To Last Forever
Viewing comments for Chapter 31 "Exotic "Poems by Michael
47 total reviews
Comment from c_lucas
Strangers in the night
Can make each other's life so bright.
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This is very well written with a smooth, enticing flow of words, making for an interesting read.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2016
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Strangers in the night
Can make each other's life so bright.
**
This is very well written with a smooth, enticing flow of words, making for an interesting read.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2016
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Thanks Charlie...-smile-....love to you man...Michael
Comment from RGstar
''Pursuasion, breathless, oxygen''
That is passion rolled into one. As usual, love the cryptic style. You have made it your own and I always love to read as I know I am in for thought.
Expressive with imagery in abundance, my friend. Special as it is imagery full.
You have my six stars. I am away at the moment trying to move into new flat after a year in the wilderness, so will piriodically come into review. Good to see your work.
Best wishes,
RG
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2016
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''Pursuasion, breathless, oxygen''
That is passion rolled into one. As usual, love the cryptic style. You have made it your own and I always love to read as I know I am in for thought.
Expressive with imagery in abundance, my friend. Special as it is imagery full.
You have my six stars. I am away at the moment trying to move into new flat after a year in the wilderness, so will piriodically come into review. Good to see your work.
Best wishes,
RG
Comment Written 24-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2016
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You know I appreciate you more than you know.
your honest support since we met...means everything, because you're the best Poet on here and you enjoy my writes...I am confirmed. Always love to you Bro. Michael
Comment from Judvan2
Great poem. Its sexy, fun and I love the way you put the pictures and music in place. The words you use are fluid and the descriptions are perfect. Good job!
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2016
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Great poem. Its sexy, fun and I love the way you put the pictures and music in place. The words you use are fluid and the descriptions are perfect. Good job!
Comment Written 24-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2016
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Thank you very much...-smile-....happy you enjoyed. love to you ....Michael
Comment from Kelly2
I think you used the most beautiful words imaginable in this poem. I'm not a poem person, so is this why I don't understand what you are saying?
I would like to know if this is just a casual liaison as your "Spartacus" reference seems to allude to. Or a true love.
I read it three times, but still the end confused me. What are we talking about "mind control" for, when making love?
I understand that one must decipher for themselves a poem's meaning, so maybe I'm not experienced enough to do that. So I apologize. But you used the most beautiful words I could imagine.
Kelly
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2016
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I think you used the most beautiful words imaginable in this poem. I'm not a poem person, so is this why I don't understand what you are saying?
I would like to know if this is just a casual liaison as your "Spartacus" reference seems to allude to. Or a true love.
I read it three times, but still the end confused me. What are we talking about "mind control" for, when making love?
I understand that one must decipher for themselves a poem's meaning, so maybe I'm not experienced enough to do that. So I apologize. But you used the most beautiful words I could imagine.
Kelly
Comment Written 24-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2016
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acknowledged....
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I hope I wasn't too hard on you. I just really don't get poems, I guess. So put it on me, not you.
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your not sitting on me dont worry about it.
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
Lovely flow to this beautiful poem you have written. It also is packed with great imagery through your chosen words. Intelligent and romantically stimulating work. I love this song/video that you used in your presentation...nice compliment to the piece. Thoroughly enjoyed the read...thank you for the dance! lol...God bless and hugs, Susanne
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Lovely flow to this beautiful poem you have written. It also is packed with great imagery through your chosen words. Intelligent and romantically stimulating work. I love this song/video that you used in your presentation...nice compliment to the piece. Thoroughly enjoyed the read...thank you for the dance! lol...God bless and hugs, Susanne
Comment Written 24-Jun-2016
Comment from johnwilson
This is quite a piece of work and I re-read it quite a few times. It has the ebb and flow of the dance you used. The words infected the mind with passion. The ending is very powerful.
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This is quite a piece of work and I re-read it quite a few times. It has the ebb and flow of the dance you used. The words infected the mind with passion. The ending is very powerful.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2016
Comment from Just2Write
Lots of tantalizing phraseology in this poetic, Michael. Your use of verbal imagery to let us see the setting sun through the eyes of the dancers is vivid.
Great alliterations on the 's' sounds with your opening line and again in stanza 3 with 'o' sounds.
Nice internal rhyme of swallowed and follows
Nice word-play with 'mind control'
If you don't mind CONTROL
if you don't MIND control.
Just a wee nit on the possessives you use:
teases temptations [temptation's]
this tangos [tango's]
Rose.
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Lots of tantalizing phraseology in this poetic, Michael. Your use of verbal imagery to let us see the setting sun through the eyes of the dancers is vivid.
Great alliterations on the 's' sounds with your opening line and again in stanza 3 with 'o' sounds.
Nice internal rhyme of swallowed and follows
Nice word-play with 'mind control'
If you don't mind CONTROL
if you don't MIND control.
Just a wee nit on the possessives you use:
teases temptations [temptation's]
this tangos [tango's]
Rose.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2016
Comment from Caressa_08
This was a good read for me with an appropriate tilte ...and not at all boring... and like the clever words that you chose in the last line, along with the animated picture and the video which adds greatly to your poetry...And, too, somewhat envious of those authors who have succeeded, like yourself..& others here that have managed to give their poetry an extra appeal this way...Need to get schooled on doing this.
Caressa_08
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This was a good read for me with an appropriate tilte ...and not at all boring... and like the clever words that you chose in the last line, along with the animated picture and the video which adds greatly to your poetry...And, too, somewhat envious of those authors who have succeeded, like yourself..& others here that have managed to give their poetry an extra appeal this way...Need to get schooled on doing this.
Caressa_08
Comment Written 24-Jun-2016
Comment from nomi338
There is something very sensual about dances like the tango. Your thrilling scenario set up by your exciting wordplay set the scene and create the mood in a very convincing way. I am a big fan of the ABC show Dancing With the Stars and I cannot believe that there are not more hookups resulting from the increased intimacy induced by some of the dances that do. This is a very good post. I enjoyed it very much.
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There is something very sensual about dances like the tango. Your thrilling scenario set up by your exciting wordplay set the scene and create the mood in a very convincing way. I am a big fan of the ABC show Dancing With the Stars and I cannot believe that there are not more hookups resulting from the increased intimacy induced by some of the dances that do. This is a very good post. I enjoyed it very much.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2016
Comment from Lynn27
This is a great poem and full of powerful lines. I found some parts difficult to read. I think that's just me some the words you used I don't read them every day.
I still found this an enjoyable read.
Happy birthday!
Lynn
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This is a great poem and full of powerful lines. I found some parts difficult to read. I think that's just me some the words you used I don't read them every day.
I still found this an enjoyable read.
Happy birthday!
Lynn
Comment Written 24-Jun-2016
