More than a shirt
A reason to fight - 300 words49 total reviews
Comment from vfbryant
Good for Bobby, and his adherence to conviction over political correctness. Great little illustration of the cost of conviction, and the honor inherent in suffering gladly for it.
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Good for Bobby, and his adherence to conviction over political correctness. Great little illustration of the cost of conviction, and the honor inherent in suffering gladly for it.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
Comment from l.raven
sometimes we have to fight for what we believe in...and the fathers would fought for you...did as well...we may not win physically...but we win in our hearts...and walk with pride...a story very well told...very well written...
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sometimes we have to fight for what we believe in...and the fathers would fought for you...did as well...we may not win physically...but we win in our hearts...and walk with pride...a story very well told...very well written...
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this story about standing up for values and truth, love of country. I remembered this story, I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
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this is very well written, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this story about standing up for values and truth, love of country. I remembered this story, I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
Comment from rjuselius
this is an interesting piece of literary art! i find the prose engaging and clever! indeed, very well written!
thank you for sharing!
good luck in the contest!
rebekka x
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this is an interesting piece of literary art! i find the prose engaging and clever! indeed, very well written!
thank you for sharing!
good luck in the contest!
rebekka x
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
Comment from Kenneth Schaal
He probably don't agree that Spanish/Mexican should be our primary language either. Bobby's a determined guy, and I like him. I like our flag too and don't know why displaying would ever be illegal. Best of luck in the contest. Kenny
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He probably don't agree that Spanish/Mexican should be our primary language either. Bobby's a determined guy, and I like him. I like our flag too and don't know why displaying would ever be illegal. Best of luck in the contest. Kenny
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
Comment from kiwijenny
I hope you win....I love this...I think it was the best answer to the prompt yet...the artwork cool...the bullying cruel...got to love the kid with more principles than his principal.....loved it
Good luck
God bless
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I hope you win....I love this...I think it was the best answer to the prompt yet...the artwork cool...the bullying cruel...got to love the kid with more principles than his principal.....loved it
Good luck
God bless
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
Comment from A Matter Of Words
This is an excellent story, which is very well told. Your descriptive writing had me cringing with the blood and fighting. The child standing up for his father is a wonderful touch. Great ending descripts...body was read, white, and blue. Best of luck.
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This is an excellent story, which is very well told. Your descriptive writing had me cringing with the blood and fighting. The child standing up for his father is a wonderful touch. Great ending descripts...body was read, white, and blue. Best of luck.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
Comment from Emily George
Ah yes the reverse culture issue. I like that your story addresses the subject that for some is taboo.
I believe in equality on both sides otherwise its a sham.
Great article of conviction and courage in the face of adversity.
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Ah yes the reverse culture issue. I like that your story addresses the subject that for some is taboo.
I believe in equality on both sides otherwise its a sham.
Great article of conviction and courage in the face of adversity.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
Comment from mfowler
You take the reader immediately to the action through the kicking. You build great emotive response through the actions of friends and principal as they stand back and let your central character take a beating. You explore the irony and somewhat political agenda about the inclusiveness policy over race (not exactly familiar, but I know the sort of thing). Your strongest card here, however, is your appeal to nationalism and the dogged courage of the kid as he stands up for what he believes. Well written; great use of the prompt; and a clear vote puller, I'd say.
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You take the reader immediately to the action through the kicking. You build great emotive response through the actions of friends and principal as they stand back and let your central character take a beating. You explore the irony and somewhat political agenda about the inclusiveness policy over race (not exactly familiar, but I know the sort of thing). Your strongest card here, however, is your appeal to nationalism and the dogged courage of the kid as he stands up for what he believes. Well written; great use of the prompt; and a clear vote puller, I'd say.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
Comment from Sonaleeka
I can say awesomely written and very refreshing for me .Keep going with your mind blowing writing skill.I loved reading your piece.God bless!
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I can say awesomely written and very refreshing for me .Keep going with your mind blowing writing skill.I loved reading your piece.God bless!
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
