A Book of Love
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Music "Assorted poems of love
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Comment from Dean Kuch
This is fabulous, Missy. The message here is subtle --not "in-your-face"--because it doesn't have to be. Black, White (this could pertain to people of all races, colors and creeds), working together as one to create harmony. Top it all off with the beautiful image of an old piano, and you've got yourself the makings of a poetic masterpiece.
A wonderful take on the photo for the Picture This poetry group challenge.
Well done! ~Dean
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2016
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This is fabulous, Missy. The message here is subtle --not "in-your-face"--because it doesn't have to be. Black, White (this could pertain to people of all races, colors and creeds), working together as one to create harmony. Top it all off with the beautiful image of an old piano, and you've got yourself the makings of a poetic masterpiece.
A wonderful take on the photo for the Picture This poetry group challenge.
Well done! ~Dean
Comment Written 04-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2016
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I really hate to do this but because I am ill at the moment and have so many to reply to I am gonna copy and paste this generic and unsatisfactory reply to all my lovely reviews. Please forgive me.
Missy
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Consider it done, Missy.
Sometimes, circumstances dictate we must do this. Otherwise we will never get any writing done.
No worries, and you're more than welcome.
Dean~~>
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your challenge poem. I see it as commentary on society--it takes all kinds to create harmony but it has to be worked at! Good job and thanks for sharing.
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I enjoyed your challenge poem. I see it as commentary on society--it takes all kinds to create harmony but it has to be worked at! Good job and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2016
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I really hate to do this but because I am ill at the moment and have so many to reply to I am gonna copy and paste this generic and unsatisfactory reply to all my lovely reviews. Please forgive me.
Missy
Comment from TAB_that's me
Great picture you picked Missy. Music (and your poem) does have soul in it - soul is what turns a poem into poetry as well.
Teresa
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016
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Great picture you picked Missy. Music (and your poem) does have soul in it - soul is what turns a poem into poetry as well.
Teresa
Comment Written 04-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016
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Thank you, precious for this lovely review. :)
Missy
Comment from kittykatnoel
Nice, I feel like this one goes deeper than the other poem you posted, but that the other one is more light hearted. They go together like the black keys and white keys, very well done.
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Nice, I feel like this one goes deeper than the other poem you posted, but that the other one is more light hearted. They go together like the black keys and white keys, very well done.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016
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Thanks again, KK. I have a hard time writing longer poems like I see some others do. So, I am delighted that you read and reviewed both :)
Always,
Missy
Comment from Bill O'Bier
The author has a created a wonderful metaphor about inclusiveness and coming together to create harmony. It is very well written with an interesting flow of words, making for a very good read. I enjoyed your poem. It has very good imagery.
Thanks for sharing
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The author has a created a wonderful metaphor about inclusiveness and coming together to create harmony. It is very well written with an interesting flow of words, making for a very good read. I enjoyed your poem. It has very good imagery.
Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 04-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016
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Hi, Bill, this is a lovely review :). Thank you for stopping by and leaving it.
Always,
Missy
Comment from Marykelly
You invite the reader into your poem by challenging the reader to think of the keys. Personification with the keys gives even more sense of invitation. The message is clear that white and black keys must work together to find harmony and by extension society must do the same to find harmony. You have packed a lot into a simple verse that isn't so simple after all.
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You invite the reader into your poem by challenging the reader to think of the keys. Personification with the keys gives even more sense of invitation. The message is clear that white and black keys must work together to find harmony and by extension society must do the same to find harmony. You have packed a lot into a simple verse that isn't so simple after all.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016
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Mary, thank you for this exceptional review of my work. I appreciate all I get here in FanStory. I have grown in the year(almost) that I have been here. Simply because of the helpful reviews from wonderful writers such as you.
Always,
Missy
Comment from rama devi
Nice use of the ivory and ebony metaphor.
Insightful observation, true of all art:
We play fine ...on the surface
But depth is missing
Without the harmony of the black keys
There is no soul
To our music
Nice near rhyme of keys and masterpiece.
good use of spacing and font to sculpt cadence and highlight words and ideas.
My only suggestion is to trim out the period at the end, since the poem has no other end-line punctuation.
Lovely presentation. What a fun challenge!
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016
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Nice use of the ivory and ebony metaphor.
Insightful observation, true of all art:
We play fine ...on the surface
But depth is missing
Without the harmony of the black keys
There is no soul
To our music
Nice near rhyme of keys and masterpiece.
good use of spacing and font to sculpt cadence and highlight words and ideas.
My only suggestion is to trim out the period at the end, since the poem has no other end-line punctuation.
Lovely presentation. What a fun challenge!
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 04-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016
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Thank you, RD. I have removed the period, per your suggestion. I get twisted on punctuation in free verse. I think I need to take a class this year. Again, thanks for stopping and leaving this just awesome review!
Always,
Missy
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Thanks for your gracious response, dear Missy! Warm Smiles, rd
Comment from scongrove
Fabulous job Missy! :)
I love this! You did a fantastic job using the different keys on the piano to express how to put together a song to create a masterpiece. I love the description that you used. Great imagination.
Shana :)
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016
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Fabulous job Missy! :)
I love this! You did a fantastic job using the different keys on the piano to express how to put together a song to create a masterpiece. I love the description that you used. Great imagination.
Shana :)
Comment Written 04-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016
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GIRL!!! You are just the most wonderful fan, to me. I have been a horrible fan and I have missed one or 2 of your wonderful chapters in Chaos. I read the latest but am searching for the one where Kara is killed. grrr.
Love ya, sweetie!
Always your biggest fan,
Missy
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You're welcome! :) I know it's hard to keep up w/everyone's stuff ... don't sweat it. Hope your New Year was great.
Shana :)
Comment from Pantygynt
Musically speaking you are of course quite right. The Key of E with four sharps is a much more exciting key than C with nothing but boring white notes, and that vibrant brass bands and much of Jazz is played in B flat (two black notes). An interesting comment on the picture.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016
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Musically speaking you are of course quite right. The Key of E with four sharps is a much more exciting key than C with nothing but boring white notes, and that vibrant brass bands and much of Jazz is played in B flat (two black notes). An interesting comment on the picture.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016
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Your eyes have cleared I see(LOL) Thanks, Gynt for the review. I have read your most recent post and will review shortly.
Thanks again, hon.
Always,
Missy
Comment from MelB
A very nice interpretation of the Picture This challenge. I like how you have used the black and white keys to bring this to harmony and creating a masterpiece.
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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016
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A very nice interpretation of the Picture This challenge. I like how you have used the black and white keys to bring this to harmony and creating a masterpiece.
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Comment Written 04-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2016
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Here you are again, Mel. Thanks, hon. :)
Always,
Missy