2015 Haiku
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "5/7/5 (be more like a tree)"A collection of haiku I wrote in 2015
42 total reviews
Comment from Jackarrie
This is a very good entry into the tree hugger contest. I like the sentiments of the poem, unfortunately, I am not as flexible as I would like. Great images. Good luck in the contest
Mary
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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This is a very good entry into the tree hugger contest. I like the sentiments of the poem, unfortunately, I am not as flexible as I would like. Great images. Good luck in the contest
Mary
Comment Written 18-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2015
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Thank you Mary :) I appreciate your kind words.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Great images, presentation. and format.
-I especially like the second image.
-The message in the poem is good:
Be grounded like a tree but flexible, as well.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2015
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-Great images, presentation. and format.
-I especially like the second image.
-The message in the poem is good:
Be grounded like a tree but flexible, as well.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2015
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Thank you :)
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You are welcome.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I really enjoyed your 5/7/5 poem. Good job on the message and syllable count. The artwork is awesome. I see no changes.
Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2015
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I really enjoyed your 5/7/5 poem. Good job on the message and syllable count. The artwork is awesome. I see no changes.
Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2015
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Thank you Jannypan
Comment from Neonewman
Wow! This is the one to beat for this tree huggers 5-7-5 contest you have entered. Brilliantly crafted and spot on. The artwork is dynamic.
God bless and best of luck.
Steve
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2015
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Wow! This is the one to beat for this tree huggers 5-7-5 contest you have entered. Brilliantly crafted and spot on. The artwork is dynamic.
God bless and best of luck.
Steve
Comment Written 17-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2015
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Thank you Steve :) I really appreciate your kind words and positive review.
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My pleasure!
Comment from patcelaw
I want to be like a tree planted but the river, with my roots firmly planted so I can grow strong and tall. Blessings, Patricia
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2015
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I want to be like a tree planted but the river, with my roots firmly planted so I can grow strong and tall. Blessings, Patricia
Comment Written 17-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much :)
Comment from PoemsOfDD
Ooh, this is a good one. A very solid Tree hugger 5-7-5 writing promp. It is brief but to the point allowing for the reader to be reflective. My only comment would be the background colour choice. I know you are trying to match the picture attached but perhaps have a play and see what it looks like with a softer brown colour to give it a more earthly feel. Well done and good luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2015
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Ooh, this is a good one. A very solid Tree hugger 5-7-5 writing promp. It is brief but to the point allowing for the reader to be reflective. My only comment would be the background colour choice. I know you are trying to match the picture attached but perhaps have a play and see what it looks like with a softer brown colour to give it a more earthly feel. Well done and good luck in the competition.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and feedback :)
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Pleasure. DD🌸
Comment from LIJ Red
As for improving your work, I can't help you. These short poems are easy to find prompt flaws in, especially the five-seven-fives. I don't see any. And as to making it more nearly a great, classic work, I haven't a clue. Looks like an excellent entry.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2015
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As for improving your work, I can't help you. These short poems are easy to find prompt flaws in, especially the five-seven-fives. I don't see any. And as to making it more nearly a great, classic work, I haven't a clue. Looks like an excellent entry.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and feedback :)
Comment from robyn corum
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I LIKE this one! Not only does it perfectly meet the 5/7/5 - syllable criteria for the contest, but it SAYS something! *smile* I like the message very much! Good luck!
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2015
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oooOOoooOOOOoooo...
I LIKE this one! Not only does it perfectly meet the 5/7/5 - syllable criteria for the contest, but it SAYS something! *smile* I like the message very much! Good luck!
Comment Written 17-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and feedback :)
Comment from GentleWind
Flexible and grounded truth! This piece is visually flowing with life. Great job on the artwork too. You can draw much truth for living from this. Good job
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2015
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Flexible and grounded truth! This piece is visually flowing with life. Great job on the artwork too. You can draw much truth for living from this. Good job
Comment Written 17-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and feedback :)
Comment from RGstar
Good rhetoric. For such a short write you present a strong write.
I have a love for trees in poetry...hence, like this.
Good luck.
Best wishes,
RGstar
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2015
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Good rhetoric. For such a short write you present a strong write.
I have a love for trees in poetry...hence, like this.
Good luck.
Best wishes,
RGstar
Comment Written 17-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much RGstar :)