Tears
Would you have the strength?30 total reviews
Comment from Michaelk
Simply excellent! You did a magnificent job of conveying a myriad of emotions in very few words. This story carried chapters of detail with it, distilled down to fifty words, amazing.
The last line was the most telling. It spoke of his love for her in wanting to alleviate her pain and his sacrifice of losing his companion.
There's no way I couldn't give this a six.
reply by the author on 04-May-2015
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Simply excellent! You did a magnificent job of conveying a myriad of emotions in very few words. This story carried chapters of detail with it, distilled down to fifty words, amazing.
The last line was the most telling. It spoke of his love for her in wanting to alleviate her pain and his sacrifice of losing his companion.
There's no way I couldn't give this a six.
Comment Written 04-May-2015
reply by the author on 04-May-2015
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Many thanks for the very generous rating and great review, Michael. I was struggling with what to write until my wife and I had a chat about this. I also work with the elderly at the moment and some of them had 'just had enough' in their words. Your thought are much appreciated.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Ouch, what a question to introduce this horrifying and oh-so-sorrowful mini-story. You've written a masterful tale in so few words - marvelous entry! Here's wishing you much luck.
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Ouch, what a question to introduce this horrifying and oh-so-sorrowful mini-story. You've written a masterful tale in so few words - marvelous entry! Here's wishing you much luck.
Comment Written 04-May-2015
reply by the author on 04-May-2015
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Many thanks for the great review. It's a controversial topic and at least one reviewer has been put out by it, but so be it. I wonder how many people would want to hasten the end when it is their turn, and the burden that places on their loved ones. Much appreciated
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I hear you - we have the compassion and strength so often for our beloved animals (pets), yet we question the act for suffering loved ones? An extremely difficult topic...more sad than frightening, I think. Any reviewer who is 'put out' by a writing of fiction isn't thinking clearly, IMO - we're writers. There should be no topic that is taboo/censured, especially considering the write was fictional. Would that reviewer like to limit imagination? Sheesh...(sigh)...
Comment from bizzygirl
Profound. A topic we truly need to open in discussion. It is heart wrenching to think of killing someone you love, and yet you wonder if you love them how can you not take away their pain? God has the final decision, at least that is what I have always been taught to believe. I cannot truly understand the thought process of this but am touched by the desire of many. Excellent food for thought
reply by the author on 04-May-2015
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Profound. A topic we truly need to open in discussion. It is heart wrenching to think of killing someone you love, and yet you wonder if you love them how can you not take away their pain? God has the final decision, at least that is what I have always been taught to believe. I cannot truly understand the thought process of this but am touched by the desire of many. Excellent food for thought
Comment Written 04-May-2015
reply by the author on 04-May-2015
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I guess it is a very controversial topic. I have heard it said that we would put animals out of their suffering so should not 'we' as rational beings have that same choice. What an nus to put o loved ones though, and the consequences of such actions. Many thanks for reading and for your thoughts. They are very much appreciated.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, G...
Wow! This has a strong message with super impact. Having seen family members suffer a horrible deaths, this has crossed my mind.
What would I do if they had asked me to pull a Kavorkian. I knew someone whose daughter was a Kavorkian patient.
Wow... well done entry. Good luck.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
reply by the author on 04-May-2015
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Hi, G...
Wow! This has a strong message with super impact. Having seen family members suffer a horrible deaths, this has crossed my mind.
What would I do if they had asked me to pull a Kavorkian. I knew someone whose daughter was a Kavorkian patient.
Wow... well done entry. Good luck.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
Comment Written 04-May-2015
reply by the author on 04-May-2015
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Many thanks for your thoughts on this, Jax. It is something my wife and I discuss from time to time and I have no strong feelings on it. Might be different if it was me in that position - either position! Much appreciated, as always.
Comment from humpwhistle
You tell a complete story. And I admire the way you
hold back the reveal until the end. Still, I find melodrama and death an easy way out.
