Perennials of War
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Comment from Sis Cat
I'm relieved that this chapter deals with the aftermath of the attempted assaination. The last capture left me in tears crying for shot school children. I enjoyed the twists and turns of this capture as you shift pace and Shana changes her mind: "I don't want the painting. Contact him and tell him that I give up."
I found humorous her feelings of guilt such as the pajama scene or the commandments:
"Do you have any idea how many commandments we've broken tonight?"
This dialogue is poignant:
"While I was hiding from the gunfire, I thought this is what my ancestors must have felt like hiding from the Nazi's."
One thing not believable is that the police would let Anderson leave a crime scene without interrogation.
Nevertheless, I was entertained and relieved.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2018
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I'm relieved that this chapter deals with the aftermath of the attempted assaination. The last capture left me in tears crying for shot school children. I enjoyed the twists and turns of this capture as you shift pace and Shana changes her mind: "I don't want the painting. Contact him and tell him that I give up."
I found humorous her feelings of guilt such as the pajama scene or the commandments:
"Do you have any idea how many commandments we've broken tonight?"
This dialogue is poignant:
"While I was hiding from the gunfire, I thought this is what my ancestors must have felt like hiding from the Nazi's."
One thing not believable is that the police would let Anderson leave a crime scene without interrogation.
Nevertheless, I was entertained and relieved.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2018
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Anderson was interrogated for over two hours. It's in the chapter. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
Drew might be saying " anybody would do it, but I think Shana knows better than that. Excellently described action sequences. I wonder if Kuzhnetsov really will ease off with the painting's ownership, and why is he trying to kill people, although his forces cam off a bad second best. Well done. Blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2018
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Drew might be saying " anybody would do it, but I think Shana knows better than that. Excellently described action sequences. I wonder if Kuzhnetsov really will ease off with the painting's ownership, and why is he trying to kill people, although his forces cam off a bad second best. Well done. Blessings, Roy
Comment Written 04-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2018
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Welcome Barbara
Comment from jppoet
Hi I usually prefer reading poems of all kinds but two of your fans suggested I give you a read and happy that I did. You have an interesting and suspenseful literary style which holds reader attention, "looking for more", as I will in your subsequent chapters. Your listing of Characters So Far helps new readers to enter your story. Congratulations, john
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reply by the author on 04-Mar-2018
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Hi I usually prefer reading poems of all kinds but two of your fans suggested I give you a read and happy that I did. You have an interesting and suspenseful literary style which holds reader attention, "looking for more", as I will in your subsequent chapters. Your listing of Characters So Far helps new readers to enter your story. Congratulations, john
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Comment Written 04-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2018
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Wow!!! Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Ben Colder
Now you done it! I can hear a noise. Yep, another half bed scoots near and the a faint snore. LOL. You are a mess, girl. If the picture goes so does the plot. Bring it on.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2018
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Now you done it! I can hear a noise. Yep, another half bed scoots near and the a faint snore. LOL. You are a mess, girl. If the picture goes so does the plot. Bring it on.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2018
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LOL Thank you for the kind review and continued encouragement.
Comment from Rasmine
Hello, :)
Obviously, you write it well enough to have the chapter selected for the monthly contest. Good luck with it too.
"Hopefully (comma, I think) this doesn't take long. Contact him and tell him, I give up?( this isn't a true question, so maybe a period instead?)"
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reply by the author on 04-Mar-2018
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Hello, :)
Obviously, you write it well enough to have the chapter selected for the monthly contest. Good luck with it too.
"Hopefully (comma, I think) this doesn't take long. Contact him and tell him, I give up?( this isn't a true question, so maybe a period instead?)"
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Comment Written 04-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2018
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I was making those changes as your reviewed. Thank you.
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Cool! :D