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Just a poem

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Comment from winnona
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Beautifully written poem. The words flowed easily line to line combing easily and forming the heartfelt message of the poem for the reader. The artwork is lovely and completed the piece well.

I hope you are up and feeling better now,

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 04-Jan-2017
    Hi winnona!

    First, thank you for your good wishes, Yes, I'm up and feeling much, much better.

    Secondly, I appreciate your kind words regarding this poem. I truly wasn't sure what kind of reviews it would receive, but I was moved to post it in any case. I'm happy that you enjoyed it.

    Love,

    jeni
Comment from sandy montgomery
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Interesting to read. Very "witchy" in flavor. Reminds me of Game of Thrones. Glad you are back. Look forward to reading you this year.

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 04-Jan-2017
    Well, I suppose you've accurately read the basis of my personality, sandy. The comparison to Game of Thrones is certainly humbling and appreciated.

    love,

    luna
Comment from mbroyles2
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I'm glad you are feeling better.
There is a lot of vivid imagery is this poem and you've done a great job.
"Bewitching and coquettish voice,
transformed your melancholy eye"
Really good!
"I pricked my finger on a rose
piercing thorns drew blood for you."
Extremely easy to visualize.
Michael

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 04-Jan-2017
    Hi, Michael, and thanks for your well wishes.

    I'm happy that you were able to find imagery in this piece. I was hoping that it would shine through to some of the readers.

    Thanks for reading and reviewing my work, as usual!

    Love,

    Luna
Comment from Gert sherwood
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Hello Jeni ( you are sill Luna to me)

Your poem I can see has a special meaning to you about your past encounter, with your last stanza when you said- I have the feeling you are referring to someone who you feel commands (could it be God)?

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 04-Jan-2017
    Hi, dear Gert! You can call me either Jeni or Luna, whatever is more comfortable to you, but I'm just glad that we've connected once again.

    This does have special meaning to me, and I appreciate you picking up on that.

    Thanks so much for reading my poem and leaving this review.

    Love

    Jeni (OR Luna! :))
reply by Gert sherwood on 04-Jan-2017
    You are welcome Luna
    Gert
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
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Hello Jeni - glad you are better after your spell in hospital. I have just read your profile. Welcome back. I read about Mickey and I am so sorry. You never get over something like that - my sister lost her son 9 years ago, the same way. Tragic! I enjoyed reading your poem - well written, emotional and I particularly was struck by the line - It's only you (submission's whip) - very good. God Bless and Happy New Year - warm regards Dorothy

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 04-Jan-2017
    Hi, Dorothy (that happens to be my daughter Colleen's first name!)

    I truly appreciate your welcome back and your very kind condolences about the loss of my firstborn, Mickey. We will mark his second anniversary this Sunday, Jan 8. I'm sure that your sister remembers well each year the day she lost her son, and please offer her and your family my sincere sympathies.

    On a lighter subject, I'm really happy that you enjoyed my poem and offered me the line that struck you the most. That's very helpful..

    Love,

    jeni
reply by Dorothy Farrell on 04-Jan-2017
    Welcome Luna - my sister lost her son 9 years ago on 17 December, a week before Christmas. Dorothy
Comment from Dean Kuch
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Thank goodness you're okay, Jeni. It's nice to have you back.
Yes, I would personally categorize this darkly decadent little ditty a free verse.
Others may have a differing opinion, however.
Regardless of whether it is free verse or something else altogether different is really irrelevant.
It's poetry, and it's more than a bit moribund and dire, and that's good enough for me and all I need to know.
Excellent...
~Dean

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 04-Jan-2017
    Hi, Dean, I am so happy to be back in your midst and thank you for the well wishes.

    Actually, Jim gave me some fine ideas on how to restructure the writing so that it would be more effective and powerful to the reader.

    Had to start the year with moribund and dire, Dean. Not feeling too warm and fuzzy, the second anniversary of Mickey's death is on this Sunday and I'm sure after that I'll be in a more upbeat frame of mind.

    Thanks, my friend.

    Jeni
reply by Dean Kuch on 04-Jan-2017
    That's completely understandable considering the circumstances, Jeni.
    It certainly can't be an easy time for you.
    My thoughts and prayers are with you.
    ~Dean
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
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Well this is a great piece, it could be a song or a wonderful poem, whatever it is great, heartfelt and infused with pathos and emotion.Well done.

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 04-Jan-2017
    I thank you, Meia, for your kind words of review. I'm happy that you were moved to write to me after reading my poem.

    Always,

    Jeni
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
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Welcome back! It is a lovely free verse and the content is powerfully executed which makes the read emotionally charged. Nicely done and I thank you very much for sharing it.

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 04-Jan-2017
    Thank you for taking the time to leave this kind review. I appreciate you reading my work and thanks for the welcome back!

    Yours,

    Luna
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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I'm sorry to hear you've been unwell, not nice spending time in hospital. This is a different poem, it's almost as if she is submissive to the man she loves but he doesn't love her back. I might have read it wrong though. I hope you continue to get better and I wish you a happy new year to you too. :) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 04-Jan-2017
    First, thanks for the well wishes, sandra!

    You've intuitively interpreted this poem. I wasn't sure whether to post it as it was written in a very short time with little revision. I hope you're well!

    Love,

    jeni
Comment from dragonpoet
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Glad to hear you are on the mend. This is free verse. It seems to be about a bad relationship that is hard to totally break from. He is a jerk if he is ignoring you because he got you pregnant. It should be the opposite.

Keep writing

Joan

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2017

reply by the author on 04-Jan-2017
    Hi, Joan, thanks for the good wishes.

    There are many different ways, it seems, to interpret this poem. I thank you for choosing to read it and to leave me your kind review. Glad to hear from you.

    Love,

    jeni
reply by dragonpoet on 04-Jan-2017
    You're welcome. I consider it a very good poem when it has different meanings for different people.

    Joan

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