Tiny Terrors
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "One Final Kiss"A collection of short horror fiction
40 total reviews
Comment from w.j.debi
What a scary carnival this is. What were those girls thinking? I'll bet the second one didn't go for a kiss. And you certainly give the double meaning to "breath-taking kiss."
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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What a scary carnival this is. What were those girls thinking? I'll bet the second one didn't go for a kiss. And you certainly give the double meaning to "breath-taking kiss."
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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I'm glad you picked up on that "breathtaking" part, debi. That seemed to go right over everyone else's heads.
I lost in the contest , by a single vote---again!
Thanks for the review.
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I know the feeling. I just lost by one vote in a contest. But at least you win some of the time.
Comment from royowen
A very stark entry in this 100 word dash contest, I was all excited at the beginning of this interesting and well written short story that the concluding sentence was a bit of a shock, it rocked me back on my heels! I found this to an absorbing write! Good luck Blessing, Roy.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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A very stark entry in this 100 word dash contest, I was all excited at the beginning of this interesting and well written short story that the concluding sentence was a bit of a shock, it rocked me back on my heels! I found this to an absorbing write! Good luck Blessing, Roy.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Thanks, Roy, and at least you thought so my friend. I lost by a single vote...
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I voted for you, Dean!
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thanks
Comment from PearlW
Ah, old Grim (or Grimm, if you want), doing his job from a kissing booth. That's an interesting, and creative twist, on this prompt. But, I'm not surprised.
After plunking down her two quaretrs, they kissed. -- Should that perhaps be quarters?
As always, a great pleasure to read your work.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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Ah, old Grim (or Grimm, if you want), doing his job from a kissing booth. That's an interesting, and creative twist, on this prompt. But, I'm not surprised.
After plunking down her two quaretrs, they kissed. -- Should that perhaps be quarters?
As always, a great pleasure to read your work.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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Oops...
Got it, Pearl, and thanks!
Comment from Delahay
What a "grim", no pun intended, story told in so few words. This tells of the draw of the forbidden and unknown and unknowable and of the dangers courted through curiosity. It kills, you know?
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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What a "grim", no pun intended, story told in so few words. This tells of the draw of the forbidden and unknown and unknowable and of the dangers courted through curiosity. It kills, you know?
Comment Written 08-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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Exactly, Ward. my point. And who but teens are more curious? Other than cats, of course, and we all know what curiosity does to them.
Comment from angelface2
Hm some story, but none-the-less correct for this if you count the Title. then there is 100 words. Kiss of Death would have been appropriate also, but then may have given away the plot. LOL> Miss Sally
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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Hm some story, but none-the-less correct for this if you count the Title. then there is 100 words. Kiss of Death would have been appropriate also, but then may have given away the plot. LOL> Miss Sally
Comment Written 08-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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Yeah, I tried to make it a surprise ending, but it seems the voters have seen otherwise so far.
Anyhow, thanks for reviewing this crazy thing...
Comment from livelylinda
Author: TERRIFIC! I did not expect the ending. Excellent job in few words. Leaves so much to the imagination, the story just keeps going in my mind. Good luck in the contest. livelylinda
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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Author: TERRIFIC! I did not expect the ending. Excellent job in few words. Leaves so much to the imagination, the story just keeps going in my mind. Good luck in the contest. livelylinda
Comment Written 08-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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Yeah, I'm gonna need luck, Linda. I am losing by one vote, with just hours to spare!
Thanks for the review, my friend.
Comment from DanielEkine
The words of the author keeps baffling me. An author I look up to for critics. He never falls short of his work, and he has brilliant eye for creativity.
This work joins the rank of his prestigious self.
"She'd read so much about his breathtaking kisses in literature, she had to know the truth." Great job and very compelling.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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The words of the author keeps baffling me. An author I look up to for critics. He never falls short of his work, and he has brilliant eye for creativity.
This work joins the rank of his prestigious self.
"She'd read so much about his breathtaking kisses in literature, she had to know the truth." Great job and very compelling.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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Thanks, Daniel, but it appears the voters feel otherwise at this point. I'm losing by one vote.
I do appreciate that you feel that way, at least!
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I know the voters system pretty well. Just keep writing from your heart. Forget what the voters think, so it doesn't affect your joy of writing like a wizard.
Comment from Cajungirl
What great use of every word. You've done an amazing job with the writing prompt. Talk about a twist, this is twisted. LOL
Best of luck in the contest. Your story will be hard to beat.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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What great use of every word. You've done an amazing job with the writing prompt. Talk about a twist, this is twisted. LOL
Best of luck in the contest. Your story will be hard to beat.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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I don't know about that, it's currently tied up, 4-4. But, if more voters think as you do, then it should be no problem...right?
Thanks for your kind comments, Cajungirl. I'm glad you enjoyed this crazy thing!
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Right,
you are so very welcome.
Comment from Karen B.
Yikes, this is creepy and I love the unexpected ending. Well done in just 100 words, telling a complete story. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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Yikes, this is creepy and I love the unexpected ending. Well done in just 100 words, telling a complete story. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 08-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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Thank you very much, Karen. That's what flash fiction is supposed to contain, a complete story with a surprise twist at the end. I hope I've accomplished that.
I truly appreciate your kind and encouraging review, my friend.
Comment from sibhus
Awesome, meets the prompt contest with an armada of wit. I thought the use of teenage obsession with death was the perfect twist to this story. Excellent entry for the contenst. Do I really need to say good luck.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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Awesome, meets the prompt contest with an armada of wit. I thought the use of teenage obsession with death was the perfect twist to this story. Excellent entry for the contenst. Do I really need to say good luck.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2014
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Yeah, please do, sibhus! I'll take all of the luck that I can get my talented friend, LOL!
I truly appreciate your encouraging review, and I'm glad you got the gist of this story so succinctly. You're a very keen reviewer, my friend.
Have yourself an awesome day!