Luna's Form Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 35 "Change"a place to gather my poetic forms
35 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
This is a very interesting and good poem you have penned. You used very good wording and I love the art work you chose for this. Great job! Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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This is a very interesting and good poem you have penned. You used very good wording and I love the art work you chose for this. Great job! Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 26-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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Thank you, Teri. I'm happy that you enjoyed reading this one and thank you for the kind review.
love,
jeni *smile*
Comment from Mastery
Hello, my friend. I never cease to be amazed at your knowledge of poetry and the construction of so many different styles. I have heard of and seen pyramids before, but nothing quite like this one. Bravo! Bob
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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Hello, my friend. I never cease to be amazed at your knowledge of poetry and the construction of so many different styles. I have heard of and seen pyramids before, but nothing quite like this one. Bravo! Bob
Comment Written 26-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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Bob, I just look at the forms and follow the directions -- it's like putting together a puzzle for me. I'm glad that you enjoyed this one and thank you, as always, for your kind review.
Your friend,
jeni *smile*
Comment from Mariana Frias
Beautiful! Brilliant! Exhuberant. You have done it again, my friend. I loved this piece a lot too. Thanks for all your hard work in writing it. That we may enjoy the great messages you set forth each time. Thanks.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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Beautiful! Brilliant! Exhuberant. You have done it again, my friend. I loved this piece a lot too. Thanks for all your hard work in writing it. That we may enjoy the great messages you set forth each time. Thanks.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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Thank you! A six-star review was something I never expected to see on this poem. I'm really happy that you enjoyed this and I thank you once again for the exceptional rating.
peace,
jeni
Comment from estory
I like the way this transformation unfolds, like the image of the caterpillar in the cocoon. the poem opens out from those short lines into longer and longer lines so I think its a good image for the form estory
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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I like the way this transformation unfolds, like the image of the caterpillar in the cocoon. the poem opens out from those short lines into longer and longer lines so I think its a good image for the form estory
Comment Written 26-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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Thanks, estory. I'm happy that you enjoyed this one. I appreciate your kind review and thoughts surrounding this poem.
peace,
jeni
Comment from DR DIP
whoa that is a very good description of a clarity pyramid and I am glad you included those Author's notes otherwise Jeni I had no idea of the rules of such a poem Thanks for sharing
dip
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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whoa that is a very good description of a clarity pyramid and I am glad you included those Author's notes otherwise Jeni I had no idea of the rules of such a poem Thanks for sharing
dip
Comment Written 26-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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You're welcome, dip. I'm just glad that you found the notes helpful and enjoyed the poem.
peace,
jeni
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
An amazing clarity pyramid you certainly are mastering all poetry for,s. This reminded me of a song by a band called Cast 'You've got to find time to pick the right time to make a change
Coz it's a fine time to pick the right time to make a change
So when you gonna learn that it takes all sorts
Don't you think life would be a little drab if we had the same thoughts..'
Your thoughts make for amazing poems Luna :) warmest regards and well done Meia :)
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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An amazing clarity pyramid you certainly are mastering all poetry for,s. This reminded me of a song by a band called Cast 'You've got to find time to pick the right time to make a change
Coz it's a fine time to pick the right time to make a change
So when you gonna learn that it takes all sorts
Don't you think life would be a little drab if we had the same thoughts..'
Your thoughts make for amazing poems Luna :) warmest regards and well done Meia :)
Comment Written 26-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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Dear Meia,
I loved those song lyrics. I'm going to have to look up the band. Thanks for your heartwarming review.
peace,
luna
Comment from ProSongwriter
Hi Jeni,
Loved this one. Using the emergence from a cocoon was a brilliant way to demonstrate the message. you did a wonderful job. Truly enjoyed it! God Bless,
Alan
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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Hi Jeni,
Loved this one. Using the emergence from a cocoon was a brilliant way to demonstrate the message. you did a wonderful job. Truly enjoyed it! God Bless,
Alan
Comment Written 26-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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Dear Alan,
I'm happy that you enjoyed this work and thank you for your thoughts on it. I appreciate your continued support of my writing efforts.
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Always my pleasure!
Comment from winnona
An interesting form of poetry. You have completed it well. The white lettering on the blue background made it easier to read. The words flowed well and combined easily forming the message of the poem for the reader.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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An interesting form of poetry. You have completed it well. The white lettering on the blue background made it easier to read. The words flowed well and combined easily forming the message of the poem for the reader.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2017
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Hi, winnona.
I'm glad you enjoyed this poem and that you had no trouble reading it. Thanks for the kind review.
peace,
jeni
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I have to say that this form strikes me as something someone wrote and then made a form out of it. just saying. I did this once and everyone fell for it. It has that sort of feel.
that being said, I like this. The denouement in the final line does a great job summing up that which comes before.
Nicely done
GMG
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
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Hi there,
I have to say that this form strikes me as something someone wrote and then made a form out of it. just saying. I did this once and everyone fell for it. It has that sort of feel.
that being said, I like this. The denouement in the final line does a great job summing up that which comes before.
Nicely done
GMG
Comment Written 26-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
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Thanks, GMG, it actually is a form, but it's admittedly not my favorite. A person who used to be a member of this site years ago invented it.
I appreciate that you like it. Thanks!
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Ah, that explains it.
Comment from Pantygynt
This seems to be related to the previous post which I declined to review. But this makes a great deal more sense. In many ways both the form and the way in which it works is similar to the Saphonic triad created on FanStory bu Ciliverde (Caro) and christened by myself.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
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This seems to be related to the previous post which I declined to review. But this makes a great deal more sense. In many ways both the form and the way in which it works is similar to the Saphonic triad created on FanStory bu Ciliverde (Caro) and christened by myself.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2017
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Now there's one I've not heard of. I must look it up and give it a try! Thanks, Jim, for the review.
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You will find quite a few in Ciliverde's portfolio. The form has been ussed in the poetry potlatch fairly recently.