Just an opinion.
Best of luck at the polls.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 04-May-2015
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You tell a complete story. And I admire the way you
hold back the reveal until the end. Still, I find melodrama and death an easy way out.
Just an opinion.
Best of luck at the polls.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 04-May-2015
reply by the author on 04-May-2015
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Hi Lee, many thanks for the honest review, as always. This was something my wife and I had been discussing recently so it was in my mind when the prompt came up. Much appreciated.
Comment from robina1978
You fulfilled the requirements of the prompt. It is a sad story. A man kills his wife with a pillow. This was her dying wish. And I agree it is a matter of choice but legally it is not allowed. Good original story, best wishes for the prompt.
reply by the author on 04-May-2015
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You fulfilled the requirements of the prompt. It is a sad story. A man kills his wife with a pillow. This was her dying wish. And I agree it is a matter of choice but legally it is not allowed. Good original story, best wishes for the prompt.
Comment Written 04-May-2015
reply by the author on 04-May-2015
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Many thanks for the review and your thoughts on it. It is a thorny issue, and as you say, the law is clear on the problem, but still... How do you know until you are there, on either side of the fence? Much appreciated.
Comment from Sis Cat
An excellent flash fiction of terror and, oddly, kindness. At first I thought that this was a murder, but then your "dying wish" line made me think it was euthanasia of a terminally ill woman. This was well done and gripping. Thank you for sharing.
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An excellent flash fiction of terror and, oddly, kindness. At first I thought that this was a murder, but then your "dying wish" line made me think it was euthanasia of a terminally ill woman. This was well done and gripping. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 04-May-2015
reply by the author on 04-May-2015
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Many thanks for the great review, my friend. I am glad that the end 'caught' you. As always, your thoughts are much appreciated.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Action flows smoothly but story line is not one I would want to read a second time. Graphic in details but still murder.
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Action flows smoothly but story line is not one I would want to read a second time. Graphic in details but still murder.
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Comment Written 04-May-2015
reply by the author on 04-May-2015
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Many thanks for the review, and your thoughts on the piece. I am interested to find out what you think would improve on the piece as you don't appear to have stated this in your review but have rated it thus. In what way was it graphic? Much appreciated.
Comment from Praise000
hie Girraffmang
I believe you have managed to hook the reader by your
first lines
"Callum looked deep into his wife's eyes.
She silently pleaded with him as he lifted the pillow.
Tears streamed down her face as her mouth moved in silent prayer..."
You neatly crafted a story in few words, Best wishes fom Praise000
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hie Girraffmang
I believe you have managed to hook the reader by your
first lines
"Callum looked deep into his wife's eyes.
She silently pleaded with him as he lifted the pillow.
Tears streamed down her face as her mouth moved in silent prayer..."
You neatly crafted a story in few words, Best wishes fom Praise000
Comment Written 04-May-2015
reply by the author on 04-May-2015
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Many thanks for the great and generous response. This is a thorny issue, and my wife and I have talked about this recently. The word limit is tricky but it can lead to some great little stories. There are some superb entries in this contest. Much appreciated.
Comment from alexisleech
I think it's almost impossible to make a real 'story' from fifty words, but you've certainly managed to do that here. One can't imagine what it must feel like to be put out of your misery, but with just a few words, you have managed to portray that emotion here.
Well done, and good luck in the writing prompt.
Alexis x
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reply by the author on 04-May-2015
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I think it's almost impossible to make a real 'story' from fifty words, but you've certainly managed to do that here. One can't imagine what it must feel like to be put out of your misery, but with just a few words, you have managed to portray that emotion here.
Well done, and good luck in the writing prompt.
Alexis x
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Comment Written 04-May-2015
reply by the author on 04-May-2015
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Many thanks for the great review, Alexis. There are some real good ones in here, too. My wife and I were discussing this early so it was fresh in my mind. Much appreciated.