This Time - That Time 2
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "The Search Begins"Veronica is sent back again
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Comment from JDRBAR
An excellent chapter, great dialogue, (even though British LOL) and great progression of action. For a moment, I thought Michael might have been on to something, but you gave no indication of that.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2017
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An excellent chapter, great dialogue, (even though British LOL) and great progression of action. For a moment, I thought Michael might have been on to something, but you gave no indication of that.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2017
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Aha, keep that thought in mind! Thank you so very much for the lovely 6 stars, my friend, and for your really lovely review. I'm glad you like the dialogue, it is Mildred's character and most people seem to love her. I think she had her own fan club in book one. LOL. Thanks again, my friend, for such an encouraging review. :) Sandra xxxx
Comment from F. Wehr3
Good work, Sandra. I enjoyed this part of the story. Although I've missed a bit, the Daveth thing, I am still intrigued by what is to come. Good banter between Veronica and Ann.
Take care,
Russell
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017
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Good work, Sandra. I enjoyed this part of the story. Although I've missed a bit, the Daveth thing, I am still intrigued by what is to come. Good banter between Veronica and Ann.
Take care,
Russell
Comment Written 29-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017
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Thank you, Russell, that's so nice of you. I'm going to start a small synopsis for people who've missed a bit so it's not so confusing. I'm so pleased you are still with me though, thank you! :) Sandra xxx
Comment from Drew Delaney
I really don't have a full idea of the story you are writing about but I know you are doing the writing very well. Your characters are still unclear to me, but your writing style draws me in. You really have a knack of keeping the reader enthralled.
Drew xx
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017
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I really don't have a full idea of the story you are writing about but I know you are doing the writing very well. Your characters are still unclear to me, but your writing style draws me in. You really have a knack of keeping the reader enthralled.
Drew xx
Comment Written 29-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017
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I will put a synopsis up together to explain the story from the start. Considering you're not sure what's going on, it's really good of you to read it. Thank you so much, Drew. Big hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment from c_lucas
There is an old joke
About walls around grave yard
The walls kept others out
because everyone was dying to get in.
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This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017
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There is an old joke
About walls around grave yard
The walls kept others out
because everyone was dying to get in.
***
This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017
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LOL!!! That is so funny! I've never heard that before, I'm going to have to remember that one. Thank you so much, Charlie, I'm so pleased you enjoyed it. :) Sandra xx
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You 're welcome, Sandra. Charlie
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Storyline possesses enough action to move the tale along nicely.
Several different directions you could travel this accounting in from this point forward.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017
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Storyline possesses enough action to move the tale along nicely.
Several different directions you could travel this accounting in from this point forward.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017
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Thank you so much, Brett, I really appreciate you reading my story. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from nancy_e_davis
People were very superstitious back then and I can see where an albino child would be misunderstood and shunned. Veronica has a hard case to crack this time. I can see that, but I know she will be able to do it. Well done Dear. Nancy
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017
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People were very superstitious back then and I can see where an albino child would be misunderstood and shunned. Veronica has a hard case to crack this time. I can see that, but I know she will be able to do it. Well done Dear. Nancy
Comment Written 29-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017
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Thank you, Nancy, Veronica does like a challenge, and she has one this time! I wish she'd tell me how she's going to do it! LOL. Big hugs, my dear friend. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from Rasmine
Hello! :)
Okay, I missed chapters, so it looks like I will 'fan' you. :P
Good sentences: "Oh Lordy, Miss Veronica! You won't catch me diggin' up anything in the graveyard," she said, her face dead-pan serious. I must have looked puzzled because (comma) in the next instant, she burst out laughing. It was then that I cottoned on.
I lifted Michael out of his pushchair (comma) and let him wander around while Mildred and I searched the gravestones.
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Hello! :)
Okay, I missed chapters, so it looks like I will 'fan' you. :P
Good sentences: "Oh Lordy, Miss Veronica! You won't catch me diggin' up anything in the graveyard," she said, her face dead-pan serious. I must have looked puzzled because (comma) in the next instant, she burst out laughing. It was then that I cottoned on.
I lifted Michael out of his pushchair (comma) and let him wander around while Mildred and I searched the gravestones.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2017
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I'm wondering about the grave that had the butterfly on it that Michael found. I think that would have been a clue. I'll have to wait and see. I still really enjoy this story.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017
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I'm wondering about the grave that had the butterfly on it that Michael found. I think that would have been a clue. I'll have to wait and see. I still really enjoy this story.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017
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You are sharp. Barbara, lol. Thank you, my friend, for your wonderful review. I'm so happy you are enjoying my story. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xx
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Good chapter, but not much new. At least we know the girl had a visit from the ghost boy last night. I thought they might find the grave, but now what? Maybe the register will give a clue. IF they locate the boy and get him back to his own time, THEN perhaps a new stone will appear in the graveyard to show he made it back. Will be interesting to see what they learn... and how.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017
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Good chapter, but not much new. At least we know the girl had a visit from the ghost boy last night. I thought they might find the grave, but now what? Maybe the register will give a clue. IF they locate the boy and get him back to his own time, THEN perhaps a new stone will appear in the graveyard to show he made it back. Will be interesting to see what they learn... and how.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017
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It's the boy's dad who's missing, Daveth wants Veronica to find him and send him home. You've got the idea of the headstone right, if they can find him, that would happen. But, will they find him? Hmm. Thank you, Phyllis, for another lovely review. :) Sandra xx
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I think they will find him, since that is what the story is trying to do. LOL! :)
Comment from damommy
At first, I was afraid Anne had gone like her mother does, back in time. Whew! That would be very frightening for a child. Or maybe not, since she's not disturbed by Daveth's ghost.
I love a time travel story without all the scientific garble thrown in. A great story that's very entertaining and easily understood.
I'm betting Joe is stuck in present time. 8-)
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017
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At first, I was afraid Anne had gone like her mother does, back in time. Whew! That would be very frightening for a child. Or maybe not, since she's not disturbed by Daveth's ghost.
I love a time travel story without all the scientific garble thrown in. A great story that's very entertaining and easily understood.
I'm betting Joe is stuck in present time. 8-)
Comment Written 29-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2017
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Forgive me if I don't take your bet on, Yvonne!! LOL! Thank you so very much for the lovely 6 stars, my dear friend, and this lovely review. I really appreciate them. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xxxx
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Back at ya. 8-)
