a lot. All the best. Ulla:))
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Oh dear, this is a very thought provoking piece of writing. On the surface, it's all good fun, but lurking behind it all is what is happening in this uncertain world. I liked it a lot. All the best. Ulla:))
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Comment Written 11-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2018
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Thanks, Ulla. Did you expect Green?
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No, I'll have to admit it came as a total surprise. I've just read your wee play again, and I never expected Green. Should have done, I now realise. :))