Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi, Ulla

= You're very good with your conversation.
= Nice build up for the great end hook, leaving the reader wanting to know what will happen.
= Excellent chapter.

<> Incorrect punctuation as is. This can be written two ways.
<> Also, this line needs a space between it and the one above.
= Yours ="Hello, Ulla, Is that you?"
= Suggest #1 = "Hello, Ulla. Is that you?"
= Suggest #2 = "Hello, Ulla, is that you?"

<> Comma needed.
= "Okay, Ulla, I am still at the school(,) and yes,

<> Comma needed. Smoother read with =so= in place of =and=
= I'm off for now(, so) [and] take care."

<> Comma needed. Missing verbiage for cohesiveness.
= Yours =
"Oh, Grethe same to you and speak soon. So glad we talked tonight.
= Suggest =
"Oh, Grethe, same to you. We'll speak soon. So glad we talked tonight.

<> Don't separate =and then= with a comma. One unneeded comma.
= Yours =
The next few weeks passed very quickly and, then one day, the phone call
= Suggest =
The next few weeks passed very quickly, and then one day the phone call

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 Comment Written 01-May-2016

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reply by the author on 02-May-2016

Hi Jax, and thanks a lot for this great feed back. I have made the changes and I think it reads so much better. All the best. Ulla:))

Comment from seaglass

Excellent

In wanted to interrupt and remind you to get her phone number while you had her on the phone. Lol. You left us hanging so post another segment very, very soon.

 Comment Written 01-May-2016

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reply by the author on 02-May-2016

Hahaha, seaglass, so right, but it never occurred to me when I spoke to Grethe that many years ago. Thanks for a great review. All the best. Ulla:))

Comment from Mary Wakeford

Excellent

I can't handle the suspense! You have described the scene as well as your personal fatigue well considering the travel, the need for aloneness to fully process the events, and the longing to speak with the person who set you so wisely on the path for truth and equity. Well written.

 Comment Written 01-May-2016

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reply by the author on 02-May-2016

Hi Mary, This is a great review, and thanks a lot for that. More to follow soon. All the best. Ulla:))

Comment from DonandVicki

Excellent

I have been following your story with a lot of interest for a while now and you always manage to keep the story fresh. Very nicely done.

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 02-May-2016

Hello there, thanks a lot for a great review and your praise. I'm so pleased. All the best. Ulla:)))

Comment from MelB

Excellent

Another great chapter, Ulla. I can't wait to find out if you get to make a liar out of that lawyer. Now, off to Copenhagen.

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 03-May-2016

Hi Mel, and thank you so much for a great review. All the best. Ulla:)))

Comment from Mastery

Excellent

Hi, Ulla. How are you, my friend. You certainly make a good written accounting for this period of your life just as you did the other parts.

Isn't it funny how things work out for us sometimes. what a day you had and thenthe rest to boot.

Good write. Bravo! Bob

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 03-May-2016

Thanks a lot Bob, You are so right. Things work in their mysterious ways. As you know I'm so enjoying reading your story as well. All the best. Ulla:))

reply by Mastery on 03-May-2016

Thanks so much, Ulla.

Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

Yeah, it's nice to read that you're making headway, and scheduled to go back to Copenhagen and burn that thieving lawyer's butt, not literally, of course. Great job. :-)

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 03-May-2016

Ric, thanks a lot for your great review and you do make me laugh. He was a ... well I better not go there. LOL. All the best. Ulla:))

Comment from foxangie123

Excellent

You are the queen of the writing world in my opinion. You capture me as well as any audience with your relatable superb writing skills. Fabulous writing.

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 05-May-2016

Aww, Angie, thanks ever so much. You always give me so much praise. I am of course pleased. All the best. Ulla:)))

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

This is the life of one who travels. Your post is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is very good imagery.

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 05-May-2016

Thanks very much for this great review. All the best. Ulla:)

Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep

Excellent

Ah, this next chapter will be interesting, I think. Well they are all interesting, this one will be more so. A couple of words missing in the middle, I lost track, and some inverted commas to be fixed up, fourth last paragraph. This is a wonderful story, Ulla. Simple, but full of drama and movement, Gidd :)

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 05-May-2016

Hi Giddy thanks very much for your great comments. I've made the corrections, and sorry for my late reply. I'm catching up. All the best. Ulla:)))