Herald of Spring
Lune: Contest Entry30 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Yes bird song always provides hope of spring coming sooner rather than later. Beautiful artwork was chosen to illustrate this lune
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
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Yes bird song always provides hope of spring coming sooner rather than later. Beautiful artwork was chosen to illustrate this lune
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 25-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
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Hello!
I appreciate your kind review and positive thoughts!
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Hi.
Any time, KT
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Comment from ameen786
Perfect 5/3/5 with a beautiful message of hope after a frigid winter; very well composed in few words reflecting plenty of hope; thanks for sharing and good luck!
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
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Perfect 5/3/5 with a beautiful message of hope after a frigid winter; very well composed in few words reflecting plenty of hope; thanks for sharing and good luck!
Comment Written 25-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
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Hello!
Thank you for your positive review and thoughts!
Comment from Joy Graham
Hi there,
I don't know if there are any specific rules about the lune poetry. I'm just going on the 5-3-5 syllable count which you have done superbly. We have a family contest as to who sees the first robin of spring. You have a pretty good aha moment or awareness moment in your first line. Lines two and three give the description. So this is haiku-ish. You even have a season reference. I love the picture. Best wishes to you in the contest.
Joy xx
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Hi there,
I don't know if there are any specific rules about the lune poetry. I'm just going on the 5-3-5 syllable count which you have done superbly. We have a family contest as to who sees the first robin of spring. You have a pretty good aha moment or awareness moment in your first line. Lines two and three give the description. So this is haiku-ish. You even have a season reference. I love the picture. Best wishes to you in the contest.
Joy xx
Comment Written 24-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Thank you, Joy!
I am very pleased that you appreciate my poem. It took me ever so long to pen this! I must have edited it at least a dozen times...attempting to find just the perfect words to express my message!
Best Wishes,
diane
Comment from Teri7
This is a very nice lune poem you have penned for the contest. You used great descriptive words and lovely art work for the imagery. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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This is a very nice lune poem you have penned for the contest. You used great descriptive words and lovely art work for the imagery. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 24-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Hello Teri!
Much appreciation for your kind review!
diane
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Lune Poetry writing prompt.
A nice message of hopes of spring.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the Lune Poetry writing prompt.
A nice message of hopes of spring.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 24-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Hello Sharon!
Thank you for your kind review!
diane
Comment from Vivian Newkirk
Very good, kept to the 5-3-5 model. Words paint a picture that reveals man's hope lies in overcoming the cold. Can also mean Hope conquers man's fears with a bird's sweet song.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Very good, kept to the 5-3-5 model. Words paint a picture that reveals man's hope lies in overcoming the cold. Can also mean Hope conquers man's fears with a bird's sweet song.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Hello Vivian,
I am so pleased that you find different interpretations for my poem. Deeply honored and humbled by your review.
Best Wishes,
diane
Comment from A. Louise Robertson
Such simple phrasing and yet you have said so much. The singing of birds often heralds the Spring, and I know I am not the only one who relates to the moment the song is first heard as a sign of hope. Well done, succinct and pure.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Such simple phrasing and yet you have said so much. The singing of birds often heralds the Spring, and I know I am not the only one who relates to the moment the song is first heard as a sign of hope. Well done, succinct and pure.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Hello!
My sincere appreciation for your thoughtful review.
diane
Comment from Debbie Pope
Just lovely. The photo adds much to the impact of your words. I'll hold onto that thought today as I freeze. I would not change a thing. Good luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Just lovely. The photo adds much to the impact of your words. I'll hold onto that thought today as I freeze. I would not change a thing. Good luck in the competition.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Hello Debbie!
I am so very pleased that you appreciate my offering.
diane
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This is a traditional natural Lune poem, a pleasant read, nothing heralds spring in winter; well said, well done; good luck to you with the contest. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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This is a traditional natural Lune poem, a pleasant read, nothing heralds spring in winter; well said, well done; good luck to you with the contest. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
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Comment Written 24-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Hello!
Thank you for your kind and thoughtful review.
dian
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I hope spring arrives for you soon and the robin can remove his red coat, as long as he can keep on singing, a delightful write and I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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I hope spring arrives for you soon and the robin can remove his red coat, as long as he can keep on singing, a delightful write and I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 24-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Hello Dolly!
I am hoping spring arrives soon, too! But I fear that we have about six more weeks of winter.
Thank you for your kind review!
diane