The Quest
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Comment from Zue65
This is a nice chapter on the most important part in tracing back your life. The story right from your mother's mouth is really quite exciting and we, the readers would really like to know too, all the details. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2015
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This is a nice chapter on the most important part in tracing back your life. The story right from your mother's mouth is really quite exciting and we, the readers would really like to know too, all the details. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2015
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Thank you so much for this heartfelt review. More is to follow soon. All best. Ulla
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
It's so heart-warming to have found
your mother and hear the story of
what happened, but rather emotional
as it all unfolds.
a well written chapter, Ulla.
Margaret
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2015
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It's so heart-warming to have found
your mother and hear the story of
what happened, but rather emotional
as it all unfolds.
a well written chapter, Ulla.
Margaret
Comment Written 06-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2015
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Thank you so much Margaret. I am so pleased that you like it. More is to follow soon. All the best. Ulla
Comment from jpduck
Your mother certainly had some strength.
I would like to suggest that you use a different colour for the 'Previously' section, to make it easier for readers to see where that ends, and the new chapter begins.
'I nodded, I could do that, and encouraged her to carry on with the story' (I think you need something a bit stronger than a comma after 'nodded' -- a semi-colon, or even a full stop).
'No, it's only that when I received the very first information about you, I actually went there' (I don't think the 'No' at the start of this sentence does anything useful).
Adrian
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2015
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Your mother certainly had some strength.
I would like to suggest that you use a different colour for the 'Previously' section, to make it easier for readers to see where that ends, and the new chapter begins.
'I nodded, I could do that, and encouraged her to carry on with the story' (I think you need something a bit stronger than a comma after 'nodded' -- a semi-colon, or even a full stop).
'No, it's only that when I received the very first information about you, I actually went there' (I don't think the 'No' at the start of this sentence does anything useful).
Adrian
Comment Written 06-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2015
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Adrian, thank you so much for your useful review. I have made changes to the writing as suggested. I'm working on to make the distinction clearer between the 'previous and main chapter but having some problems. Have made some changes that makes it a bit clearer in the meantime. More of my story to follow soon, All the best. Ulla
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Well written story that depicts how lost a soul "Mum" was at the time she gave you up for adoption.
Or how much she was only into what she wanted without any regards for you or your wellbeing.
Case in point is deliberately providing the authorities with the wrong address when you were born.
When in reality she only went there after receiving the first information about you.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2015
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Well written story that depicts how lost a soul "Mum" was at the time she gave you up for adoption.
Or how much she was only into what she wanted without any regards for you or your wellbeing.
Case in point is deliberately providing the authorities with the wrong address when you were born.
When in reality she only went there after receiving the first information about you.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2015
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Thank you so much for your review. I am glad that you like the writing itself. What I don't quite get is your negativity against my mum's motive. Nowhere does that come through in my story. Ulla
Comment from Lesley Collier
A very poignant part of a story that follows the reunion of an adapted woman and her true birth mother as her mother tries to explain her situation and why she had to make the hard decision of putting her daughter up for adaption.Well written with vivid emotions and an interesting plot!
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2015
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A very poignant part of a story that follows the reunion of an adapted woman and her true birth mother as her mother tries to explain her situation and why she had to make the hard decision of putting her daughter up for adaption.Well written with vivid emotions and an interesting plot!
Comment Written 06-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2015
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Thank you so much. I'm so pleased that you like it. More is to follow soon. All best. Ulla
Comment from Eric1
Hi Ulla, your story gets more heartbreaking with every chapter, this one was most heartfelt and very touching, it must be difficult to have to write this my friend.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2015
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Hi Ulla, your story gets more heartbreaking with every chapter, this one was most heartfelt and very touching, it must be difficult to have to write this my friend.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2015
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Thank you so much for your heartfelt review, Eric. It is not difficult while I'm writing it, but afterwards I feel quite drained. I suppose it's from reliving all the emotion. More is to follow soon. All the best. Ulla
Comment from Robert Louis Fox
Very tender. Very touching. Your mother's revelations are a fascinating glimpse into mid-century morays.
At least times you move the story along using the same device: "I begged Mum to continue..." It gets tired. Maybe you could use other devices to move the story ahead.
