To Cherish Thorns
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "The Gathered Ghosts"Free Verse Poetry
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Comment from krys123
Mikey;
+ Enjambment the running on every thought or concept from online or stanza and verse to the next without a syntactical break which was all throughout the poem.
+ Juxtaposition The strong technique is used to take two separate but distinct images and put them together in a poem. In this circumstance she used similarity and comparison techniques in this poem.
+ Pictures was very helpful in describing the poem's atmosphere but it also took away from the rhythmic reading of the poem as there were many pictures between the verses. If possible I suggest making a collage of the pictures.
+ Imagery was superb and the stress of nature and vividly descriptive aspects of the picturesque words were helpful in determining the attitude, reflectiveness and
posture of the poem.
+ Good luck in the contest Mike you may the good Lord be with you always my friend.
Alex
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Mikey;
+ Enjambment the running on every thought or concept from online or stanza and verse to the next without a syntactical break which was all throughout the poem.
+ Juxtaposition The strong technique is used to take two separate but distinct images and put them together in a poem. In this circumstance she used similarity and comparison techniques in this poem.
+ Pictures was very helpful in describing the poem's atmosphere but it also took away from the rhythmic reading of the poem as there were many pictures between the verses. If possible I suggest making a collage of the pictures.
+ Imagery was superb and the stress of nature and vividly descriptive aspects of the picturesque words were helpful in determining the attitude, reflectiveness and
posture of the poem.
+ Good luck in the contest Mike you may the good Lord be with you always my friend.
Alex
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Comment Written 09-Mar-2015
Comment from Dawn Munro
You know, I have to say I was very much enjoying this poem (I love the genre, when it doesn't scare the socks off me - LOL). Wonderful occasional rhyme, smooth flow, great presentation - until I got to that last stanza - that's when pleasant enjoyment turned to extreme joy - wow. What an ending. SO clever (if a bit sad...). This was just pure entertainment!
Good luck in the contest.
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You know, I have to say I was very much enjoying this poem (I love the genre, when it doesn't scare the socks off me - LOL). Wonderful occasional rhyme, smooth flow, great presentation - until I got to that last stanza - that's when pleasant enjoyment turned to extreme joy - wow. What an ending. SO clever (if a bit sad...). This was just pure entertainment!
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2015
Comment from CR Delport
Mikey, as always, this is very well done. Luckily I don't have much problems with ghosts. I get a visitor every now and again, but they are mostly friendly. Good luck in the contest.
Have a great day.
Christelle.
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Mikey, as always, this is very well done. Luckily I don't have much problems with ghosts. I get a visitor every now and again, but they are mostly friendly. Good luck in the contest.
Have a great day.
Christelle.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2015
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Mike,
This is great. I think you and Dean run races in the horror department. You both are so damn good!
This was a pleasure to spook my way through. Great job.
Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
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Hi, Mike,
This is great. I think you and Dean run races in the horror department. You both are so damn good!
This was a pleasure to spook my way through. Great job.
Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
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Comment Written 09-Mar-2015
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Mikey,
Great entry into the ghosts competition. The presentation of the piece is very well done with the myriad of separate images.
The idea of a disconnected man in life passing through and remaining a disconnected ghost. Only doing what he is obliged to do in life. And will do the same after death.
A really good feel to the piece which was easy to get in to. A nice sombre tone but not one of awe and shock which is normally prevalent in ghostly tales. A realisation and resignation, perhaps.
I enjoyed the piece. Nicely done.
GMG
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Hi Mikey,
Great entry into the ghosts competition. The presentation of the piece is very well done with the myriad of separate images.
The idea of a disconnected man in life passing through and remaining a disconnected ghost. Only doing what he is obliged to do in life. And will do the same after death.
A really good feel to the piece which was easy to get in to. A nice sombre tone but not one of awe and shock which is normally prevalent in ghostly tales. A realisation and resignation, perhaps.
I enjoyed the piece. Nicely done.
GMG
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Comment Written 09-Mar-2015