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Ain't That The Truth

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Short poems poking fun at the human condition.

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Comment from Dean Kuch
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Ha-ha! I would die laughing if I saw a sign like that in my church, Spit. But you know, it's really not a bad idea when you come to think about it. After all, love thy neighbor...but don't give them your germs!

Great, thanks for the belly laugh. I needed one about now! :)

~Dean

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2015


reply by the author on 22-Apr-2015
    Glad I brightened your day. Haven't seen your name lately. Are you okay?
Comment from kiwijenny
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Ha ha ha actually rather wise..I work at a preschool and if those kids were people they'd be gross...I used to stay sick all the time until I used chia seeds..8400 antioxidant orac value in a tablespoon...they could post that under the sign
God bless

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2015


reply by the author on 22-Apr-2015
    Chia seeds. How interesting. You just stated one reason I couldn't work with kids. Sticky all over and runny noses.
reply by kiwijenny on 22-Apr-2015
    You forget they also poop and pee and play with themselves ....but they also hug and are adorable
    :o)
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2015
    Oh, geez. That's an image that's not appealing if they forget to wash their hands.
Comment from walbc
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You have great alliteration in the second line. Your 5-7-5 is very original and evokes a stark image. Well done.

Warm Regards,
Wendy.

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2015


reply by the author on 22-Apr-2015
    Thanks, Wendy.
Comment from petalangela
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So droll god does not do germs. Please keep your distance...perhaps miracles are reserved for only those that are saved?
Please do not shake hands or embrace passing the kiss of peace could give God to many miracles to perform

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2015


reply by the author on 22-Apr-2015
    I get the humor of your review. Wonder if the common cold will ever disappear from life. Hey, remember, when we wore gloves to church? The service didn't include shaking hands. That came much later.
reply by petalangela on 23-Apr-2015
    Alas I am not a practising Christian so I have no memories but I applaud those who have faith.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
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I have to be honest, without that note I wouldn't understand what the reason for the elbow bumps. That is the reason for the lower rating. I was confused. After I understand the message I think you did a great deal with the limitation of this poetry type. Very creative.

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 Comment Written 22-Apr-2015


reply by the author on 22-Apr-2015
    LOL. Even my doctor doesn't shake hands with patients anymore.
    The less time touching skin plus a smaller area, the less likely one is to pass on germs. I mean, who coughs or sneezes without cupping a hand near their face. If you didn't understand, I assume you're not a churchgoer, which is okay. But why would you bother to read something you don't get?
reply by Michael Ludwinder on 22-Apr-2015
    I read everything. If I don't understand it as a reader I thought it would be helpful for you to know that I didn't understand it.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2015
    Whatever. :-)
Comment from Sasha
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This is great and with all the diseases going around, a little elbow pumping wouldn't be bad alternative. Great work with this one and definitely thought provoking.

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2015


reply by the author on 22-Apr-2015
    Thanks, Sasha. Of course, if someone gets carried away and knocks too hard.... :-)
Comment from Deniz22
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I attend a church once where only about 25 people showed up. At one point, everyone was encouraged to shake hands with each other...as in all...as in everyone. Right after this little ritual, a guy wearing a baseball cap...that's right...who was seated up front, began wiping his hands with an antiseptic cloth. Somehow, it destroyed the sense of warm intimacy so recently striven for...I like the elbow thing.

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2015


reply by the author on 22-Apr-2015
    A baseball cap to church! How disrespectful. I get the point about intimacy, but I am very germ conscious too.
    Thanks again for encouraging me to join your contest. First time I've won in a loooooooooooong time.
    You asked why I was writing my bio. I got to thinking about it and realized that the eventual ending shows how much I grew spiritually.
reply by Deniz22 on 22-Apr-2015
    Good reason...:) JB
Comment from skye
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offer the peace sign
pastor prompts coughing church crowd
elbow pumps resound

Physical contact spreads disease, so this is a great alternative.
Well done. Terrific art choice.

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 Comment Written 22-Apr-2015


reply by the author on 22-Apr-2015
    Thanks, skye. Even my doctor won't shake hands anymore!