I like the way the tension is building, both for you and your mother--she re living a bittersweet time in her life, and you nearing your quest.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2015
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Very tender. Very touching. Your mother's revelations are a fascinating glimpse into mid-century morays.
At least times you move the story along using the same device: "I begged Mum to continue..." It gets tired. Maybe you could use other devices to move the story ahead.
I like the way the tension is building, both for you and your mother--she re living a bittersweet time in her life, and you nearing your quest.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2015
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Robert, thanks a lot for this review. Very useful as usual, and I changed the sentences the minute I received this. Even I got bored, and thanks for bringing it to my attention. Amazing, I didn't notice on my numerous edits.
I am pleased that you like my story and more to follow soon. All the best. Ulla
Comment from Curly Girly
This is a fascinating story, Ulla. I am amazed to hear that Denmark didn't have a system to help single mothers back in those days--after all, it wasn't really that long ago. Your adoptive mother's words were not very kindly, had she thought harder before she spoke to you about the loss of your child. I hope you went on to have other children. Your natural mother was in a very difficult situation and it is clear to see that she could not turn to her mother or father for help. It appears as if your father simply abandoned her, and I'm looking forward to reading the next part.
Nicole
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2015
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This is a fascinating story, Ulla. I am amazed to hear that Denmark didn't have a system to help single mothers back in those days--after all, it wasn't really that long ago. Your adoptive mother's words were not very kindly, had she thought harder before she spoke to you about the loss of your child. I hope you went on to have other children. Your natural mother was in a very difficult situation and it is clear to see that she could not turn to her mother or father for help. It appears as if your father simply abandoned her, and I'm looking forward to reading the next part.
Nicole
Comment Written 06-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2015
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Hi Nicole. Thank you so much for your lovely review, and of course the stars. Back then it still held a stigma to be pregnant outside wedlock, something that totally changed barely teen years later.
My adoptive mother was a piece of work. After that I hardly ever saw her again. Oh, I have a lovely daughter and two gorgeous granddaughters, one and a half and four years old.
Yes, it was a difficult situation for my birth mother, but more is to follow soon. Thanks a lot again. All the best.Ulla
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I am pleased to hear that you have a daughter and grandchildren, Ulla. Family is important.
Nicole
Comment from patcelaw
Being a mother who gave up a son for adoption I am captivated with your story. My son and I when we met talked at length about his birth, his blood relatives and all. Since I was raped while under the effect of a drugs he put in my drink and had passed out. I have no recall of the event that got me pregnant. I asked if he wanted to know who his father was he refused, he said if he ever met the man he would beat him to a pulp for drugging and then raping a woman.
Patricia
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2015
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Being a mother who gave up a son for adoption I am captivated with your story. My son and I when we met talked at length about his birth, his blood relatives and all. Since I was raped while under the effect of a drugs he put in my drink and had passed out. I have no recall of the event that got me pregnant. I asked if he wanted to know who his father was he refused, he said if he ever met the man he would beat him to a pulp for drugging and then raping a woman.
Patricia
Comment Written 05-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2015
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Oh, Patricia, what a harrowing experience you have been through. I am so sorry. I can actually sympathise with your son. Poor you. It must have been beyond awful. I lack words really. I am only happy that you met your son again. All the best. Ulla:)
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My life story was made into a radio drama. If you would care to hear the story just google Patricia Lawrence/unshackled. when there my story is programs 3325 and 3326 to listen to the entire story it takes about 1 hour. You would have to do the search twice so listen to part 3325 first so the rest of the story will be in context.
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My life story was made into a radio drama. If you would care to hear the story just google Patricia Lawrence/unshackled. when there my story is programs 3325 and 3326 to listen to the entire story it takes about 1 hour. You would have to do the search twice so listen to part 3325 first so the rest of the story will be in context.
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Oh, I would love to do that. Thanks so much for the info. I'll come back to you when I have listened. Ulla xxx
Comment from Pyrrho
I know I read and reviewed this a short while ago. I must have been one of those times I lost the review and Fan Story locked up. It is SPAG free and I sped-read it this time.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2015
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I know I read and reviewed this a short while ago. I must have been one of those times I lost the review and Fan Story locked up. It is SPAG free and I sped-read it this time.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2015
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Thank, you very much. I hope you still liked it the second time you read through. All best. Ulla